Livid

wow...... just....wow... o_o

ty wishing you peace Crim :)

POWERFUL! Remind me never to make you angry... My brother lost his home to the mortgage crap a few years ago and this makes me think of what he went through. I hope the best for you! jj

ty JJ.. forgive me for this poem being unclear I was referring to a thread that I hid on accident..that made me livid..I meant the DUP as my home..again forgive me for being unclear..peace Crim

ahhhhhhh, it all becomes so clear to me now... lol.

Wonderful. I love it. You're one of the worthy ones. But you're so sweet and kind. Not an arrogance bone in you and I love it. Stay beautiful inside and out xoxoxo

ty Gg you're beautiful in my eyes and smart ass hell..ty for such a touching comment..peace Crim xoxoxox

without the passion you display
words are reduced to just something to say
without the weapon you skillfully wield
there are so many who wouldnt know how being touched really feels
& without the talent you present time & time again
the dup would be nothing more than a shelter for the mentally sick & shut in....;)

ty for the vote of confindence and a passionate comment..peace Crim

An excellent write with great expression... I have no clue of what thread made you livid, but you have released what you felt wonderfully. :)

ty Magdalena my anger is now subsiding..sigh..ty again peace Crim

Crimson.

Hope you are well. i admire how you can put your thoughts down with a fair speed and an ease.

"internal combustion
at the ideas thrown about
so thoughtlessly"

I get what you are saying here . I think though that it might be an idea to change it a little just to keep it running smooth.

"imminent internal combustion
because of ideas thrown about
 so thoughtlessly"


I'd take this stanza here and stick it in italics and between inverted commas at the top. I think it would serve you well in showing why you felt like penning this poem.

"Burn down the houses
gass them all
who don't meet the cut in your eyes"


good job Crims , shine on !

ty Eamon for you thoughtful comment and advise..I edited as you said and I agree it reads better ty..I love when you stop by..peace Crim :)

ty Christian for your thoughtful and fierce comment..peace Crim :)

This was powerful my crim.....
I love it and You ... should never be one locked out of a thread.

ty lovely lady..it turns out that I hid the thread on accident silly me..ty for your encouragement..peace Crim :)

This is why I love you and your work .. You are raw and classy and I want to suck on your literary stick.. Hi baby long time no see..

You're making me hot Mistress..missed seeing you ty for the sexy comment..peace Crim

The first half of this poem is the best. It has some really marvellous images, my favourites being the first two lines and "imminent internal combustion". You don't need the capital letters and "through" is maybe used one too many times (how about replacing it with "in" in L3?) but otherwise this was a nice read. Thanks crimsin.

Thank you Jack for the tips you're right it flows better this way and thank you for the great comment..wishing you peace Crim :)

damn that was great!

ty kindly Mememe for such a great comment..peace Crim :)

wonderful! you write with such power and emotion! fcxx

ty Fcxx for such a lovely comment..peace Crim :)

thank you kindly.. peace Crim