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On The Rocks
I see you standing
on the shore of tranquility
where lavendar moons shine bright
and maroon kisses touch lightly upon your skin
You silently call to me
as I stand at the edge of a cliff
prepared to jump into a whiskey filled ocean yet again
where I drown in my own despair
You beckon to me
with an outstrected hand
loving me as a brother
I am broken and bruised
having crashed against the rocks
of this turmultous sea of booze one more time
You gently help me to my feet
with tender words of encouragement
walk me to the shore of peace
lie me on the beach where I can rest
Show me the stepping stones
that lead me from my self inflicted pain
I tell you my feet are too shakey to walk this path
with fierce yet gentle determination you tell me
We will walk it together!
(For Christian)
on the shore of tranquility
where lavendar moons shine bright
and maroon kisses touch lightly upon your skin
You silently call to me
as I stand at the edge of a cliff
prepared to jump into a whiskey filled ocean yet again
where I drown in my own despair
You beckon to me
with an outstrected hand
loving me as a brother
I am broken and bruised
having crashed against the rocks
of this turmultous sea of booze one more time
You gently help me to my feet
with tender words of encouragement
walk me to the shore of peace
lie me on the beach where I can rest
Show me the stepping stones
that lead me from my self inflicted pain
I tell you my feet are too shakey to walk this path
with fierce yet gentle determination you tell me
We will walk it together!
(For Christian)
Published 5th Jun 2012
| Edited 15th Jun 2012
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5th Jun 2012 8:39pm
6th Jun 2012 00:16am
5th Jun 2012 9:11pm
I love the imagery and metaphors here. As long as you keep getting back up and pushing forward you hold onto determination..... An excellent write. :)
6th Jun 2012 00:17am
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5th Jun 2012 10:08pm
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6th Jun 2012 00:16am
Christian you inspire me to keep getting back on my feet..I hope you're ok i'm so proud of you for being able to make it without pain meds..You are a beautiful person you have touched my soul with your kind yet fierce words of encouragement..ty for taking these steps with me..though I fall down you've been there to help me to my feet again..I will be here for you if you ever need me as well..I hope you get better soon and your pain subsides..wishing you a speedy recovery Crim :)
6th Jun 2012 00:22am
6th Jun 2012 10:05am
This is beautiful Crim. I also have a friend who always manages to keep me from going under into the whiskey sea when life gets too much. I absolutely relate lovely lady to the words of your poem. Hugs and peace, Indie.
7th Jun 2012 6:20pm
ty so much Indie i'm so glad you too have a friend who keeps you from drowning in the whisky sea..hugs Crim :)
6th Jun 2012 10:20pm
7th Jun 2012 6:21pm
Anonymous
8th Jun 2012 3:47am
Crim
What a wonderful supportive poem offering your help to your friend.
Well written and flows smoothly
It shines with empathy
Peace
Kitty
What a wonderful supportive poem offering your help to your friend.
Well written and flows smoothly
It shines with empathy
Peace
Kitty
8th Jun 2012 6:34pm
ty Kitty for the lovely comment though it's my friend who has been giving me support..wishing you peace kind lady..peace Crim :)
8th Jun 2012 6:26pm
Wow Crim...such a beautiful and fitting piece of art you have here. Poignant with fantastic imagery and great flow.
Quite touching.
Quite touching.
8th Jun 2012 6:34pm
14th Jun 2012 1:36pm
The taste of color...a beautiful piece of heartspeak.
I find it warming to see so many talented people engaging each other with genuine respect, admiration and care.
I find it warming to see so many talented people engaging each other with genuine respect, admiration and care.
15th Jun 2012 8:16pm
15th Jun 2012 10:03am
Beautiful. I love the imagery, the story, the meaning, and the connection between the two people. Love it!
15th Jun 2012 8:17pm
Anonymous
19th Jun 2012 5:13am
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19th Jun 2012 3:25pm
thank you Christian you always remind me how beautiful sobriety is..peace Crim :)
8th Jul 2012 1:26am
7th Oct 2013 6:11pm
Just swinging by to tell you that I still love this. Thank you for your kind and beautiful words for me.
Gemini
Gemini
7th Oct 2013 8:56pm
