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Ms Prose
The most disturbing slums
With many problems
About to face my clone
An open street I stood alone
Bounded by earlier defeat
Loud and clear I need not repeat
When the only thing that pops into the mind
Is also something you've to write
By so doing..
I got seduced by a beautiful maiden, who called herself Ms Prose..
We tied the knot in a shocking narrative of instant rise and fall..
I dialled it rang she picked and hang
Deliberately, she went missing my single most important call..
I have since removed the ring I need a divorce
I wrote the prose
I read and found it not so close
Am so depressed, tempted I should increase my dose
For all the no good things she did showing no remorse
I have since removed the ring I need a divorce
I'm entirely sure
My mind is not pure
I proceed with no delay
Inside my head a very disturbing burglary
I couldn't grace the throne
I asked myself am I this prone?
My territory is all but a breach
So my therapist
Do not resume to preach!
I simply entered a wedding unceremoniously
Just so you know this is an entirely one side of this story
With many problems
About to face my clone
An open street I stood alone
Bounded by earlier defeat
Loud and clear I need not repeat
When the only thing that pops into the mind
Is also something you've to write
By so doing..
I got seduced by a beautiful maiden, who called herself Ms Prose..
We tied the knot in a shocking narrative of instant rise and fall..
I dialled it rang she picked and hang
Deliberately, she went missing my single most important call..
I have since removed the ring I need a divorce
I wrote the prose
I read and found it not so close
Am so depressed, tempted I should increase my dose
For all the no good things she did showing no remorse
I have since removed the ring I need a divorce
I'm entirely sure
My mind is not pure
I proceed with no delay
Inside my head a very disturbing burglary
I couldn't grace the throne
I asked myself am I this prone?
My territory is all but a breach
So my therapist
Do not resume to preach!
I simply entered a wedding unceremoniously
Just so you know this is an entirely one side of this story
Published 23rd Jan 2025
| Edited 3rd Feb 2025
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23rd Jan 2025 3:26pm
23rd Jan 2025 3:45pm
23rd Jan 2025 4:56pm
Poem's rawness and abruptness force the reader to confront the harsh realities of anxiety and its potential consequences, making it a powerful and thought-provoking piece.
23rd Jan 2025 4:57pm
23rd Jan 2025 5:35pm
Hello Numer90,
For me this was a skillful soulful piece, there are depths and metaphors hidden in the stitches of these words. Your theme of making prose a counter part was intriguing. The opening stanza is extremely powerful! Greetings and blessings, Rianne
For me this was a skillful soulful piece, there are depths and metaphors hidden in the stitches of these words. Your theme of making prose a counter part was intriguing. The opening stanza is extremely powerful! Greetings and blessings, Rianne
23rd Jan 2025 6:26pm
Hi Anne I'm very glad you stop by to read. Thanks for your generous response. I feel it
25th Jan 2025 3:11pm
I found that second to last stanza relatable, we truly know ourselves and what we are capable of.
Great write.
Great write.
25th Jan 2025 6:13pm
26th Jan 2025 6:15pm
People pass through our lives. I no longer hold on to hard to anyone. Come and go. Cum and go. Be it a night or 21 yrs - it ends. I longer cry over it.
26th Jan 2025 6:17pm
26th Jan 2025 8:16pm
An amusing personification of and metaphor for the creative process. I think it would look better without the italicisation and bold font, but that’s just me.
Thank you very much.. Amig0!
And even though It's just you, let it be known I feel you and your honorable, insightful suggestions.
And even though It's just you, let it be known I feel you and your honorable, insightful suggestions.
