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Single Tear
I have shed a single tear
That is all I have left inside
If wellspring hope eternal
Then all my hope has died
Before this last tear has dropped,
into the earth's heart.
I have one wish for you, dear soul
That your love will never part.
That is all I have left inside
If wellspring hope eternal
Then all my hope has died
Before this last tear has dropped,
into the earth's heart.
I have one wish for you, dear soul
That your love will never part.
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8th Sep 2024 00:07am
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8th Sep 2024 1:43pm
I am sure that sadness will fast vanish, as you are an optimistic poet with a strong resilience and a broad heart..
Write it in poetry, its always a good relief.Hamid.
Write it in poetry, its always a good relief.Hamid.
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8th Sep 2024 1:55pm
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8th Sep 2024 4:24pm
The image of shedding one's last tear invokes such a feeling of love & grief. Beautifully done
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8th Sep 2024 4:27pm
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8th Sep 2024 4:33pm
Beautifully written:)
Especially using the earth's heart.
Great message as to keeping faith with your soul.
Especially using the earth's heart.
Great message as to keeping faith with your soul.
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8th Sep 2024 4:35pm
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Powerful and uplifting write, Fia. Nicely done per usual. Always dig your musings. Appreciate you.
DL
DL
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9th Sep 2024 11:05am
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9th Sep 2024 6:22pm
Very cute. It's also a good example of why first line capitalization originally derived from antique poetry (no-one knows for sure why or how it started) doesn't cut it when modern line breaks work more effectively.
I'd also change "dropped"" for fallen" only because it frowned at me when I read this aloud and I'd prefer "a single wish" to the less exclusive "one" but kudos to you, Fia for a charming concept.
Best ~ Abra
I'd also change "dropped"" for fallen" only because it frowned at me when I read this aloud and I'd prefer "a single wish" to the less exclusive "one" but kudos to you, Fia for a charming concept.
Best ~ Abra
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Thank you Abra you will see below what I think you meant. A friend helped me with this.
I have shed a single tear,
That's all I have left inside.
If wellspring hopes eternal,
Then all my hope has died!
Before this last tear has fallen,
Into Earth's swollen heart,
I have one wish for you, dear soul,
That your love will never part.
I have shed a single tear,
That's all I have left inside.
If wellspring hopes eternal,
Then all my hope has died!
Before this last tear has fallen,
Into Earth's swollen heart,
I have one wish for you, dear soul,
That your love will never part.
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Understanding line breaks is important, notice you don't need punctuation because the natural pauses do the work for you.
Here's how I'd write your poem.
I shed a single tear
the last I held inside
If wellspring hopes eternal
then all my hope has died
Before this last tear falls
into Earth's poor broken heart
grant a single wish dear soul
that your love shall never part
FYI some people say a tear from your right eye is one of joy and the left eye tear is from pain.
~A
Here's how I'd write your poem.
I shed a single tear
the last I held inside
If wellspring hopes eternal
then all my hope has died
Before this last tear falls
into Earth's poor broken heart
grant a single wish dear soul
that your love shall never part
FYI some people say a tear from your right eye is one of joy and the left eye tear is from pain.
~A
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9th Sep 2024 8:21pm
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15th Sep 2024 6:34pm
I haven't cried since I was 13, and that was over a silly girl.
I envy those who are able to cry, for they can feel something I haven't felt in many years.
Xxx
I envy those who are able to cry, for they can feel something I haven't felt in many years.
Xxx
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15th Sep 2024 6:46pm