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Interview with Deception
see me...
I lie in the fog,
calamitous breath
of maritime maidens
singing ships to their death.
My village looks out from the cliffs
where the sea
blots the light of the sun
with its grey canopy.
The lost souls of children
dismissed in despair
envelop my dwelling
as mist in the air.
My garden remembers
a kiss by the gate,
a handful of silver,
a fisherman's fate.
Ghosts amble through halls
bearing semblance to men
who gambled for garments,
interpreting sin.
My truth is a sentiment,
impenitent wail...
assembly of fury
enchanted by spell.
The mighty embrace me
as means to an end.
My daylight is darkness,
my reality, pretend.
Join me into passage
where the Jordon runs wide
to a place where collusion
and conscience confide.
Make right what you ponder
as evil ______ Instill
the power of perception
and guise of free will.
What God once provided
turned flower to thorn.
He's shedding his skin
in the dust you were born.
Though knowledge and beauty
embody the throne,
the spirit requires
what cannot be shown.
It longingly gazes
from Camelot's view
at boats in the harbor
devoid of their crew.
Maniacal melodies
resound from the shore
where innocence wandered
just moments before.
She slipped off her dress,
swam out to the stones,
assembling her nest
with a bounty of bones.
Her footsteps are vanquished
by incoming tide.
Subversion becomes her
repentance denied.
Published 15th Jun 2024
Author's Note
Personification Poetry
Gothic Poetry Contest
Gothic Poetry Contest
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15th Jun 2024 10:42pm
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15th Jun 2024 10:58pm
Favorite stanza
"It longingly gazes
from Camelot's view
at boats in the harbor
devoid of their crew."
Cameote's view from high above. Lovely.
Great rhyme scheme
Fia xoxo
"It longingly gazes
from Camelot's view
at boats in the harbor
devoid of their crew."
Cameote's view from high above. Lovely.
Great rhyme scheme
Fia xoxo
16th Jun 2024 00:02am
Girl, I'm loving you so much...
Thanks for that specific line thing. I'm always looking for what works.
Meg
xoxoxo
Thanks for that specific line thing. I'm always looking for what works.
Meg
xoxoxo
15th Jun 2024 11:07pm
What a hook the first stanza is! Beautiful piece of poetry! Certainly a competition winner!
16th Jun 2024 3:26am
15th Jun 2024 11:16pm
I don't know how this could lose. Great pic to go along with a great poem. !st stanza is awesome to start with.
16th Jun 2024 3:28am
Wow, thank you so much, Tim. I'm so thrilled you like the package. Thanks for that amazing comment!
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15th Jun 2024 11:47pm
Gothic
And Homeric
Very nice blending.
And again it is obvious that you are skilled and artistic.
Love the way your words bring such vivid imagery with them
And Homeric
Very nice blending.
And again it is obvious that you are skilled and artistic.
Love the way your words bring such vivid imagery with them
16th Jun 2024 3:30am
Love the way your comments put a smile on my face, FATBOY. So awesome! Thank you for all that.
16th Jun 2024 1:26am
16th Jun 2024 3:32am
Awe, you are the sweetest, PS. I'm just glad you like my stuff. You're an amazing writer, so it means a ton to me.
16th Jun 2024 3:31am
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16th Jun 2024 3:52am
The vibe of this write coincides perfectly with the pic.
Lots of great imagery and rhyming:)
Great stuff!
Lots of great imagery and rhyming:)
Great stuff!
16th Jun 2024 5:08am
Thanks so much for checking this out, Adelphina. I really love your comment!
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16th Jun 2024 10:44am
It rhymes well
Dark and beautiful
Exquisite use of words
Keep going Meg
See you around ;)
Dark and beautiful
Exquisite use of words
Keep going Meg
See you around ;)
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3rd Sep 2024 12:19pm
Beautiful poetry. Your first stanza is a powerful start.
“I lie in the fog,
calamitous breath
of maritime maidens
singing ships to their death”
Love it!
“I lie in the fog,
calamitous breath
of maritime maidens
singing ships to their death”
Love it!
