Bleeding Out

Tragically beautiful

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Thank you.
Not very good at Haiku

That's poetic.

Thank you so much, Verdonna!

Thankfully there is a nurse nearby.

Excellent Haiku.

Thank you so much, Leonardo!  Thanks for reading!

Holy shit! This was fucking magic!

The conceit/trope was so brilliant I want to throw something. The seeping of sap from a tree, used to express loss. There are so many layers in this.

A maple tree stands tall and strong no matter what you do to it. You have to hurt it, rip into it, to get the part you want. And the tree remains stoic, unmoving as you do.

To personify the tree and make that seeping loss a sorrow… chef’s fucking kiss.

Wow, I'm blown away by this, Betty.
You're one of the most brilliant poets on this site, so that means a lot to me, thank you!  

Meg

Wow, love this. Dk

I'm so glad, girl.
Thank you!

For what it's worth, I find this little jewel to be absolutely spot on. The allusion to the season of the year, which I've always understood to be a sine qua non of haiku is there, as is the set-up in the first line, and the sudden reversal in the third.

And to drink those sweet syrup tears? I think of the Death Head's Moth in "Silence of the Lambs" and this little jewel stuns with its simplicity, economy, and just how much you managed to pack in those few short, sweet, caustic syllables. Just...brilliant.

I'm no authority on anything poetic, but this is one of the best little haiku I've come across in a very long time. I'm gonna save this. If you didn't win the contest, ya got robbed.

Well done. And, yeah, you got a Betty. I've had a few and, yeah, I cherish them.

Hey Mrd!
Wow, I'm speechless.  I really treasure this critique.  It's absolutely amazing.  Thank you so much for reading and sharing.  You put a huge smile on my face!  I'm so glad you liked this.

Meg