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DEER
He was walking ever so
carefully down the winding
road
The most alluring of milky scents
wafted through the crisp
air
A blue roaring beast slowed
to a full stop with light brighter than
day
Now he could only smell
the rough choke of
diesel
He didn't even bother to
leap away as he was
disappointed
There was no collision and
he'd rather die than lose scent of
rose-milk
carefully down the winding
road
The most alluring of milky scents
wafted through the crisp
air
A blue roaring beast slowed
to a full stop with light brighter than
day
Now he could only smell
the rough choke of
diesel
He didn't even bother to
leap away as he was
disappointed
There was no collision and
he'd rather die than lose scent of
rose-milk
Published 27th Mar 2024
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27th Mar 2024 4:37pm
Great description & presentation of your poem my friend. I like the fonts and visual to. Nice job!
27th Mar 2024 7:32pm
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6th Apr 2024 2:29pm
Thanks Duende <3 I never thought of it like that, thank you for this insight as I continue to learn more about poetry! And now I know what an ode is :)
6th Apr 2024 2:43pm
7th Apr 2024 2:47am
@Duende Hahaha awesome lol, yeah I'm a total newbie and clueless about stuff. Came to DUP to learn and so far... it's been absolutely fantastic!!
7th Apr 2024 12:54pm
So great to hear your experiences with this tight knit community are fantastic! Trust me, when I joined I had no idea what I was doing :-D
7th Apr 2024 3:50am
Greetings Kii Ahn;
How are you... since likes are kept anonymous here, wanted to let you know that liked this write very much... You described the story very well, he;[ed me feel that was there... However, throughout the write, kept thinkin, man, slow roast that puppy, an bet that meat would just fall right off the bone... Ooo, time to make some tamales, hehehe... Take good care: deadwolf
How are you... since likes are kept anonymous here, wanted to let you know that liked this write very much... You described the story very well, he;[ed me feel that was there... However, throughout the write, kept thinkin, man, slow roast that puppy, an bet that meat would just fall right off the bone... Ooo, time to make some tamales, hehehe... Take good care: deadwolf
Hola deadwolf,
I'm happy that you enjoyed this one and I just want you to know that you are totally right. He would be delicious as a pot roast or in some tacos man
now we're hungry. yayyyyy haha
I'm happy that you enjoyed this one and I just want you to know that you are totally right. He would be delicious as a pot roast or in some tacos man
now we're hungry. yayyyyy haha
