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Autumn
Contemplating the fall
Of the withering leaves
Onto the broken sidewalks
In the city
As I lay here pained
My ankle twisted and sprained
I called into work
Stayed in bed to recover
Downside: sprained ankle
Upside: didn’t have to go into the office
Things are looking up this fall
Of the withering leaves
Onto the broken sidewalks
In the city
As I lay here pained
My ankle twisted and sprained
I called into work
Stayed in bed to recover
Downside: sprained ankle
Upside: didn’t have to go into the office
Things are looking up this fall
Published 26th Nov 2023
Author's Note
Had a better poem but forgot it before I could write it down
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27th Nov 2023 1:10pm
Nice to see you back Caxton! I love the twisted ( pun intended ) humor in this! Because you have requested honest critique, I would lose "the" in L2/3 since you're using it in L1/4.
6th Dec 2023 1:17am
16th Jun 2024 7:03am
The comedic use of perspective (situational, seasonal and directional) in this piece brings a whole new meaning to Nature vs Nurture for me. Silver linings on black clouds, eh?
