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Redemption isn't easy
A man must choose
Then answer to himself
It must come from within
No religion will help
No homilies
I'm a silent cowboy
Sheriff on patrol
Artist on the perimeter
A writer for all seasons
Strive always for goodness
Like every man
Subject to desires
My face
Never to be on a postage stamp
I'll ride incognito
You'll recognize me
Sunday morning
Faithful dog by my side
At dawn
Greeting the fruit man
Waiting for the bakery to open
Warm rolls
Crossiants and scones
Routines and chapters
Goodness comes in all flavors
7 out of 10 Commandments met
Any given day
I'm just a man
I'm flawed
Yet I try
Try some more I will
My mentor said
"It's a long game"
Those words carry me
I'm introducing myself again
To you ....
Then answer to himself
It must come from within
No religion will help
No homilies
I'm a silent cowboy
Sheriff on patrol
Artist on the perimeter
A writer for all seasons
Strive always for goodness
Like every man
Subject to desires
My face
Never to be on a postage stamp
I'll ride incognito
You'll recognize me
Sunday morning
Faithful dog by my side
At dawn
Greeting the fruit man
Waiting for the bakery to open
Warm rolls
Crossiants and scones
Routines and chapters
Goodness comes in all flavors
7 out of 10 Commandments met
Any given day
I'm just a man
I'm flawed
Yet I try
Try some more I will
My mentor said
"It's a long game"
Those words carry me
I'm introducing myself again
To you ....
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Re. Redemption isn't easy
12th Nov 2023 1:04pm
So nice to meet you😊
Again
I’m gonna get all mushy - I’ve always admired the way you expose yourself. You’ve been an inspiration to me. You’ve always been supportive, encouraging and honest with me. I appreciate you and I’m grateful to have met you here.
This poem rocks.
HUMONGOUS LIKE
Again
I’m gonna get all mushy - I’ve always admired the way you expose yourself. You’ve been an inspiration to me. You’ve always been supportive, encouraging and honest with me. I appreciate you and I’m grateful to have met you here.
This poem rocks.
HUMONGOUS LIKE
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Re: Re. Redemption isn't easy
12th Nov 2023 2:35pm
The pleasure is all mine Mary
I'm officially on DUP 10 years now this month. It's been a good place for me and your support and kind words inspire me to stay !!
I love your comment and appreciate the RL.
Validation means everything to me and you are a great piece of this wonderful puzzle of love, lust and life.
BIG THANKS
I'm officially on DUP 10 years now this month. It's been a good place for me and your support and kind words inspire me to stay !!
I love your comment and appreciate the RL.
Validation means everything to me and you are a great piece of this wonderful puzzle of love, lust and life.
BIG THANKS
Re: Re. Redemption isn't easy
12th Nov 2023 2:45pm
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12th Nov 2023 2:49pm
Re. Redemption isn't easy
12th Nov 2023 2:04pm
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12th Nov 2023 2:36pm
Re. Redemption isn't easy
12th Nov 2023 3:05pm
I can't say I know you, but we certainly speak some of the same language. Nice to meet you, I sincerely hope we become lasting friends. I feel we both had felt gut punches and had our hearts checked hard against the boards of love and life. Still, you speak your truth with grit and a sweet defiance. Do please continue, it inspires.
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Re: Re. Redemption isn't easy
12th Nov 2023 3:09pm
That's a great comment Thor
Yes, my head has been bloodied many times checked into the boards. Sometimes I wondered if I was starting to like it ?
Gave me so much to write about.
Definitely feel the fast friends vibe and I appreciate your visit !!
Yes, my head has been bloodied many times checked into the boards. Sometimes I wondered if I was starting to like it ?
Gave me so much to write about.
Definitely feel the fast friends vibe and I appreciate your visit !!
Re. Redemption isn't easy
Anonymous
12th Nov 2023 3:48pm
Direct and delightful. Direct and damn good. What I'm trying to say is this is really cool, as are you.
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Re: Re. Redemption isn't easy
12th Nov 2023 4:50pm
WOW Pink
Gonna have trouble walking through the door with this swollen head !!
That's a lot of praise.
Had a few things happen lately and it gave me pause to look at myself top to bottom so this write is the result.
I appreciate your comment and RL.
Means a lot to me.
Thx ❤
YOU ROCK TOO !
Gonna have trouble walking through the door with this swollen head !!
That's a lot of praise.
Had a few things happen lately and it gave me pause to look at myself top to bottom so this write is the result.
I appreciate your comment and RL.
Means a lot to me.
Thx ❤
YOU ROCK TOO !
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12th Nov 2023 4:10pm
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Re: Re. Redemption isn't easy
12th Nov 2023 4:54pm
Thanks for your great comment Philis.
Means a lot to me and I'm glad I have had a positive influence on you. Also the anniversary wishes. ❤
I have no plans to stop, so you'll keep seeing me around this corral.
Appreciate you !!
Means a lot to me and I'm glad I have had a positive influence on you. Also the anniversary wishes. ❤
I have no plans to stop, so you'll keep seeing me around this corral.
Appreciate you !!
Re. Redemption isn't easy
12th Nov 2023 6:31pm
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12th Nov 2023 6:42pm
Re. Redemption isn't easy
12th Nov 2023 9:06pm
All it takes is looking in the mirror every morning, and deciding which side of you do you want to highlight towards the world's eyes. We make and remake ourselves whenever we feel a change is due.
Your write is so positive. Down to earth humanity looks good on you Gary.
Your write is so positive. Down to earth humanity looks good on you Gary.
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Re: Re. Redemption isn't easy
12th Nov 2023 9:23pm
Had a little incident this past week that caused some distress. Was teetering on the edge for awhile and then I lost my balance. Fortunately it worked itself out but I decided to look under my hood. Good thing too, was running on empty all over that engine.
Appreciate the kind words Mark.
Thinks looking up again !!
Thx
Appreciate the kind words Mark.
Thinks looking up again !!
Thx
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Re: Re. Redemption isn't easy
12th Nov 2023 10:46pm
Wow, I never expected any praise.
I thought most would say it's about time I repent. Maybe I see myself a little different now. Lots of things appear before me and I'm taking notice of my behavior for better or worse, hopefully better ...
Thanks P
You rocked me
💜
I thought most would say it's about time I repent. Maybe I see myself a little different now. Lots of things appear before me and I'm taking notice of my behavior for better or worse, hopefully better ...
Thanks P
You rocked me
💜
Re. Redemption isn't easy
13th Nov 2023 00:00am
Happy anniversary to my favourite cowboy. I probably wouldn't still be around here if you weren't, truly.
You often tell me I've changed since we met, because I use more dirty words now. 😆 Well, you have too. I won't embarrass you by going into details, except to say I always suspected you were a good guy under the city grime. Otherwise I would have told you to fuck off pretty early on. 😉
Thanks for being a good friend and constant encourager. I like your flavour of goodness, and I'm glad you're finding a little grace for yourself. 70% is as decent a grade as any of us can hope for.
BIG MUSHY LIKE
and RL whether you like it or not
❤️❤️❤️k
You often tell me I've changed since we met, because I use more dirty words now. 😆 Well, you have too. I won't embarrass you by going into details, except to say I always suspected you were a good guy under the city grime. Otherwise I would have told you to fuck off pretty early on. 😉
Thanks for being a good friend and constant encourager. I like your flavour of goodness, and I'm glad you're finding a little grace for yourself. 70% is as decent a grade as any of us can hope for.
BIG MUSHY LIKE
and RL whether you like it or not
❤️❤️❤️k
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Re: Re. Redemption isn't easy
Good Gravy
This redemption stuff is wild.
Think how much I could have gotten laid if I had known it sooner ....
City grime ... I like that
Yeah, trying to change a few things, nothing wrong with a few tweaks... hmm that could be fun in other ways
I corrupted you a little
You needed it.
You're much more fun cursing all the time..
Thx Red
You're a great friend
Appreciate the RL YO
Lots of ❌❤💯💥😍🙃🤖⛔
This redemption stuff is wild.
Think how much I could have gotten laid if I had known it sooner ....
City grime ... I like that
Yeah, trying to change a few things, nothing wrong with a few tweaks... hmm that could be fun in other ways
I corrupted you a little
You needed it.
You're much more fun cursing all the time..
Thx Red
You're a great friend
Appreciate the RL YO
Lots of ❌❤💯💥😍🙃🤖⛔
Re. Redemption isn't easy
13th Nov 2023 00:20am
Re: Re. Redemption isn't easy
13th Nov 2023 00:30am
Helloooo ML
BIG THANKS
I'm new and improved
Wonder how long it can last
Thx babe
BIG THANKS
I'm new and improved
Wonder how long it can last
Thx babe
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13th Nov 2023 00:36am
Re: Re. Redemption isn't easy
13th Nov 2023 00:40am
Yeah
It's a trial run
No predictions but I made some good changes I think..
Thx for the RL
Validation
It's a trial run
No predictions but I made some good changes I think..
Thx for the RL
Validation
Re: Re. Redemption isn't easy
13th Nov 2023 00:45am
Re: Re. Redemption isn't easy
13th Nov 2023 3:04am
Yes
It can be
I've always said repetition is the death of hope so I'm getting it right while the going is good ...
Thx Alison
It can be
I've always said repetition is the death of hope so I'm getting it right while the going is good ...
Thx Alison
Re: Re. Redemption isn't easy
14th Nov 2023 8:54pm
I have a lil redemption going on as well, myself. May we both be the best we can be! <3
Youre welcome, babe<3
Youre welcome, babe<3
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14th Nov 2023 9:37pm
Re. Redemption isn't easy
13th Nov 2023 00:47am
Holy crap - 10 years!!!
That's a great accomplishment.
Happy Anniversary:)
It's nice meeting you again. And thanks for sharing your day to day - you made it interesting and delightful to read.
A new discover in each line.
Hang in there - reinventing yourself takes balls buddy. You can't change the world but you can take a look
at yourself and adjust:)
That's a great accomplishment.
Happy Anniversary:)
It's nice meeting you again. And thanks for sharing your day to day - you made it interesting and delightful to read.
A new discover in each line.
Hang in there - reinventing yourself takes balls buddy. You can't change the world but you can take a look
at yourself and adjust:)
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Re: Re. Redemption isn't easy
13th Nov 2023 3:09am
Wow Adel
Look at you
Looking mighty fine in that bright lights color..
Damn
I most appreciate your comment A.
10 years is a long time but it goes fast when you're having fun and living withn a wonderful community of writers.
Hope there's many more poems to come and more surprises...
Thx
Look at you
Looking mighty fine in that bright lights color..
Damn
I most appreciate your comment A.
10 years is a long time but it goes fast when you're having fun and living withn a wonderful community of writers.
Hope there's many more poems to come and more surprises...
Thx
Re. Redemption isn't easy
13th Nov 2023 3:36am
Dear PS,
A hearty congratulations and standing ovation. I totally Love/Dig this poem. You have bared your soul in this one and it is a joy when you sherif this site with your art and writes. xx
H🌷
A hearty congratulations and standing ovation. I totally Love/Dig this poem. You have bared your soul in this one and it is a joy when you sherif this site with your art and writes. xx
H🌷
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Re: Re. Redemption isn't easy
13th Nov 2023 3:47am
Dear H,
I'm glad this poem hit your sweet spot, there's no better place to be.
Whether it's policing the minds and souls here or drinking quietly in the soon to be twilight, I take my role seriously.
Made a few changes and trying to keep my pen at the ready and my paintbrush on overdrive, it's good to be here in the Underground !!
Many thanks always for your support H, means the world to me.
🤠🖤💥💯
I'm glad this poem hit your sweet spot, there's no better place to be.
Whether it's policing the minds and souls here or drinking quietly in the soon to be twilight, I take my role seriously.
Made a few changes and trying to keep my pen at the ready and my paintbrush on overdrive, it's good to be here in the Underground !!
Many thanks always for your support H, means the world to me.
🤠🖤💥💯
Re. Redemption isn't easy
13th Nov 2023 8:14am
No doubt PS...
I was just thinking, a bit earlier...
In regard to the writing...
And all things...
Tis The Marathon...
Like...
I literally want to write a whole book in a day...
Or die trying...
And, yes, so much so in one's quest for redemption,
which can be complicated, when reliant upon external systems of consideration...
Like...
Ok...
Let us say one: Made a mistake.
Well...
Let us say one incited the scorn of another...
There may be so many factors to consider...
The question arises: Where does the onus lie.?.
Tis perhaps complicated, but...
Each individual quest is beautiful...
I suppose, in my own quest for redemption,
I became...
Angry with the commonly accepted
administrative structure of: This so called redemption.
But this line of thinking leads to anarchy...
...
I just know I have seen you apologize to others,
which is difficult to do...
And you have tried to stop drinking...
I admire those things about you...
Win-lose or draw...
So just keep shooting from the hip, like a true cowboy....
Ahahaha
That cracked me up to type...
And I wasn't going to post this but fuck it: Generals should lead from the frontlines
I was just thinking, a bit earlier...
In regard to the writing...
And all things...
Tis The Marathon...
Like...
I literally want to write a whole book in a day...
Or die trying...
And, yes, so much so in one's quest for redemption,
which can be complicated, when reliant upon external systems of consideration...
Like...
Ok...
Let us say one: Made a mistake.
Well...
Let us say one incited the scorn of another...
There may be so many factors to consider...
The question arises: Where does the onus lie.?.
Tis perhaps complicated, but...
Each individual quest is beautiful...
I suppose, in my own quest for redemption,
I became...
Angry with the commonly accepted
administrative structure of: This so called redemption.
But this line of thinking leads to anarchy...
...
I just know I have seen you apologize to others,
which is difficult to do...
And you have tried to stop drinking...
I admire those things about you...
Win-lose or draw...
So just keep shooting from the hip, like a true cowboy....
Ahahaha
That cracked me up to type...
And I wasn't going to post this but fuck it: Generals should lead from the frontlines
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Re. Redemption isn't easy
13th Nov 2023 12:03pm
Wow Cipher
I don't what to say
Usually I'm not short on words
Often perhaps I say to much
True dat
I went to far with someone that I care about greatly
Said things I shouldn't have
Wreckage followed
But ...
After consideration I found words of apology and then more words of contemplation and I'm trying to change a few things hence the redemption.
The thing about redemption is it can't be one email, it has to be a movement within yourself. Thats where the hard part lies ...
As far as drinking goes, I'm on and off the sauce. I know where I went wrong there too. I can drink a beer with dinner and I can drink one whiskey over ice. But the moment I top off that one drink, my evil begins. Then I want more. We know how that ends. So I'm redeeming there too, most people are happy about it.
I'm glad you and I are on good terms again.
I'm a sales guy, I depend on my customers to eat and they depend on me to get there with their order on time. A lot of stuff can be worked our with good relationships. Often the truth works, sometimes though the truth is too ugly so you have to lie to protect as I call it. Reminds me of cop cars that have a saying printed on them "To serve and protect" ....
Thank you Sir Cipher
I appreciate your comment
I appreciate you !!
I don't what to say
Usually I'm not short on words
Often perhaps I say to much
True dat
I went to far with someone that I care about greatly
Said things I shouldn't have
Wreckage followed
But ...
After consideration I found words of apology and then more words of contemplation and I'm trying to change a few things hence the redemption.
The thing about redemption is it can't be one email, it has to be a movement within yourself. Thats where the hard part lies ...
As far as drinking goes, I'm on and off the sauce. I know where I went wrong there too. I can drink a beer with dinner and I can drink one whiskey over ice. But the moment I top off that one drink, my evil begins. Then I want more. We know how that ends. So I'm redeeming there too, most people are happy about it.
I'm glad you and I are on good terms again.
I'm a sales guy, I depend on my customers to eat and they depend on me to get there with their order on time. A lot of stuff can be worked our with good relationships. Often the truth works, sometimes though the truth is too ugly so you have to lie to protect as I call it. Reminds me of cop cars that have a saying printed on them "To serve and protect" ....
Thank you Sir Cipher
I appreciate your comment
I appreciate you !!
Re. Redemption isn't easy
13th Nov 2023 2:53pm
Re: Re. Redemption isn't easy
13th Nov 2023 7:15pm
I was humbled so I turned Iround into a literary effort.
All is well now..
I learned a few things too.
Many thanks for the street cred and RL PoH
I appreciate you!
All is well now..
I learned a few things too.
Many thanks for the street cred and RL PoH
I appreciate you!
Re. Redemption isn't easy
14th Nov 2023 2:10pm
To err is human to forgive is divine, by William Shakespeare. Keep on writing.
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14th Nov 2023 4:03pm
Re. Redemption isn't easy
16th Nov 2023 1:38pm
I enjoyed the bakery section of your write, the way it is described, no dramas, just contentment. 😊
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16th Nov 2023 1:40pm
Re. Redemption isn't easy
17th Nov 2023 00:43am
We saw pt.2 on your latest and knew that we had to read pt.1 first. This piece makes us think of simple, we're a country boy born and bred. we love simple and no matter where we have lived, we have always lived simple. This is a tight piece dude, congrats
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Re. Redemption isn't easy
17th Nov 2023 00:53am
It's pretty wild ME
Wrote something to hold myself accountable because I know I'll be tempted to stray.
So far so good. I keep reminding myself that I wrote it and I mean it even though I'm pretty fragile in that regard ...
Part 2 is more of a travelog in my day to day ...
Appreciate the nod as always Sir ME
Wrote something to hold myself accountable because I know I'll be tempted to stray.
So far so good. I keep reminding myself that I wrote it and I mean it even though I'm pretty fragile in that regard ...
Part 2 is more of a travelog in my day to day ...
Appreciate the nod as always Sir ME
Re. Redemption isn't easy
19th Nov 2023 5:14am
Poet, this has depth and honesty through and through.
Well done sir. Respect.
BL, RL.
Well done sir. Respect.
BL, RL.
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Re: Re. Redemption isn't easy
19th Nov 2023 11:39am
BIG BIG THANKS WALLY
Be sure to check out part 2 in your travels.
Onward to destiny ....
Be sure to check out part 2 in your travels.
Onward to destiny ....