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The Rose Of Hearts
No doubt that the earth is round,
it rolls on, oblivious to my travel.
Without a rocket, I've walked
the no ways of this planet,
even just to touch the moon.
To say it's a real thing,
like all these months loving you.
I didn't know how heavy
that moon would be.
I know it is full of things
that people dream about
when they're alone.
And the day the moon
finally gets weary, and
I'm there to pick it up
like it's a tired dog,
full and sated all the same,
I'll carry it back to the house
and wipe it down with a warm cloth,
set it by the fire
and let it be a hundred colors.
It won't rest long, on the blanket,
because my patience has to be repaid.
I will dump it's contents,
disregarding those loves captured
that weren't involved with my own.
Illuminated by the natural light
of the fireplace,
can the tiny creatures
that lived inside us, called souls
-Before stolen, hidden in the moon,
be seen scattered upon the blanket,
perhaps to scurry away
or into the finality of the fire.
I've no right to judge
and no more compassion to choose
for them the fate that they decide.
Unprepared to be dumped like this,
maybe some will scatter back into the air
to try again as dragonflies in a busy evening.
No, I will find what has become
of you and I and love
in this great opened egg.
I won't mind the clutter of others
that we've tumbled with or around,
in the 'Before us'.
Those are all just fragments now.
Just fish-bones, tossed out
with the old news.
Yet it's so easy to set you apart,
from such commotion.
The brightest always are.
No matter how subtle,
rose-gold outshines what's brass.
It has no fate of tarnishing.
~
And the moon didn't crush me
when I carried it home,
once it fell finally, to exactly
the spot I could be upon
and know it wasn't just luck.
I lost count long ago
of all the horizons
that the moon went to hide behind.
It's vampiric, always hungry,
to steal the blood of love.
But wise enough to go rest, at day
and digest such weight.
It did feel that I carried all love,
all the loves sacrificed
for the sake of fragments of time,
that people threw out
into the night sky,
pretending it didn't hurt anymore.
It doesn't hurt me, though,
loving you with this thorn
centered in my chest.
It's the old pains in our hearts,
torn but mending by the moment.
I accept it, because it too
is a part of us, not on purpose
and not unwarned.
Some things must break
to grow again, anew.
My arms didn't flinch
and I let it in too, to have you.
I will rest there, with you
upon the beige blanket that curls
in colors of yellow and red,
until the orange of finally.
We can share that warm cloth
and push away the broken mess
of the moon, with our feet.
Let it go sulk
and wear that frown
permanently.
~~~
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Re. The Rose Of Hearts
16th Sep 2023 3:57pm
Re: Re. The Rose Of Hearts
16th Sep 2023 6:20pm
Hiya!
Thank you LDF. One of the good things about getting older is that we achieve more maturity, in how we act and how we perceive things. Some people find it hard to trust, after a few dents in their faith. But some, like me, and like her, understand that it's never too late to find the exception.
I think that being writers, we never let go of hope, for one thing.
We all write our own movies. I hope everyone's has a happy ending.
(Hello Jade!)
Thank you LDF. One of the good things about getting older is that we achieve more maturity, in how we act and how we perceive things. Some people find it hard to trust, after a few dents in their faith. But some, like me, and like her, understand that it's never too late to find the exception.
I think that being writers, we never let go of hope, for one thing.
We all write our own movies. I hope everyone's has a happy ending.
(Hello Jade!)
Re. The Rose Of Hearts
16th Sep 2023 6:47pm
I found myself lost in the beauty of your words!! Your words are really gentle n soothing... Thank you for sharing this piece.. N oooo image is simply awesome 💗
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Re: Re. The Rose Of Hearts
16th Sep 2023 7:13pm
Hello Dimpy!
Thank you for letting me know it's worth reading. -I (usually) tend to prefer writing things that have a soothing quality. As if a soft light to disguise the antics of desire, perhaps. Some things are sacred to a couple, so I write with that in mind.
(The image: I don't think she realized how beautiful she really is. It's natural)
Thank you for letting me know it's worth reading. -I (usually) tend to prefer writing things that have a soothing quality. As if a soft light to disguise the antics of desire, perhaps. Some things are sacred to a couple, so I write with that in mind.
(The image: I don't think she realized how beautiful she really is. It's natural)
Re: Re. The Rose Of Hearts
17th Sep 2023 1:30am
She is really beautiful.. I know that..you know..n she knows too..😊 and yaaa your writing is full of happiness.. there is a kind of peace in it.. softness in it.. I liked the flow of love.. ❤
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Re: Re. The Rose Of Hearts
17th Sep 2023 4:12pm
(Actually she is quite modest. I have to remind her every day how truly pretty she is, without trying)
And thanks again. Not to ramble on too much, but my past wasn't calm much. A couple of years ago I decided to make some changes and make better choices. And got back into writing more.
I want peace of mind, above all else. No more self induced turmoil. Or getting involved in some.
Better choices bring better results. And that's where I am now.
And thanks again. Not to ramble on too much, but my past wasn't calm much. A couple of years ago I decided to make some changes and make better choices. And got back into writing more.
I want peace of mind, above all else. No more self induced turmoil. Or getting involved in some.
Better choices bring better results. And that's where I am now.
Re. The Rose Of Hearts
16th Sep 2023 7:13pm
These lines especially stood out for me:
"I lost count long ago
of all the horizons
that the moon went to hide behind.
It's vampiric, always hungry,
to steal the blood of love.
But wise enough to go rest, at day
and digest such weight."
I like the way those lost horizons could be read as wasted time & I also like the way you described the Moon as being like a Vampire cos it only comes out at night.
"I lost count long ago
of all the horizons
that the moon went to hide behind.
It's vampiric, always hungry,
to steal the blood of love.
But wise enough to go rest, at day
and digest such weight."
I like the way those lost horizons could be read as wasted time & I also like the way you described the Moon as being like a Vampire cos it only comes out at night.
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Re: Re. The Rose Of Hearts
16th Sep 2023 7:17pm
Thanks Billy.
I was seeing the moon as how lovelorn lovers stare at it, sort of being sucked out of them as the moon absorbs it. Like a breakup, letting the feelings go. The moon captures them, perhaps.
I was seeing the moon as how lovelorn lovers stare at it, sort of being sucked out of them as the moon absorbs it. Like a breakup, letting the feelings go. The moon captures them, perhaps.
Re: Re. The Rose Of Hearts
16th Sep 2023 7:20pm
Definitely. After all, the Moon has no atmosphere even, unlike yourself & Adelphina right now. :-)
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Re: Re. The Rose Of Hearts
16th Sep 2023 7:45pm
Lmao!
Actually we spend a lot of time just cutting up and laughing about silly stuff. A great sense of humor is a must in this crazy world! And it makes everything else that much easier.
Actually we spend a lot of time just cutting up and laughing about silly stuff. A great sense of humor is a must in this crazy world! And it makes everything else that much easier.
Re. The Rose Of Hearts
16th Sep 2023 7:50pm
Awwh Hey babe!!
You spoil me you know:)
Saying thank you seems dull after reading this!! You keep me in a state of happiness. It's going to be such an awesome year!
Me and you against the world. Lot's of things I'm grateful for but you are godsent!! So nurturing and attentive.
When you told me you posted something new with my pic I had a big toothy grin!!! Uncharted territory for me but I'm willing to entrust my everything with you. How can I not? You're my Mark:)
Love you to the moon and then some more. hahaha
You spoil me you know:)
Saying thank you seems dull after reading this!! You keep me in a state of happiness. It's going to be such an awesome year!
Me and you against the world. Lot's of things I'm grateful for but you are godsent!! So nurturing and attentive.
When you told me you posted something new with my pic I had a big toothy grin!!! Uncharted territory for me but I'm willing to entrust my everything with you. How can I not? You're my Mark:)
Love you to the moon and then some more. hahaha
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Re: Re. The Rose Of Hearts
16th Sep 2023 8:11pm
In today's "too bitter" world, it takes a lot to trust someone with our inner selves. Yet you did, and I did.
I won't ever take you for granted. There's not a replacement, and I wouldn't bother looking anyway. I have it all with you.
We live our words. How awesome is that!
Okay, on a more neutral level... Thanks pal!
(smooch!)
I won't ever take you for granted. There's not a replacement, and I wouldn't bother looking anyway. I have it all with you.
We live our words. How awesome is that!
Okay, on a more neutral level... Thanks pal!
(smooch!)
Re. The Rose Of Hearts
16th Sep 2023 10:05pm
hello dearest Styxian this is so beautiful tender I'm very happy you have each other
the way you see things is magical 💕
the way you see things is magical 💕
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Re: Re. The Rose Of Hearts
17th Sep 2023 4:17pm
Life should always have a degree of "magical" to it. I'm never too old to be enthusiastic about things. I am very down to earth. But I certainly do maintain a youthful exuberance towards things that bring joy. It's easy to be happy. Just let it in.
Re. The Rose Of Hearts
17th Sep 2023 00:54am
Re: Re. The Rose Of Hearts
17th Sep 2023 4:22pm
How's you Gary?
Thanks oodles! Lol.
Maybe some of the initial euphoria will subside eventually. But it ain't yet. I will be old as hell by that time.
Me and her are each other's cheerleaders. And if she wants me to wear that outfit, no one else will know! Lol.
Thanks oodles! Lol.
Maybe some of the initial euphoria will subside eventually. But it ain't yet. I will be old as hell by that time.
Me and her are each other's cheerleaders. And if she wants me to wear that outfit, no one else will know! Lol.
Re: Re. The Rose Of Hearts
17th Sep 2023 5:12pm
Keep those lamps trimmed and burning son !!
Euphoria is tough to keep going but settling in to a great relationship is easy as pie when the love and communication is flowing.
Best to both of you !
Euphoria is tough to keep going but settling in to a great relationship is easy as pie when the love and communication is flowing.
Best to both of you !
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Re. The Rose Of Hearts
17th Sep 2023 1:29am
For me this was dream-like (perhaps too much thought of dreaming lately). The photo is enough to inspire but there is so much more to loving. 🌹
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Re: Re. The Rose Of Hearts
17th Sep 2023 4:37pm
I like your take on it. And you're right in that it has a dream-like sense to it. Obviously the moon can't be manhandled literally. Lol. I have a story about people being dumped out of a jar, onto a huge table, by a higher being. I think I borrowed an idea from that, for this write.
There's also not a thing wrong with using (your) dreams as inspiration and such. It isn't a limited source, for sure. Your writes are great. Thus use whatever resources you have to continue such .
The photo captures a certain aspect that intrigued me. It reminded me of rose gold .
There's also not a thing wrong with using (your) dreams as inspiration and such. It isn't a limited source, for sure. Your writes are great. Thus use whatever resources you have to continue such .
The photo captures a certain aspect that intrigued me. It reminded me of rose gold .
Re. The Rose Of Hearts
17th Sep 2023 7:46pm
So glad you two found each other! It's so hard to put oneself out there, and trust , in today's world.
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Re: Re. The Rose Of Hearts
20th Sep 2023 1:54am
Thanks Madame.
But, no matter how crappy the world can seem, we have to have hope that there are always going to be good people out there. I refuse to ever feel totally dejected, or give up faith. I have a few good friends, and now a wonderful girlfriend! Closing myself off to the world and I would not have had this fortune. So, yeah, always believe that good will come. It sneaks up sometimes!
But, no matter how crappy the world can seem, we have to have hope that there are always going to be good people out there. I refuse to ever feel totally dejected, or give up faith. I have a few good friends, and now a wonderful girlfriend! Closing myself off to the world and I would not have had this fortune. So, yeah, always believe that good will come. It sneaks up sometimes!
Re. The Rose Of Hearts
18th Sep 2023 5:18am
Dear S,
Aaaaaaahhhhhh. This piece is like a quiet morning with a good cup of tea. Comfort and kindness and love. It’s a beautiful thing to see unfold. It’s hard not to be inspired you both are so lovely inside and out. I enjoyed this poem because it made me feel hopeful that love burns bright and brings positivity and hope when we let it. H🌷
Aaaaaaahhhhhh. This piece is like a quiet morning with a good cup of tea. Comfort and kindness and love. It’s a beautiful thing to see unfold. It’s hard not to be inspired you both are so lovely inside and out. I enjoyed this poem because it made me feel hopeful that love burns bright and brings positivity and hope when we let it. H🌷
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Re: Re. The Rose Of Hearts
20th Sep 2023 2:06am
Can it be a cup of mocha? Lol. Or in Del's case, hazelnut creamer. (Bleh! Lol)
I kinda borrowed from a story I wrote before, for the idea of this write. I made it more personal this time around. It has more meaning now.
I try to keep a good attitude as much as I can, it ain't always easy! And the best thing about Del is her wonderful attitude towards life and stuff. It's truly addictive. It's so refreshing to have around.
She is one of a kind, and I am very lucky!
I kinda borrowed from a story I wrote before, for the idea of this write. I made it more personal this time around. It has more meaning now.
I try to keep a good attitude as much as I can, it ain't always easy! And the best thing about Del is her wonderful attitude towards life and stuff. It's truly addictive. It's so refreshing to have around.
She is one of a kind, and I am very lucky!
Re. The Rose Of Hearts
27th Sep 2023 7:28am
Hi, I think at this point of time you need to focus more, the curves in your writing are really sharp, which made me drift off, the middle of the poem was drafted abstractly and wonderfully, like a smoothie. Keep on writing and if you want to create space travelling with Rockets, I'm really happy for you, you rock!
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Re: Re. The Rose Of Hearts
1st Oct 2023 3:47pm
Thanks for the critique. I am still a forever unpolished writer, because I just write what seems to fit my lack of style. Lol. You're right in that perhaps it's time that I take it more serious, as far as a lasting impact.
Re: Re. The Rose Of Hearts
8th Oct 2023 3:13am
You are really good it's just that I'm a senior and I find it hard to keep up, but if you where to take it seriously, well I can see a few trophies your way!!
Thanks again for a lovely experience0!
Thanks again for a lovely experience0!
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Re. The Rose Of Hearts
28th Sep 2023 4:23pm
I disappear for months and find your treasure of poems. A most pleasurable read. Also happy for you.
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Re: Re. The Rose Of Hearts
1st Oct 2023 3:50pm
How you been??
Good to see you around, btw.
I'm still plugging along here and there. Lol. A couple of big changes in my personal life obviously, but I continue to delve into creative writing as an outlet. It's a way to focus, yes?
Good to see you around, btw.
I'm still plugging along here and there. Lol. A couple of big changes in my personal life obviously, but I continue to delve into creative writing as an outlet. It's a way to focus, yes?
Re: Re. The Rose Of Hearts
1st Oct 2023 6:46pm
Too many give vent to misery. Nice seeing someone write of joy and companionship.
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Re: Re. The Rose Of Hearts
1st Oct 2023 10:01pm
Thanks man. I like to DUP it to escape the routine of things, yeah? Granted, sometimes our writes take on a negative vibe, and that's cool too. But I don't want to dwell there too long.
In a way, creative writing is escapism. And yeah, sometimes to delve into the dark or the light of a situation.
I just don't want to become too stale.
In a way, creative writing is escapism. And yeah, sometimes to delve into the dark or the light of a situation.
I just don't want to become too stale.
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Re: Re. The Rose Of Hearts
2nd Oct 2023 2:02am
Thank you much, Sandy. I try to write "hopeful" things usually. It suits me and keeps me focused on what's good. I have my dark themes too, sometimes. We shouldn't stay in one theme all the time.
And, she's a wonderful woman completely.
And, she's a wonderful woman completely.