The Inside Place

Dear E,

There is such a strength in this piece and a level of freedom. No one is going to slow this gal down or tell her she can’t do something. No constraints. She lives in the moment, fearless. Powerful. Love it. H🌷

Thanks, H. Much has changed for me and I find myself a little lost, but uncompromising in my journey. Time doesn’t heal all things, but letting go does.

A long time spent gathering strength, clarity and courage is often rewarded by a great movement forward in life. All the best, Josh.

These life changing moves have been painful, but I find solace in knowing it’s not for naught. Thanks for stopping by, Josh. I appreciate it.

At first your words made me think of Lord of The Rings, but the solitary existence at the end brought to mind Eages song, "Desperado".

Anything written that conjures a picture or song, is never a waste. The beauty is grand in all dimensions. I’m happy to know this poem did that for you. Thank you.

"gathering the hem  
of overhanging skirts in preparation  
for the deepest journey  
my spirit has yet to breathe through..."
these lines immediately draw me in, making me wonder about this deepest journey...
powerful words &
wishing you a safe journey!

Thank you, Veronika. Sometimes I feel that I wrote a strong opening stanza but then the rest of the piece sort of fizzles out. I’m not sure if it’s the case with this one (my mind says yes) but I am glad to know that I can be consistent with the opener. Thank you for having a read.

they say, a journey of a thousand miles BEGINS with a single step. If that's true – and it does sound reasonable – then every step on that journey is a beginning.
Having strong openers seems like a good strategy 💕

Reflection always offers so much more. I liked the casualness about this also carries a meaningful lesson.

“Casualness”….I like this word in relation to the poem. It did feel a little “let the bag casually slip to the floor as I keep walking”. Thank you for your thoughtful words.

Power write E
You've got powerful chops
Digging the write and your avatar rocks !

Xx

BIG LIKE

Thank a million, Poet. I appreciate that very much.


XX

Hoi hoi
@Eerie

What a powerful thing to write and thank you for posting!
My fav lines are (I am with Veronika) like what you wrote.

I love it to pieces!
So, ‘like this poem’ is just a timid attempt to say what I think.
Great write!
Kind regards, Gus

Thank you very much.

Hem, sailor-tongue and sawdust are some splendid words, and fit well in this poem.

Thank you. Accidental…theme? I imagine water quite often when I write. I don’t know why, put it probably gets injected more often than it should 😅

:)

This poem, titled "The Inside Place," captures a sense of introspection and rebellion intertwined with a childlike curiosity and wonder. The imagery evokes a journey of self-discovery and defiance against societal norms.

The opening lines set the tone of preparation for a profound inward exploration, suggesting a readiness to delve into the depths of one's being. The contrast between the traditional Sunday morning and the unconventional choice of nature ("rocks and blessed be") hints at a divergence from the expected path, symbolizing a departure from convention in pursuit of personal fulfillment.

The characterization of the protagonist as a "wayward child" reinforces the theme of rebellion and nonconformity, celebrating the freedom to follow one's own path. The juxtaposition of innocence ("rocks") with more mature elements like "sailor-tongue" and "frog eyes" adds complexity to the portrayal, suggesting a blend of naivety and worldly experience.

The imagery of "sawdust and maple leaves" conjures a vivid sensory experience, evoking a rustic, natural setting where the protagonist feels at home. The mention of "open galleys" suggests a vast, uncharted territory of exploration, both literal and metaphorical, stretching from dawn to twilight, symbolizing the journey of self-discovery from the beginning to the end of the day, or perhaps from innocence to wisdom.

Overall, the poem celebrates the courage to defy expectations, embrace individuality, and embark on a journey of self-discovery, even if it means venturing into uncharted territories of the soul.