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if you were
if you were to take my hand,
surely, i would lead.
to a road to make it all real.
quickly to the creek with the river cane high...
to baptize all that we might hide...
behind the cane...
as the breeze shifts your strands of hair, side to side.
the rhythm of the water...as it flows.
take my hand...
for the path whispers and the vision grows.
i would love to fill your head with inspiration...
as in the past...
expectation within the written of our expressed words.
gripping,
the tightening...
a mindful: a spiritual bond.
the swift strokes of the pen...
as to tattoo deep within our skin...
to melt,
to merge...
rapture within the written kin.
forever to blend...
this i wish,
this i send.
surely, i would lead.
to a road to make it all real.
quickly to the creek with the river cane high...
to baptize all that we might hide...
behind the cane...
as the breeze shifts your strands of hair, side to side.
the rhythm of the water...as it flows.
take my hand...
for the path whispers and the vision grows.
i would love to fill your head with inspiration...
as in the past...
expectation within the written of our expressed words.
gripping,
the tightening...
a mindful: a spiritual bond.
the swift strokes of the pen...
as to tattoo deep within our skin...
to melt,
to merge...
rapture within the written kin.
forever to blend...
this i wish,
this i send.
Published 4th Aug 2023
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4th Aug 2023 7:00pm
Beautiful imagery...
I love the thought of being led by the hand.
Going to the creek, there is so much to hide.
The rhythm of bodies as it they flow.
It's definitely an inspiration.
Even without words, gripping and tightening.
Swift strokes... melting and merging.
Rapture... ;)
Really lovely expression of coming together...
and writing. :)
I love the thought of being led by the hand.
Going to the creek, there is so much to hide.
The rhythm of bodies as it they flow.
It's definitely an inspiration.
Even without words, gripping and tightening.
Swift strokes... melting and merging.
Rapture... ;)
Really lovely expression of coming together...
and writing. :)
5th Aug 2023 11:59am
thank you for the kind and positive feedback.
and for taking the time to read and for commenting on the piece.
knowing that you found some inspiration within the words means there is hope for my writings yet...
ha
and for taking the time to read and for commenting on the piece.
knowing that you found some inspiration within the words means there is hope for my writings yet...
ha
4th Aug 2023 7:27pm
There's such strength and comfort within a mutually alluring give and take. To have your words accentuate and come together within an imaginative landscape of another's in a way that wholly elevates deep feeling and emotional evocation to a higher level, is a dream like fantasy come true. The unveiling of souls and hearts becomes a way to navigate and explore where mindfulness meets an expectation of compatibility. Yin finding its yang and really relishing how deeply an interconnection builds and flourishes not only through pen and ink but through a shared mindset.
Understanding and acceptance.... it's an aphrodisiac.
Incredibly inspired poetry, my dear soul.
I'm so happy to see you return 🦋
You've been seriously missed!
Much love, MS
🌹B
Understanding and acceptance.... it's an aphrodisiac.
Incredibly inspired poetry, my dear soul.
I'm so happy to see you return 🦋
You've been seriously missed!
Much love, MS
🌹B
5th Aug 2023 12:02pm
your comments, always a work of art and beauty.
you find more in my words than i.
i appreciate and respect.
Thank you Thank you.
you find more in my words than i.
i appreciate and respect.
Thank you Thank you.
5th Aug 2023 3:01am
hey Mystic!!
Well look at you rhyming!
Great piece. it has a great flow.
My favorite section that was really vivid for me-
as the breeze shifts your strands of hair, side to side.
the rhythm of the water...as it flows.
Great imagery combined with longing.
Reminds me of a moving piece of art:)
Nice to see ya posting again amigo!
Well look at you rhyming!
Great piece. it has a great flow.
My favorite section that was really vivid for me-
as the breeze shifts your strands of hair, side to side.
the rhythm of the water...as it flows.
Great imagery combined with longing.
Reminds me of a moving piece of art:)
Nice to see ya posting again amigo!
5th Aug 2023 12:13pm
thank you...
my poems always seem to be the same poem...
the water
the path
the wind
the high grass
and pebbles within the creek.
was nice to write, for i have not for months
seems the search is still on going.
the imagery, i guess, paints that path to my refuge.
again, thank you for venturing down that path...for a moment,
finding that glimpse of understanding that twirls within my mind.
nice to see your words.
my poems always seem to be the same poem...
the water
the path
the wind
the high grass
and pebbles within the creek.
was nice to write, for i have not for months
seems the search is still on going.
the imagery, i guess, paints that path to my refuge.
again, thank you for venturing down that path...for a moment,
finding that glimpse of understanding that twirls within my mind.
nice to see your words.
