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a perfect moment
Perfect moments exist
on itchy grass
and a threadbare blanket
looking up at the stars
with you
We watch a meteor
fly past
see a helicopter buzz
overhead
temporarily disturbing
our tranquility
When it's gone
we count the stars
name the constellations
we remember
and lie comfortable
in each other's arms
For the first time
in a small forever
I feel peace
on itchy grass
and a threadbare blanket
looking up at the stars
with you
We watch a meteor
fly past
see a helicopter buzz
overhead
temporarily disturbing
our tranquility
When it's gone
we count the stars
name the constellations
we remember
and lie comfortable
in each other's arms
For the first time
in a small forever
I feel peace
Published 18th Feb 2023
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18th Feb 2023 2:42pm
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18th Feb 2023 5:19pm
You capture such gorgeous intimacy with a beautiful ease of tranquility and love.
A heartwarming tenderness that simply permeates.
Absolutely lovely.
🌹💙
A heartwarming tenderness that simply permeates.
Absolutely lovely.
🌹💙
19th Feb 2023 4:31am
Dear I,
An enviable feeling, peace. I greatly enjoyed the tranquility in this poem. To me, there’s nothing more comforting than being blanketed by the stars in the arms of someone where love is given and reciprocated. Such a lovely write. H🌷
An enviable feeling, peace. I greatly enjoyed the tranquility in this poem. To me, there’s nothing more comforting than being blanketed by the stars in the arms of someone where love is given and reciprocated. Such a lovely write. H🌷
19th Feb 2023 5:19am
Reading your poem, Indie, was like the title coming to life in a leap towards perfection - wonderful
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- Edited 16th Mar 2023 7:45pm
25th Feb 2023 3:40am
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