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Cosmos
Stars breathtakingly began melting; I witnessed them showering the dark sky
The crescent moon diverting, caught every luminous drop
Keeping your promise; you gave me the universe
My firm grip on the sheets graciously betrayed me as you immersed yourself into me
Possessing the thunderous heavens, contractions tightened my grip imprisoning you
Intimately granting and exhaustively consuming, with each breath, we became absently lost in our own cosmos
The crescent moon diverting, caught every luminous drop
Keeping your promise; you gave me the universe
My firm grip on the sheets graciously betrayed me as you immersed yourself into me
Possessing the thunderous heavens, contractions tightened my grip imprisoning you
Intimately granting and exhaustively consuming, with each breath, we became absently lost in our own cosmos
Published 11th Dec 2022
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12th Dec 2022 1:35am
12th Dec 2022 12:50pm
Hi PS,
Yes, feels good to write and paint, as you know also. Thank you for the RL and tidings throughout.
NG
Yes, feels good to write and paint, as you know also. Thank you for the RL and tidings throughout.
NG
12th Dec 2022 8:14pm
12th Dec 2022 8:22pm
12th Dec 2022 3:08am
From my tower I see you have returned. I am inspired by your words of tender intimacy. A glimpse into the world of the high goddess for all us poor earthly inhabitants.
12th Dec 2022 12:53pm
Hi RFT,
“Poor earthly inhabitants”
No words 😂
I’m glad you felt the intimacy in this.
RL, thank you
NG
“Poor earthly inhabitants”
No words 😂
I’m glad you felt the intimacy in this.
RL, thank you
NG
12th Dec 2022 3:10am
Hi NG:)
So nice to see you posting.
The third line is all consuming!!
Love the idea of stars melting.
So nice to see you posting.
The third line is all consuming!!
Love the idea of stars melting.
12th Dec 2022 1:00pm
Hi Adelphina.
It feels good to be stepping back into the pool. Thank you for being out here.
Wow, all consuming! Yes, promises kept are everything! Cheers to stars melting 💫
Thank you for that and RL!
NG
It feels good to be stepping back into the pool. Thank you for being out here.
Wow, all consuming! Yes, promises kept are everything! Cheers to stars melting 💫
Thank you for that and RL!
NG
12th Dec 2022 6:50am
Dear NG,
I sure could use a cigarette just about now. Either that or a fire extinguisher! The fire and sizzle from this write is hot!
As I collect myself and try to write coherently, this poem is a beautiful expression of great intimacy. The metaphor of the moon and stars- gorgeous. Outstanding imagery elegantly written. H🌷
I sure could use a cigarette just about now. Either that or a fire extinguisher! The fire and sizzle from this write is hot!
As I collect myself and try to write coherently, this poem is a beautiful expression of great intimacy. The metaphor of the moon and stars- gorgeous. Outstanding imagery elegantly written. H🌷
12th Dec 2022 1:06pm
Hi Honoria!
I am laughing and loving that you can use a cigarette just about now! I am so happy you found this a beautiful expression of great intimacy. I am honored by your comment, Honoria. Thank you and for RL
NG
I am laughing and loving that you can use a cigarette just about now! I am so happy you found this a beautiful expression of great intimacy. I am honored by your comment, Honoria. Thank you and for RL
NG
12th Dec 2022 8:03am
A heavenly erotic write. Loved especially these lines:
Keeping your promise; you gave me the universe
My firm grip on the sheets graciously betrayed me as you immersed yourself into me
Possessing the thunderous heavens, contractions tightened my grip imprisoning you
Keeping your promise; you gave me the universe
My firm grip on the sheets graciously betrayed me as you immersed yourself into me
Possessing the thunderous heavens, contractions tightened my grip imprisoning you
12th Dec 2022 1:14pm
Hi Solomon Song,
I’m gratified you found this heavenly erotic! And, thank you for showing me the lines you particularly loved! It’s really very supportive and helpful.
NG
I’m gratified you found this heavenly erotic! And, thank you for showing me the lines you particularly loved! It’s really very supportive and helpful.
NG
12th Dec 2022 2:31pm
I enjoy the cadence of this as you open with the milieu and slow pan to the erotic image, it's tastefully done.
12th Dec 2022 6:19pm
Hi Daniel,
I’m thrilled you enjoyed the rhythm to the build! I treasure your comment. Thank you!
NG
I’m thrilled you enjoyed the rhythm to the build! I treasure your comment. Thank you!
NG
12th Dec 2022 6:28pm
I like the poem's intensity very much & of course, the new avatar. Much more cheerful. It's nice seeing you getting into that Xmas spirit! 😊
12th Dec 2022 8:21pm
13th Dec 2022 6:20pm
It's so nice to see a post from you NG. :)
But damn! those contractions definitely tightened the grip on my mind...
And body. ;) I caught every luminous drop in your words. ;)
To be given the universe is such an incredible gift.
So thoroughly distracted and lost with each breath as I read this.
I don't smoke but if I did, I could use one right now too. lol
But damn! those contractions definitely tightened the grip on my mind...
And body. ;) I caught every luminous drop in your words. ;)
To be given the universe is such an incredible gift.
So thoroughly distracted and lost with each breath as I read this.
I don't smoke but if I did, I could use one right now too. lol
Damn those contractions 😂😂
You are amazing! So glad you caught every luminous drop. I don’t smoke either but maybe we can call Honoria and at least breathe in some fumes together lol.
Thank you for the RL KX
You are amazing! So glad you caught every luminous drop. I don’t smoke either but maybe we can call Honoria and at least breathe in some fumes together lol.
Thank you for the RL KX
15th Dec 2022 3:10am
"My firm grip on the sheets"
There is a precise art to writing a paragraph of erotica in six words. You definitely showed your skill here.
The entirety is quite well written, too.
There is a precise art to writing a paragraph of erotica in six words. You definitely showed your skill here.
The entirety is quite well written, too.
15th Dec 2022 3:31pm
Hi Styxian,
Thank you very much for the RL and for your words. I’m beaming!
NG
Thank you very much for the RL and for your words. I’m beaming!
NG
22nd Dec 2022 00:23am
Nothing like creating a world of your own in the midst of shared passions
But your own Cosmos?
Damn, that's some really good lovn
Magnificent Ink!!
But your own Cosmos?
Damn, that's some really good lovn
Magnificent Ink!!
22nd Dec 2022 00:37am
9th Jan 2023 4:05pm
👏 👏 👏 👏 ! I absolutely agree 👍 making love in waves of your galaxy 💜 which allows you to flow into the orgasims of your our own cosmos!!! Please 🙏 keep on writing ✍ ok peace ✌ and blessings always 🙏
9th Jan 2023 6:40pm
10th Jan 2023 3:37am
I love the sense of the macrocosmic merging with the microcosmic in this poem! When I write of the intimate I sometimes describe is like planets colliding.
Hi Daniel!
Micro/macro cosmic is quite an awesome view. Thank you. It’s amazing when an emotion can take us to an analogy of planets colliding. Under the right circumstances, we only need our minds to ‘see’ everything.
Micro/macro cosmic is quite an awesome view. Thank you. It’s amazing when an emotion can take us to an analogy of planets colliding. Under the right circumstances, we only need our minds to ‘see’ everything.
10th Jan 2023 8:56pm
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23rd Mar 2023 1:53pm
I really enjoyed how you drove home the passion in this piece. Well done!
23rd Mar 2023 3:10pm
