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Hot flash
I'm forever aflame
internal inferno
emotional hot flash
peeling layers
eternal exhibitionist
shedding skins
but not for your benefit
I crave your cooling gaze
on my hot naked soul
I need you to watch
witness fatal flaws
observe my obscene intensity
behold the blazing core
and don't look away
don't look away
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Re. Hot flash
29th Aug 2022 9:22am
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29th Aug 2022 5:18pm
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29th Aug 2022 10:16am
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Re: Re. Hot flash
29th Aug 2022 5:19pm
Writing only pours out when I'm feeling intense. Thank you so much for your presence here.
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Re. Hot flash
29th Aug 2022 10:42am
Greetings Broken,
Hope ur well?
I agree with Midnite,
U ave me undivided attention!
Gr8t pen.
Take care.
X
Hope ur well?
I agree with Midnite,
U ave me undivided attention!
Gr8t pen.
Take care.
X
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Re: Re. Hot flash
29th Aug 2022 5:20pm
I'm holding it together, thanks! Glad to have your attention. Cheers!
🙂k
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30th Aug 2022 3:06pm
Re. Hot flash
29th Aug 2022 12:46pm
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29th Aug 2022 5:35pm
Middle-of-night words from the scorching abyss... glad you BIG LIKE it.
❤️k
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Re. Hot flash
29th Aug 2022 6:49pm
“I did but see her passing by
And yet I love her till I die.”
—anonymous
I love the savagery of your pen, the lean meanness of the images stripped of all that is superfluous. Sitting here grinning ear2ear. You tap dance so well!
And yet I love her till I die.”
—anonymous
I love the savagery of your pen, the lean meanness of the images stripped of all that is superfluous. Sitting here grinning ear2ear. You tap dance so well!
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Re: Re. Hot flash
29th Aug 2022 8:41pm
Wow, I'm humbled by this gracious comment! Thank you for seeing me, and grinning. Now I'm grinning too.
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Re. Hot flash
30th Aug 2022 8:28am
Dear K,
For me, there’s being seen in a sense of the everyday mundane, this is who I am and this is my role in your life. But that’s not who I AM. There are many more layers that seem to be ignored when trying to express them. In turn the isolation and loneliness intensifies. I love “observe my obscene intensity
behold the blazing core
and don't look away”. That’s the crux of it to me. The bit that needs the nurturing not the hiding. I really appreciated the urgency and exposure in this write. Sometimes I feel like if the zombies around me don’t recognize this I’ll implode. Great piece. H🌷
For me, there’s being seen in a sense of the everyday mundane, this is who I am and this is my role in your life. But that’s not who I AM. There are many more layers that seem to be ignored when trying to express them. In turn the isolation and loneliness intensifies. I love “observe my obscene intensity
behold the blazing core
and don't look away”. That’s the crux of it to me. The bit that needs the nurturing not the hiding. I really appreciated the urgency and exposure in this write. Sometimes I feel like if the zombies around me don’t recognize this I’ll implode. Great piece. H🌷
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31st Aug 2022 11:56am
Dear H,
You really do have a knack for always getting it! There are so many layers... it seems the deeper you go, the more the intensity scares people. If they can't bear to look, then maybe loneliness is the only option. Thanks for reading and seeing me.
❤️k
You really do have a knack for always getting it! There are so many layers... it seems the deeper you go, the more the intensity scares people. If they can't bear to look, then maybe loneliness is the only option. Thanks for reading and seeing me.
❤️k
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31st Aug 2022 12:55pm
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Re. Hot flash
4th Sep 2022 4:25pm
Those huge (avatar) eyes make it impossible to look away!
And then we get to read the awesomeness behind the eyes...
The intrigue within this write of yours builds an enticement. And we like what we see!
And then we get to read the awesomeness behind the eyes...
The intrigue within this write of yours builds an enticement. And we like what we see!
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Re: Re. Hot flash
4th Sep 2022 4:37pm
Thank you for seeing me, and for this incredibly kind and encouraging comment. And RL too! I'm honoured.
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4th Sep 2022 5:29pm
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Re. Hot flash
6th Sep 2022 1:35am
I love your intensity... I could definitely feel every word deeply, this is so meaningful to me. That internal inferno of passion that always burns hot. 'eternal exhibitionist' well that definitely brings back a lot of memories. :p I feel like "I crave your cooling gaze" is just to keep you from turning to ashes from that intense passion. 'hot naked soul, I need you to watch' okay, my mind still went straight to the gutter on that one too but I definitely see the depth that goes so much further than that. 'observe my obscene intensity' incredible line, oh yeah I feel that one in the gutter and everywhere else too; so often told how intense I am. :p Who could possibly look away? You are beautiful and amazing... If they do look away it's their loss.
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6th Sep 2022 4:45pm
Aww.... thank you. What a lovely thing to say. 😊 And thanks for diving into this lava pit with me and enduring the flames. I appreciate you.
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