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One More Minute...Please
Beep
Beep
Beep
Goes the machine that reminds me you are still alive
Whoosh
Whoosh
Whoosh
Goes the machine that pushes air into your lungs to make the machine go beep
We talked about this before
This is not what you want
To be alive without living
You asked if I could do it
I promised I would
I know what I have to do
I just need
one more minute...please
One more minute to tell you thank you
thank you for
saving me from her, from him, from them, from me
loving me unconditionally
forgiving me
anything
One more minute to tell you I am so, so sorry
sorry for
hurting you
leaving you
betraying you
lying to you
One more minute to tell you, I still need you
need you for advice on
the kids
work
friends
life
One more minute to tell you the kids
made straight A's
made the team
got a trophy
made a difference somewhere
had their first dance
date
kiss
heart break
graduated college
got a degree
a good job
married
kids
One more minute to tell you a lifetime of things that I will now never get to tell you.
One more minute to ask you everything I need to know about life.
One more minute to make right all of my wrongs to you.
One more minute to realize that
I don't have one more minute...
Beep
Beep
Goes the machine that reminds me you are still alive
Whoosh
Whoosh
Whoosh
Goes the machine that pushes air into your lungs to make the machine go beep
We talked about this before
This is not what you want
To be alive without living
You asked if I could do it
I promised I would
I know what I have to do
I just need
one more minute...please
One more minute to tell you thank you
thank you for
saving me from her, from him, from them, from me
loving me unconditionally
forgiving me
anything
One more minute to tell you I am so, so sorry
sorry for
hurting you
leaving you
betraying you
lying to you
One more minute to tell you, I still need you
need you for advice on
the kids
work
friends
life
One more minute to tell you the kids
made straight A's
made the team
got a trophy
made a difference somewhere
had their first dance
date
kiss
heart break
graduated college
got a degree
a good job
married
kids
One more minute to tell you a lifetime of things that I will now never get to tell you.
One more minute to ask you everything I need to know about life.
One more minute to make right all of my wrongs to you.
One more minute to realize that
I don't have one more minute...
Published 25th Mar 2012
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25th Mar 2012 10:51am
25th Mar 2012 4:38pm
25th Mar 2012 5:05pm
so very often we take for granted
the very things that deny our panic
kind words simple smiles warm embraces
unrealized until there are deleted spaces
in the books of our lives
be us husbands or wives
i guess we dont consider the fact
that 1 day He Is Coming Back To Extract
everything we showed insufficient appreciation for
& when He Comes forever closed will be that door
the very things that deny our panic
kind words simple smiles warm embraces
unrealized until there are deleted spaces
in the books of our lives
be us husbands or wives
i guess we dont consider the fact
that 1 day He Is Coming Back To Extract
everything we showed insufficient appreciation for
& when He Comes forever closed will be that door
25th Mar 2012 5:26pm
Beautiful in your description
Truthful in jurisdiction
I have to believe it's not forever
To meet again won't be never
Haha, I am not as good at this as you, but I try :)
Thanks for the comment, I always look forward to them from you :)
Truthful in jurisdiction
I have to believe it's not forever
To meet again won't be never
Haha, I am not as good at this as you, but I try :)
Thanks for the comment, I always look forward to them from you :)
27th Mar 2012 7:23pm
The bond was at first so universal in depth that I had problems figuring out if the person in question was a parental figure or a romantic partner.(just had to wait!) Beautifully stated!
27th Mar 2012 11:33pm
When I first started writing it, I wanted to share my experience in a universal way so that anyone could relate...but I was fairly emotional by the end, so the truth came out. :)
Thank you so much for your kind comment. ;)
Thank you so much for your kind comment. ;)
28th Mar 2012 5:04am
i was bawling by the end of this...like bad noises, nose running...all of it...this is amazing...my condolences for your loss my friend
28th Mar 2012 5:35am
***passes the tissue***
I am touched by your response...thank you so much for commenting
I am touched by your response...thank you so much for commenting
28th Mar 2012 5:19am
make such a concise and approachable write when such heady emotions are on the table. very straight forward and quite easily followed, so universal but so personal. thanks for letting us in
28th Mar 2012 5:37am
28th Mar 2012 4:42pm
28th Mar 2012 6:44pm
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22nd Apr 2012 5:44am
I could feel the heartache and deep sadness but relating with pride and joy also. I relate as my sons father passed on when he was little-and I have watched all of this--on my own. The depths here are awesome. thank you Peace x
Yes, very deep sadness.
Some people are taken too soon. They're just supposed to be here. I am very sorry for your son.
Thank you for the comment and the add.
Some people are taken too soon. They're just supposed to be here. I am very sorry for your son.
Thank you for the comment and the add.
24th Apr 2012 3:50am
24th Apr 2012 3:54am
Thank you so much Rose. :)
It means a lot that you say so.
I love your avatar, I collect elephants :)
It means a lot that you say so.
I love your avatar, I collect elephants :)
28th May 2012 6:06am
A deeply emotional read, made me think of when my dad was dying of cancer, just a week from when we found out he had it, but just enough time to tell him I loved him, which I had not done in my entire life, and to tell him not to worry about mom, that we would look out for her. But sometimes there is no time, sometimes there is no warning, no extra minute to even say "I love you".
Thank you for a moving piece of artistry! jj
Thank you for a moving piece of artistry! jj
28th May 2012 4:02pm
And thank you for your comment. I am so glad that you had that chance with your father. Sadly, I see too often people who don't get that. It is heart breaking.
I understand your difficulty with reading and commenting, so I really appreciate that you stopped by. It means a lot to me.
I understand your difficulty with reading and commenting, so I really appreciate that you stopped by. It means a lot to me.
11th Jul 2012 9:00pm
Another touching piece. You speak what many never reckon; this very minute will never return. Whether words unsaid, hugs not given or expectations not achieved, every minute is precious. Your gift is more than words on a page; it is evoking emotions. :)
Thank you Ken, it is hard for me to come back to this one. :)
I do like evoking emotion. When I try to write seriously, that is my goal. Emotion, empathy and understanding.
Thank you for leaving your kind words. :)
I do like evoking emotion. When I try to write seriously, that is my goal. Emotion, empathy and understanding.
Thank you for leaving your kind words. :)
