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One with the fog and night...
When night fell on the city,
When the light of lanterns spilled over the streets,
When it was pulling away from the house,
A dense fog fell to the ground.
He, slowly moving along the houses,
Sliding along the sidewalks and roads,
He lay down like a carpet on the expanse of night courtyards,
And that night he reminded me of many things.
Slowly stalked by my fears
And eerie shadows cast in the dark,
Was filled with a mystery for me
Alluring, sweet, timid...
I, sitting by the window, tried to
unravel the Foggy puzzle.
I understood what was hidden in it.
When it's foggy, you shouldn't sleep...
And baring his teeth, he drained the life from me.
I became one with the fog and the night.
When the light of lanterns spilled over the streets,
When it was pulling away from the house,
A dense fog fell to the ground.
He, slowly moving along the houses,
Sliding along the sidewalks and roads,
He lay down like a carpet on the expanse of night courtyards,
And that night he reminded me of many things.
Slowly stalked by my fears
And eerie shadows cast in the dark,
Was filled with a mystery for me
Alluring, sweet, timid...
I, sitting by the window, tried to
unravel the Foggy puzzle.
I understood what was hidden in it.
When it's foggy, you shouldn't sleep...
And baring his teeth, he drained the life from me.
I became one with the fog and the night.
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Re. One with the fog and night...
22nd Jul 2022 10:33pm
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22nd Jul 2022 10:45pm
You know how I love creatures of the night Ron. I am a creature of the night or they feed on me. Letting them drain me while I drain them. ;) Being embraced by the darkness, I love walking on a foggy night, somewhere like London is absolutely amazing. I am really glad you could hear and feel the blood pulsing.
Re. One with the fog and night...
22nd Jul 2022 10:43pm
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22nd Jul 2022 10:52pm
I am really happy you could step into the darkness and fog with me. I love that you thought it was one of the best. Thank you so much for reading and sharing your thoughts with me Atticus.
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22nd Jul 2022 11:15pm
Yes, certainly the type that portrayed in modern times for the most part although they have a much darker history in many parts of the world. But definitely that alpha male creature of the night knows how to hypnotize and excite a woman for sure. Really gets the blood flowing to all the right places. ;)
Re. One with the fog and night...
22nd Jul 2022 11:28pm
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22nd Jul 2022 11:38pm
Ah yes! you know how I love sensual photos PS. Thanks for stepping into the darkness and fog with me again and sharing the density of being. You know how much I love BIG LIKES. I hope you are starting off the weekend right. Do things I will do. :p
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23rd Jul 2022 00:15am
You know me, if I am not a creature of the night then I am casting spells. ;) Trying to bind you up in my magical world of pleasure and pain, lust and passion, and all the other stuff too. I really appreciate you getting caught up in my spells, I love that.
Re. One with the fog and night...
23rd Jul 2022 00:46am
Creepy & steamy, perfect for the hot summer night we're having here.
❤️k
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Re: Re. One with the fog and night...
Aw, I love creepy and steamy, two of my favorite words. ;) Hot summer nights are always good, well you know the kind of heat I am talking about. :p This heat and humidity outside is horrendous though. I am ready for Fall. Although I was born in the South I always kind of liked the UK weather, people said I was crazy; that's true but I don't think that's the reason. :p Thanks for stopping in and sharing your thoughts with me BT. I always love seeing you.
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23rd Jul 2022 1:04am
This will make a good movie script sugar. U rock again KristinaX!🌷💣🍑💋💚🏙️🛁🚿🛳️🚬! And baring his teeth, he drained the life from me. I became one with the fog and the night. Such an ah suddly for these my eyes ah captivationing. Those words are flawless!
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23rd Jul 2022 2:14am
A movie script, that's awesome thanks. Sugar, I like that; I have many nicknames here now. :p So does that mean you like vampires then Birchel? I am feeling like yes. There are so many ways he can drain the life from me or that I can drain the life from him, but really we definitely should just feed on each other all night long. Captivating and flawless are such amazing compliments. I am so happy you like my writing and thank you so much for sharing your thoughts with me.
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23rd Jul 2022 5:54am
I aluv vampires! And, we should feed upon each other all night long. And also, thou art welcome KristinaX.
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23rd Jul 2022 1:39pm
I like knowing you luv some vampires. ;) I can give you more of them... I bite too. lol
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23rd Jul 2022 4:10pm
Re. One with the fog and night...
23rd Jul 2022 1:09am
Thought provoking piece of awakening within the deepness of the darkness fuel by creatures of the dead of night ✍🤗👁🦋
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Ah, I always love your observations Stoney, in this case it being an awakening within the deepness of the darkness. That is definitely one of the angles and perspectives I was writing. I hope it portrayed this gothic style imagery I was going for. And the transformation that can occur when you are embraced by the darkness becoming one with it and the fog. For me that can mean many things. Thanks for stopping by and sharing your thoughts with me. I really appreciate it so much.
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23rd Jul 2022 10:16am
I appreciate your kindness and insight into something that we all have experienced in our lives as darkness comes in many ways yet it is necessary to understand that sometimes darkness is seen through the process of learning to face our fears ✍🙏🦋👊
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23rd Jul 2022 1:29pm
That's so true, we have to learn to face our fears or else they will prevent us from moving forward and growing. Sometimes those fears even turn into something you need in a way. The things you used to fear that is.
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23rd Jul 2022 9:35pm
Words so true to life with the understanding of what is necessary to make a common sense of change in life and world ✍👊👁🙏🤗🦋
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Re: Re. One with the fog and night...
23rd Jul 2022 3:37am
I love that you could see the imagery, and that the formatting and accents made it a better read. :) My formatting is super impatient but it seems to work I think. :p 'demanding to be read over and over again' is a really beautiful compliment and I love that you could see the many nuances, there definitely are many hidden in the darkness and fog. Thanks so much for visiting me and sharing your thoughts, I really appreciate it so much.
Re. One with the fog and night...
23rd Jul 2022 3:20am
Hi Kristina:)
A lot of great visuals in this. Lots of movement within
the first stanza. It flows great into rest of the piece quite seductively:)
Great versatility you are showing with this write!!!
Keep at it amiga!!!
A lot of great visuals in this. Lots of movement within
the first stanza. It flows great into rest of the piece quite seductively:)
Great versatility you are showing with this write!!!
Keep at it amiga!!!
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23rd Jul 2022 3:38am
I am so happy you could see the visuals and movement. The darkness and fog are so seductive. I absolutely love a cold foggy night. There is just something about that which is so beautiful and enticing to me. Great versatility is a really lovely compliment, thank you so much Adelphina. I always love it when you visit me and share your thoughts.
Re. One with the fog and night...
23rd Jul 2022 7:25am
That moment when you become one with the night. You know I love me some vampires. And this one knocks it out the park. Great poem, friend 😁
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23rd Jul 2022 1:36pm
Thanks DC, that you think I knocked it out of the park really means a lot to me. I really appreciate you reading and sharing with me so much. I definitely know you love some vampires so I am happy to give you some too. ;) I have another I think you will like even better. ;) So I will have to post that at some point. Have a werewolf on too. I bet you can be a real beast when you want to. And I mean that in the best way. :p
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23rd Jul 2022 1:42pm
I love it when writing leads to a fantasy, a journey in the mind hopefully leading to a journey of the body too. ;) Romantic adventures are always awesome, and becoming one with the night and fog can certainly lead to some extreme adventures. The kind that really gets the blood flowing, and many other things too. Being taken in by a creature of the night, being a creature of the night... it's so sexy being very bad.
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23rd Jul 2022 5:24pm
Where did you get the imagery ideas from?? This is awesome to read from you! Like was stated already, the beginning leads right into a scene of I wonder what's next!?
I am joyfully impressed!
I am joyfully impressed!
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23rd Jul 2022 9:43pm
You know where all my ideas come from, somewhere in my crazy chaotic mind I can actually assemble something coherent I suppose. ;) I really love that you found it an awesome read, that definitely makes me feel good. Joyfully impressed, now that is really such a great compliment too. Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts with me. I really appreciate it.
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24th Jul 2022 2:41am
I am difficult enough to try and understand, but if you don't like vampires even much harder. :p Definitely a creature of the night. But nobody ever complained when I was sucking on their neck or even sucking the blood for that matter. ;) Thank you so much stopping in to visit me in the night and sharing your thoughts with me. You know I love that.
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24th Jul 2022 2:44am
Re. One with the fog and night...
24th Jul 2022 4:22am
Dear K,
I know this is meant to have some fright and tremors yet, and I know this is my not so screwed on tightly head speaking, I thought there was kind of a love story in here. An unconventional one, nonetheless, a sensual one where words get in the way. It’s the kind where actions rule and “the look” says everything. I like fog. It’s mysterious and beckoning, which makes an added allure to this poem for me. Spooktacularly sensual write. 😊
H🌷
I know this is meant to have some fright and tremors yet, and I know this is my not so screwed on tightly head speaking, I thought there was kind of a love story in here. An unconventional one, nonetheless, a sensual one where words get in the way. It’s the kind where actions rule and “the look” says everything. I like fog. It’s mysterious and beckoning, which makes an added allure to this poem for me. Spooktacularly sensual write. 😊
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24th Jul 2022 1:17pm
I think the night and fog, and of course vampires are very seductive and sensual. There are multiple meanings but definitely one of those is a love story. ;) I do love fright and tremors too though, and 'spooktacularly sensual' is perfect. Oh how we can be slain with a look, but action is definitely a aphrodisiac. That mysterious and beckoning look is just irresistible. Wanting to explore that mystery and learn what lies beneath. Your comment is perfect, so if your head is not screwed on tightly then mine isn't either. ;)
Re. One with the fog and night...
24th Jul 2022 10:47pm
What is compelling here is that the presence involved appears to take a form beyond just a physical manifestation. The elements of weather, of the absence of light, come into play.
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25th Jul 2022 00:11am
I really like how you described the presence. Yes, definitely beyond physical manifestation with lots of different ominous elements. Having that feat but being embraced by the fog and darkness. Taken in and transformed. Thank you so much for visiting me and sharing your thoughts Jazz. I really appreciate it.
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25th Jul 2022 1:44pm
this is quite atmospheric miss KX
like a scene cut straight out of 18thC darktown, the sinister lurking everywhere, from the pov of prey
- this is so good, it may need a sequal from the pov of predator?
like a scene cut straight out of 18thC darktown, the sinister lurking everywhere, from the pov of prey
- this is so good, it may need a sequal from the pov of predator?
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25th Jul 2022 3:28pm
I love that it could pull you with the atmosphere. And 18thC darktown, like London is definitely how I was feeling with the imagery myself. Sinister things creeping around the corners, stalking someone in the night and pulling them into that world. I like your recommendation regarding pov of predator. I may do that. Thank so much for stopping in and giving me your thoughts CI. I really appreciate it. :)
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Outstanding verse Kristina, the vampire lore is always intriguing and alluring.
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1st Aug 2022 2:37am
Really digging how much you like vampires Wally.. Something you need to tell me? :p I agree it is so intriguing and alluring. Although there are so many different types of vampires around the world and some are not so alluring. They just want to tear you skin off and make you suffer as they slowly lick the blood for a week just to keep you alive. Just saying. lol The tall dark sexy kind that hypnotize you by biting the inner thigh and well... yeah.... definitely take me into that darkness...
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6th Nov 2022 7:18pm
Ah, this is definitely an interesting one. :) Another I had not read for so long but encompassing life struggles, anxiety, and so much more. How things can drain us... And at times that can even be pleasant in a way, a vampire in the night. So much passion to go alongside all these challenges. I am really glad you felt it and thought it is an excellent write. I quite like this one as well. The imagery is very meaningful to me. Thanks Ted!