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Ruined
You seduced me so cruelly
Your gaze hypnotized
While your touch paralyzed
And I was powerless to run
Saying not to be afraid
How sweet the poison is
Right in front of me
You took over my body
Now I cannot say no to you
Your every word, my command
I am lost in submission
Subservient to your desires
I cannot say no to you
Your desires are my pleasure
I lost myself in you
Who am I? I am only yours
And you make me ask
Then you make me beg
Your fingers jammed inside
A piano or a guitar
You play me so easily
I am your instrument
Each key is ecstasy
And the instrument moans
Dying for the next note
Only the music exists now
Each chord is unbearable
And the instrument screams
Contractions and vibrations
I cannot run, I surrender
Your lips on me, sliding
Along a very wet harmonica
Quivering and shaking
While you hold tight
Hands bound, struggling
Cry, suffer, and obey
I need you to play me
Again and again
The Skillful Musician
You dominate me completely
Taking me in every way
You tune me to your needs
Every sensation overpowers
I cannot say no to you
Everything is allowed
Dirty desires
Punish me
You are depraved (like me)
You are perverted (like me)
And I need it so much
You ruined me
Your gaze hypnotized
While your touch paralyzed
And I was powerless to run
Saying not to be afraid
How sweet the poison is
Right in front of me
You took over my body
Now I cannot say no to you
Your every word, my command
I am lost in submission
Subservient to your desires
I cannot say no to you
Your desires are my pleasure
I lost myself in you
Who am I? I am only yours
And you make me ask
Then you make me beg
Your fingers jammed inside
A piano or a guitar
You play me so easily
I am your instrument
Each key is ecstasy
And the instrument moans
Dying for the next note
Only the music exists now
Each chord is unbearable
And the instrument screams
Contractions and vibrations
I cannot run, I surrender
Your lips on me, sliding
Along a very wet harmonica
Quivering and shaking
While you hold tight
Hands bound, struggling
Cry, suffer, and obey
I need you to play me
Again and again
The Skillful Musician
You dominate me completely
Taking me in every way
You tune me to your needs
Every sensation overpowers
I cannot say no to you
Everything is allowed
Dirty desires
Punish me
You are depraved (like me)
You are perverted (like me)
And I need it so much
You ruined me
Author's Note
Fill in the blanks, what would you do with a blank canvas? If you could paint your deepest desires on and in someone.
And I say... Paint them in me.
And I say... Paint them in me.
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Re. Ruined
Anonymous
13th Jun 2022 11:19pm
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Re: Re. Ruined
14th Jun 2022 00:51am
Oh yes! I am a complex instrument to say the least.
But when you play to my soul... you will hear the most beautiful music.
Or get arrested for violating the noise ordinance (or mistakenly trying to kill someone)... but still...
You know what I am. lol
I enjoyed sharing my thoughts on music and getting back to more normal programming so to speak. :p
Playing all the notes that get you in Trouble. So much Trouble. xo
But when you play to my soul... you will hear the most beautiful music.
Or get arrested for violating the noise ordinance (or mistakenly trying to kill someone)... but still...
You know what I am. lol
I enjoyed sharing my thoughts on music and getting back to more normal programming so to speak. :p
Playing all the notes that get you in Trouble. So much Trouble. xo
Re. Ruined
13th Jun 2022 11:25pm
Lil X, you are one of a few writers on site that can take it there without going overboard. It's kinda like when the porn industry actually tried to put a plot behind their films. You paint a picture of raw and dark desire here that's will only be satiated by one source, one maestro. Please allow him to play on, tight work Lady
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Re: Re. Ruined
14th Jun 2022 00:52am
Wow, that is such high praise. You know how I struggle with compliments. :p (well you do now) "like when the porn industry tried to put a plot"... Oh my God, damn right - now that's a compliment I have to accept. lol I have so many raw and dark desires and sometimes the manifest in words, art, or music, or pretty much anything else. You get it. ;) xo
Re. Ruined
13th Jun 2022 11:32pm
Super piece sweetie, sexy, erotica, super hot
Well done
Love and light
Ron x
Well done
Love and light
Ron x
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Re: Re. Ruined
14th Jun 2022 00:53am
You know how much I love being sexy, erotic, and super hot Ron. And I want that love and light always, damnit. :) Sending you much passion and darkness back in return. I know you love it! ;) xo
Re. Ruined
13th Jun 2022 11:37pm
Ummm … Ummm … Ummmm … OOF. 🖤🖤. That was beautifully dark and beautifully written. Speechless is easy I am. I have a couple pieces of art that this spill reminded me of. One of a girl with her violin and one of a man playing her as of she was a cello. Loved it. Bravissimo Kristina 🖤🖤🖤
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Re: Re. Ruined
14th Jun 2022 1:02am
Hell yes! 'Ummm ... Ummm ... Ummmmm ... OOF" If I can get that response then I feel like you could really feel my lust and passion Swagger. I so love that! "Speechless" I have ways to make you talk. So many ways. Okay, not talk but you get the point. :p Ah, I have seen the one with a man playing her like she was cello; that would have definitely worked well also. So stoked that you loved it. xo
Re. Ruined
Anonymous
- Edited 14th Jun 2022 00:12am
13th Jun 2022 11:58pm
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Re: Re. Ruined
14th Jun 2022 1:21am
Oh how I love a dark smile shrouded in mystery. Being pulled into the darkness, and into someone's dreams. Wondering how did I get there; but knowing it's because I belong outside the fringe of what's normal. For some, the dark energy attracts more than the light. ;) Bathe in the darkness, you can always find the most ornate instruments there. xo
Re. Ruined
14th Jun 2022 00:04am
An instrument that begs to be played again and again...I can hear your beautiful sounds echoing into the night
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Re: Re. Ruined
14th Jun 2022 1:39am
What good is a beautiful instrument if it is not played again and again. It is only a decoration or played just enough to leave her wanting... You seem like someone that could hit the high notes Tim, can you hit the high notes? ;p The most beautiful music is the music you make yourself in the night. And the best instrument is the one you never want to put down. xo
Re. Ruined
14th Jun 2022 00:51am
I will always be there for you if you need to talk. Please set on fire with these words. Keep on writing.
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Re: Re. Ruined
14th Jun 2022 2:10am
Always setting something on fire whether on purpose or by accident Francisco. :p Stuff just combusts around me, it's not my fault.. Well, it's my fault but what's a girl to do when they won't give you a fire insurance policy anymore but try to look innocent. lol So many challenges. xo
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14th Jun 2022 5:40am
Re. Ruined
14th Jun 2022 00:53am
Re: Re. Ruined
14th Jun 2022 3:18am
So many check marks... Let's see; you forgot "quirky as hell" and "batshit crazy"... And... Oh hell no, I am not saying that, or that. * nevermind * Let's just leave it like it is. I can tell which check marks you like PS. It's like you are putting in your order? :p xo
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14th Jun 2022 3:59am
Re: Re. Ruined
14th Jun 2022 2:03pm
Pommes Frites, triple flash fried with mayo and ketchup. And bottle fermented Trappist ale too. You will get drunk on me. ;)
Re. Ruined
14th Jun 2022 1:03am
Hey KristinaXXX - hahah
Love how you created this to incorporate music and instruments.
I was reading along to the next music session stanza.
Also enjoyed how playful it was.
Great seeing you exercise all of your talents.
It's a longer piece but didn't read like one.
Great write!!
Love how you created this to incorporate music and instruments.
I was reading along to the next music session stanza.
Also enjoyed how playful it was.
Great seeing you exercise all of your talents.
It's a longer piece but didn't read like one.
Great write!!
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Re: Re. Ruined
Hey chica, KristinaXXX - I love that! ;)
I was listening to music, and well thinking of other things. lol
So one inspiration leads to another. :p
What would we do without music and instruments.
I am so glad you joined my music session.
"It's a longer piece but didn't read like one."
Wow, that is such a great compliment. Thank you!
I appreciate your encouragement so much. xo
I was listening to music, and well thinking of other things. lol
So one inspiration leads to another. :p
What would we do without music and instruments.
I am so glad you joined my music session.
"It's a longer piece but didn't read like one."
Wow, that is such a great compliment. Thank you!
I appreciate your encouragement so much. xo
Re. Ruined
14th Jun 2022 8:03am
missKX
to an amateur musician like myself, this piece just sizzled my fretboard!
and given the licence to manipulate you accoustically, twinging and twanging
composing to you, on you and through you, is Sinsational!
If I could paint depravity and perversion all over your body with my guitar I wood!
Every musical note has its own colour, every chord, its pallette
-CIU
to an amateur musician like myself, this piece just sizzled my fretboard!
and given the licence to manipulate you accoustically, twinging and twanging
composing to you, on you and through you, is Sinsational!
If I could paint depravity and perversion all over your body with my guitar I wood!
Every musical note has its own colour, every chord, its pallette
-CIU
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Re: Re. Ruined
14th Jun 2022 1:46pm
Well I do love being the fretboard. ;) That just sends my mind to all kinds of places. Twinging and twanging and so much more, to be manipulated acoustically as the bass vibrates in the soul, and other places. ;) I want to feel it all, making treble together. Painting depravity and perversion is it's own art form. And that's the art for me. Each note is unique, every chord makes me shake, and the palette is beautiful... xo
Re. Ruined
14th Jun 2022 10:10am
Re: Re. Ruined
14th Jun 2022 2:10pm
You know it DC! ;) I am so happy you came to my concert. My song is always filled with the deepest passion. Some instruments very much need to played often. So many songs, each one full of intense feeling and emotion. xo
Re. Ruined
Anonymous
14th Jun 2022 1:15pm
A wonderful piece! Your work always "involves" the reader...that's precisely what a good poem should do!
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Re: Re. Ruined
14th Jun 2022 2:18pm
That is such an awesome thing to say Mister, Thank you!. I am so happy you joined me to listen to my music. When I write it comes from the heart, mind, and soul. So when the reader feels involved, can feel my emotion, that is always so wonderful to hear. I really appreciate you stopping by and sharing your thoughts. xo
Re. Ruined
15th Jun 2022 5:43pm
Re: Re. Ruined
15th Jun 2022 5:49pm
You have no idea how much it means to me that you hear the music of my sensuality. If the tune cannot be heard then it is truly wasted. And I can only hope that you continue to play the instrument, because the instrument needs to be played; or else it's just a lifeless inanimate object. And there is nothing more tragic than that. xo
Re. Ruined
17th Jun 2022 1:40am
Perfect meter and perfect almost rhyme [Meaning the almost is perfect, not that you missed perfection]. Your prowess as a writer is stunning. Your openness is beauty itself, your lusts disquieting and endearing. My heart melts to read these poems, to see so deeply into another human being. I do not feel worthy of the gift you give of yourself as I've never been this brave.
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Re: Re. Ruined
I have had to learn there is no perfection and it was a hard lesson, damn OCD. That you find it stunning will always be amazing to me. That I post at all I suppose is amazing to me. Some people find me to be too open in some ways I suppose, no filter but I tried making one; still it just keeps breaking. And to quiet sometimes too - damn contradictions. Disquieting and endearing - you know me so well. Anyway, everything I write comes from the heart and soul and there are often deeper meanings that often only I can see. I am really happy you see it as a gift; that means so much to me. I think you are very brave.
Re. Ruined
17th Jun 2022 5:02pm
In my dreams I play the instrument of love that you play with your body. I tried the magic notes you taught me on my girlfriend. A very loud drum sound came out that bothered my ear. I think my instrument is out of tune :). You tickled my soul thank you princess
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Re: Re. Ruined
17th Jun 2022 5:15pm
Sometimes the instrument can be 'hard' to tune. But the 'harder' you try, the more beautiful the sound... I know I love the loud bang of the drums as they reverberate through me. Still I never want to hurt your ears but no promises there. :p I love tickling the soul... The soul needs to be ticked. And you are playing as the royal musician...
Re. Ruined
18th Jun 2022 3:24am
Ironically, a few years back I wrote something specifically about a guitar and a piano. The piano was more a table, with pages of lyrics being slid off, out of the way. And the guitar had a hidden song inside it's hollow, saying something about "you found me, now play me".
And drums, geesh, that is the heart attack I'm still having..... !
Music is definitely an elixir for the soul. And you're the medicine woman here!
Excellent write, you.
And drums, geesh, that is the heart attack I'm still having..... !
Music is definitely an elixir for the soul. And you're the medicine woman here!
Excellent write, you.
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Re: Re. Ruined
18th Jun 2022 4:14pm
Oooo.. I like some body to body sliding, getting slid off again and again. But can you slide on the piano, while playing the guitar, and banging on the drums. Damn, it's so hot in here. An instrument that is not played cannot make music and that's just sad. What a waste... I have all kinds of medicine, probably most of it is illegal because there is a law on the books somewhere saying you cannot do that. lol But... * nevermind, innocent look *
Re. Ruined
19th Jul 2022 10:41pm
Like a harmonica! And here I thought us drummers were the best because have fast hands.
Awesome spill K. it's a sensual and passionate write, each line reading like heavy breaths, with anticipation on the next line.
Awesome spill K. it's a sensual and passionate write, each line reading like heavy breaths, with anticipation on the next line.
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