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She awoke to a loud silence
and had never been so
afraid in her life.
She decided to scream
like a fuckin banshee
and break up the deafening
with something shrill.
It worked better than any pill.
and had never been so
afraid in her life.
She decided to scream
like a fuckin banshee
and break up the deafening
with something shrill.
It worked better than any pill.
Published 24th May 2022
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24th May 2022 5:58pm
…I feel like in stanza two you could definitely use a dash.
… joking 🤣
I actually liked the suspense in this little snippet. It builds quite a lot for a little piece.
Thank you for sharing :)
-M
… joking 🤣
I actually liked the suspense in this little snippet. It builds quite a lot for a little piece.
Thank you for sharing :)
-M
24th May 2022 5:59pm
24th May 2022 7:06pm
24th May 2022 7:18pm
Those loud silences, I know them well.
Fucking frightening stuff.
The antidote seems like the perfect remedy.
That word "shrill" very clever placement that.
Thanks for sharing this one. It resonates.
Blue Skies at you
Al
Fucking frightening stuff.
The antidote seems like the perfect remedy.
That word "shrill" very clever placement that.
Thanks for sharing this one. It resonates.
Blue Skies at you
Al
25th May 2022 11:15am
Dear N,
Oh yeah. The day I became a banshee was the best day of my life! It eases some of the pain. Another brilliant poem! H🌷
Oh yeah. The day I became a banshee was the best day of my life! It eases some of the pain. Another brilliant poem! H🌷
26th May 2022 5:29am
26th May 2022 3:07pm
Self- accentuation is better than any external advice.
I love the expression,
KS
I love the expression,
KS
6th Jul 2022 1:42am
