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Quenched
He wanted to read her
journal so she threw it
in a well.
He later went to the well
and drank a bucket
of the water, hoping
to swallow down all
her deep dark secrets.
He ended up with cholera
and died.
journal so she threw it
in a well.
He later went to the well
and drank a bucket
of the water, hoping
to swallow down all
her deep dark secrets.
He ended up with cholera
and died.
Published 4th May 2022
| Edited 5th May 2022
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5th May 2022 00:38am
Sh***t happens. and, naturally, putting your nose where it does not belong can cost you dearly.
5th May 2022 3:04am
This is a great choice of combo for the idea of drinking her words. Very clever!
The ending, made me feel let down. Dang it. In retrospect, he should have stayed out of her business?!
The ending, made me feel let down. Dang it. In retrospect, he should have stayed out of her business?!
5th May 2022 6:21am
Dear N,
Life’s a gamble isn’t it? I love the irony. I love the direct manner in which you’ve written this piece. Beware the well water. H🌷
Life’s a gamble isn’t it? I love the irony. I love the direct manner in which you’ve written this piece. Beware the well water. H🌷
I love the ending. abrupt. immediate.
artfully metaphoric in its delivery.
I love the pictures you add to your poems. you so naturally put the perfect image up!
Its funny, years ago and I mean at least ten, I had someone trying to copy and paste my DU poetry in a similar attempt of "drinking words". So this entire poem carried some strong meaning to me.
Thanks for sharing this! Much enjoyed!
Al
artfully metaphoric in its delivery.
I love the pictures you add to your poems. you so naturally put the perfect image up!
Its funny, years ago and I mean at least ten, I had someone trying to copy and paste my DU poetry in a similar attempt of "drinking words". So this entire poem carried some strong meaning to me.
Thanks for sharing this! Much enjoyed!
Al
7th May 2022 00:50am
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18th Jul 2022 6:13pm
I love this, and in fact anything where words come to life and actually inhabit the world in some way. So that was the best part for me. The ending was unexpected, but fantastic... the water is water again and it serves him right!!
18th Jul 2022 6:19pm
