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What Happens
when
i remove identities
one by one
what remains?
i am no longer
son father husband
nurse educator healer
man
when i remove identities
one by one
no longer
strong insecure
handsome kind
overbearing selfish
what happens
when i remove identities
one by one
no longer
overweight out of shape
gray wrinkled creaky
what happens when i
remove identities
one by one
no longer
atheist democrat
american anarchist
what happens when
i remove identities
one by one
no longer
artist intellectual
musician builder cook
creator
what happens
when i remove identities
one by one
what happens
when i am no longer
defined by the external
but simply
me?
(C) 2022 Raibeart Bruis
i remove identities
one by one
what remains?
i am no longer
son father husband
nurse educator healer
man
when i remove identities
one by one
no longer
strong insecure
handsome kind
overbearing selfish
what happens
when i remove identities
one by one
no longer
overweight out of shape
gray wrinkled creaky
what happens when i
remove identities
one by one
no longer
atheist democrat
american anarchist
what happens when
i remove identities
one by one
no longer
artist intellectual
musician builder cook
creator
what happens
when i remove identities
one by one
what happens
when i am no longer
defined by the external
but simply
me?
(C) 2022 Raibeart Bruis
Published 17th Jan 2022
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17th Jan 2022 3:55pm
Love everything about this… flow is perfect… cadence sustained… engaging… steeped in authenticity…
18th Jan 2022 4:19pm
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17th Jan 2022 7:13pm
Damn, KP...
I am so immersed in the excellent (I'm using the words as positives) barrage and bombardment of the questionings you very cleverly ask.... I'm gobsmacked.... This is chock-full of sooo many terrifically profound, deep truths that one can and should confront about themselves. Ones that you deliberately ask of yourself, which proceeds to shining a light so clearly....
I was riveted and applaud the courage of creating and sharing.... This feels so personal and I know that I might of had difficulty in sharing, if this was my own write.... Well done you.... a real introspective and truly outstandingly penned poem.
One of your best.... imo.
🌹 - 💙
I am so immersed in the excellent (I'm using the words as positives) barrage and bombardment of the questionings you very cleverly ask.... I'm gobsmacked.... This is chock-full of sooo many terrifically profound, deep truths that one can and should confront about themselves. Ones that you deliberately ask of yourself, which proceeds to shining a light so clearly....
I was riveted and applaud the courage of creating and sharing.... This feels so personal and I know that I might of had difficulty in sharing, if this was my own write.... Well done you.... a real introspective and truly outstandingly penned poem.
One of your best.... imo.
🌹 - 💙
18th Jan 2022 4:25pm
These are questions I ask frequently.
Yet still do not know the answers.
Who is the observer and who is the one watching the observer?
Thank you. Thank you.
❣️🙏🏼
Yet still do not know the answers.
Who is the observer and who is the one watching the observer?
Thank you. Thank you.
❣️🙏🏼
17th Jan 2022 7:36pm
good afternoon dearest poet
I think all those things we are in a sense imprinted on our soul
I believe you remain as such a beautiful soul...
this is wonderful self discovery
while introducing me to the man himself
underneath it all...
beautiful...
I think all those things we are in a sense imprinted on our soul
I believe you remain as such a beautiful soul...
this is wonderful self discovery
while introducing me to the man himself
underneath it all...
beautiful...
20th Jan 2022 6:36pm
I think I've yet to meet the 'man himself'.
Self-discovery never ends.
Thank you.
🙏🏼
Self-discovery never ends.
Thank you.
🙏🏼
20th Jan 2022 6:41pm
you're right about that we will forever seek when we stop seeking what is there?
