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Don't Forget The Ice
Slowly sipping her gin,
she said she had found love,
yet it wasn't him.
Slowly sipping his gin
he said when the bottles empty
she'll know where to find him.
Drink, drank, drunk,
sink, sank, sunk
and a bunch of other
bullshit about love.
She flicked her glass,
it magically filled back up.
she said she had found love,
yet it wasn't him.
Slowly sipping his gin
he said when the bottles empty
she'll know where to find him.
Drink, drank, drunk,
sink, sank, sunk
and a bunch of other
bullshit about love.
She flicked her glass,
it magically filled back up.
Published 28th Oct 2021
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28th Oct 2021 6:04pm
Dear N,
This is a great piece. It brought to mind how I’m never really drinking with the one I love. I thought the third stanza was a fabulous play on how important things can get convoluted when I’m just trying to get through something as opposed to dealing with something and a flurry of blah blah words are just said. Anyway, this is awesome. While I’m not sure who exactly the photo is it reminds me of a painting of the Blessed Mother but I love the expression of the image as it lends itself to the undercurrent of the poem. H 🌷
This is a great piece. It brought to mind how I’m never really drinking with the one I love. I thought the third stanza was a fabulous play on how important things can get convoluted when I’m just trying to get through something as opposed to dealing with something and a flurry of blah blah words are just said. Anyway, this is awesome. While I’m not sure who exactly the photo is it reminds me of a painting of the Blessed Mother but I love the expression of the image as it lends itself to the undercurrent of the poem. H 🌷
28th Oct 2021 6:29pm
I Believe it's Mary Magdalen not sure I'll check when I get home it's hanging on my gallery wall. Thank you Honoria 😁
This is a great write. How it all starts. Who knows if you will meet again - staring with one common factor - Gin.
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13th Nov 2021 4:17am
Nice write ✍️
I like your word choice and style.
I can relate in my own way.
Thanks for sharing.
I like your word choice and style.
I can relate in my own way.
Thanks for sharing.
25th Nov 2021 6:48pm
What an expression! love, joy, feelings or frustration. But it speaks state of mind.
Love your tiny poems.
KS
Love your tiny poems.
KS
