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fleeting remembrances of a hardened prisoner.
he stirs my innermost secrets
to become untwisted
then twists me
into his, of new
sanguine
in hard strength
a mythos
of his now owned blue
murdering me
with knife sharp
wit or an acumen
of brutal erotic
my mind's eye
scribes his
O' his quintessential ruffian
bold in born and breed dominance
a mouthful
of soluble silence
I adhered to his essence
inexplicably, no... yes certainly.
curling my wings around
as he clips them
..... with my eager approval
and I climax with an angelic cry
Author's Note
Inspired by beautiful crimsin's The Hard Man and by subrosa's Prisoner 24601
Thank you... Your writings so moved me and I truly loved them.
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Thank you... Your writings so moved me and I truly loved them.
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Re. a fleeting remembrance of a hardened prisoner.
13th Jan 2021 00:05am
As usual a great write. Love the surprise ending. Hugs, kisses, and peace. oral
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Re. a fleeting remembrance of a hardened prisoner.
13th Jan 2021 1:00am
You know the old saying, "a hard man is good to find!"
hugs,
buddhakitty.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
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Re: Re. a fleeting remembrance of a hardened prisoner.
13th Jan 2021 1:06am
Hee hee hee.
I love this comment.. So. Much.
Thank you for reading, bk
I'm extremely grateful
💜
xoxo
-B
I love this comment.. So. Much.
Thank you for reading, bk
I'm extremely grateful
💜
xoxo
-B
Re. a fleeting remembrance of a hardened prisoner.
13th Jan 2021 1:40am
Re: Re. a fleeting remembrance of a hardened prisoner.
13th Jan 2021 1:41am
Re. a fleeting remembrance of a hardened prisoner.
13th Jan 2021 2:39am
.... truly an Amazing inspirational write! Crimsin and Bluevelvete is the perfect recipe for greatness in Poetry! .... Bravo!!!!!
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Re: Re. a fleeting remembrance of a hardened prisoner.
13th Jan 2021 3:11am
Re. a fleeting remembrance of a hardened prisoner.
13th Jan 2021 3:22am
Everything you write is beautiful just like you BlueBoo💋💜
Hugs and a pinch 😌
Your sis
Jackie 😘
Listed 👍🏻
Hugs and a pinch 😌
Your sis
Jackie 😘
Listed 👍🏻
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Re: Re. a fleeting remembrance of a hardened prisoner.
13th Jan 2021 3:25am
Hee hee hee
That pinch tickles!
💜
🌠
Ty my sweet!
You're a ray of sunshine ☀
🌹
xo
That pinch tickles!
💜
🌠
Ty my sweet!
You're a ray of sunshine ☀
🌹
xo
Re. a fleeting remembrance of a hardened prisoner.
13th Jan 2021 3:25am
Re: Re. a fleeting remembrance of a hardened prisoner.
13th Jan 2021 4:08am
Re. a fleeting remembrance of a hardened prisoner.
13th Jan 2021 5:19am
Re: Re. a fleeting remembrance of a hardened prisoner.
13th Jan 2021 5:25am
Hee hee hee Ty, C
For the RL add and all your loveliness
I'm grateful for you.
💜
(missed you today!)
🌹
xo
For the RL add and all your loveliness
I'm grateful for you.
💜
(missed you today!)
🌹
xo
Re. a fleeting remembrance of a hardened prisoner.
I love the title❣❣ This is beautifully erotic and roughly romantic. This passage is steeped in sensuality,
"a mouthful
of soluble silence
I adhered to his essence"
"a mouthful
of soluble silence
I adhered to his essence"
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Re: Re. a fleeting remembrance of a hardened prisoner.
13th Jan 2021 5:40am
Good evening my dearest B, Thank you for reading and I'm glad you enjoyed my spur of the moment 'gotta write it down' after reading Brenda's spill. poem. I had taken on this 'write ride'. Your comments and thoughtful and much appreciated
I do love your visits so!
🌹
xo
B
I do love your visits so!
🌹
xo
B
Re. a fleeting remembrance of a hardened prisoner.
13th Jan 2021 6:19am
Re: Re. a fleeting remembrance of a hardened prisoner.
16th Jan 2021 00:53am
You're very kind with your thoughts and wishes.
Thank you, Dear FeNyX. I wish I was as good and as transcendent as yourself.... I do my very best, please understand that... 🙏
Much love, hugs and returned blessings,
🌹
xo
B
Thank you, Dear FeNyX. I wish I was as good and as transcendent as yourself.... I do my very best, please understand that... 🙏
Much love, hugs and returned blessings,
🌹
xo
B
Re. a fleeting remembrance of a hardened prisoner.
16th Jan 2021 00:08am
I loved the spiritual like aspect that it begins with, passionate and robust as it moves into a more hard tone. Then... I didn't see that coming (not pun intended) there at the end. It made me go back to read it again.
Nicely done Blue.
Nicely done Blue.
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Re: Re. a fleeting remembrance of a hardened prisoner.
16th Jan 2021 00:56am
lol.. I understand that response... I went back and forth with the ending, opted for what you see... I'm not sure if love it but it was the choice... lol.
I'm so grateful for your read and the fact you leave your experience reading as well your opinion.. Ty Ty Ty... I'm lucky to have your friendship.
💜
xoxo
B
I'm so grateful for your read and the fact you leave your experience reading as well your opinion.. Ty Ty Ty... I'm lucky to have your friendship.
💜
xoxo
B