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i won't be seeing you~[in my dreams]
I fell asleep and dreamt
of nothing but you...
Warmth morphed into heat
to burn so complete
Flesh betwixt flesh
Writhing in the aether, enmeshed
A kiss on my belly sparking
those wings of butterfly flutter~ embarking
Your fingertip'd glide across alabaster
s l i d e
Eliciting a tiny mew of a goosebump sigh
echoing within that dreamy ever after
Never—
not once
did I see even a trace
confirming what I knew,
even in dreams
yours, is a face erased
swirling in my imaginary blue,
basking in an unreal ethereal hue
O' my one and only
... again, always and true...
.... as I fell asleep and dreamt
of nothing but you....
Author's Note
©Blu2020
just a daydream while avoiding work.... oops!
just a daydream while avoiding work.... oops!
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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Anonymous
- Edited 25th Oct 2022 6:45pm
3rd Dec 2020 6:10pm
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Re: Re. i won't be seeing you~[in my dreams]
3rd Dec 2020 6:18pm
Thank you Tim!
I've come a long wayside since my first days here, I couldn't rhyme my way out of a paper bag.... truly horrible - I swear! ... lmao. So, your comments really make me feel a sense of accomplishment. I appreciate your visit, the kind feedback, the list add and you, just taking the time.
... much love and respect
🌹🌹🌹
xoxo
-B
Love the new avatar!
I've come a long wayside since my first days here, I couldn't rhyme my way out of a paper bag.... truly horrible - I swear! ... lmao. So, your comments really make me feel a sense of accomplishment. I appreciate your visit, the kind feedback, the list add and you, just taking the time.
... much love and respect
🌹🌹🌹
xoxo
-B
Love the new avatar!
Re. i won't be seeing you~[in my dreams]
3rd Dec 2020 6:26pm
Re: Re. i won't be seeing you~[in my dreams]
3rd Dec 2020 6:29pm
why aren't there faces???...
It's not just me then.
Thank goodness
Ty, Adagio
I love seeing you
🥀🖤 🥀 🖤 🥀
It's not just me then.
Thank goodness
Ty, Adagio
I love seeing you
🥀🖤 🥀 🖤 🥀
Re. i won't be seeing you~[in my dreams]
3rd Dec 2020 6:27pm
Re: Re. i won't be seeing you~[in my dreams]
3rd Dec 2020 6:31pm
I agree, C... lol
Ty for reading and the list add.
I'm glad you enjoyed it and you're too kind
🌹💜🌹
xoxo
-B
Ty for reading and the list add.
I'm glad you enjoyed it and you're too kind
🌹💜🌹
xoxo
-B
Anonymous
- Edited 20th Sep 2021 1:45am
3rd Dec 2020 6:50pm
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Re: Re. i won't be seeing you~[in my dreams]
3rd Dec 2020 6:59pm
Shhhh ... working from home, they'll never know!!
Mwahahahaha... lol
Ty for reading and your lovely comments, Wilber!
I certainly appreciate your thoughts and insights.
So glad it could brighten up your day! ☀
It's kinda almost a requirement, considering I'm in Florida and we're called 'The Sunshine State'.... lol
💜
xoxo
B
Mwahahahaha... lol
Ty for reading and your lovely comments, Wilber!
I certainly appreciate your thoughts and insights.
So glad it could brighten up your day! ☀
It's kinda almost a requirement, considering I'm in Florida and we're called 'The Sunshine State'.... lol
💜
xoxo
B
Re. i won't be seeing you~[in my dreams]
3rd Dec 2020 6:54pm
Re: Re. i won't be seeing you~[in my dreams]
3rd Dec 2020 7:04pm
Wow, such a lovely comments, indeed.
I'm humbled by your thoughtfulness and list add.
and all smiles that I could resonate...
-Always welcomed
🌹
xo
B
I'm humbled by your thoughtfulness and list add.
and all smiles that I could resonate...
-Always welcomed
🌹
xo
B
Re. i won't be seeing you~[in my dreams]
3rd Dec 2020 7:03pm
Re: Re. i won't be seeing you~[in my dreams]
3rd Dec 2020 7:08pm
Re. i won't be seeing you~[in my dreams]
3rd Dec 2020 8:55pm
You bad girl. 💪👅🤘 I loved hiding social media tabs open on my work computer, it hardly ever got in the way of my duties, at least I think so. Haha. Beautifully vivid language Susan, it has terrific flow and erotic sensitivity, rendered with tasteful proportion.
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Re: Re. i won't be seeing you~[in my dreams]
4th Dec 2020 4:09am
I knew we were kindred naughty spirits! ... haha
I work at home, so it's easy to slack off and not get caught...lucky girl 🍀
I thank you for the compliment and your always awesome feedback!
💜
xoxo
Susan
I work at home, so it's easy to slack off and not get caught...lucky girl 🍀
I thank you for the compliment and your always awesome feedback!
💜
xoxo
Susan
Re. i won't be seeing you~[in my dreams]
3rd Dec 2020 9:18pm
Hullo
quite the write, Lady. fantastic language and execution. well done and a hat tip to you
quite the write, Lady. fantastic language and execution. well done and a hat tip to you
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Re: Re. i won't be seeing you~[in my dreams]
3rd Dec 2020 10:36pm
Hi there, E
I'm glad I wasn't doing my actual work, work and decided to daydream a bit, if it meant getting your visit. (Damn charmer, she is)
Appreciations on your kind words and I'm tickled you enjoyed it.
I thank you.
..... Much love and respect,
🌹💜🌹
xoxo
-B
I'm glad I wasn't doing my actual work, work and decided to daydream a bit, if it meant getting your visit. (Damn charmer, she is)
Appreciations on your kind words and I'm tickled you enjoyed it.
I thank you.
..... Much love and respect,
🌹💜🌹
xoxo
-B
Re. i won't be seeing you~[in my dreams]
4th Dec 2020 3:50am
Re. i won't be seeing you~[in my dreams]
4th Dec 2020 5:26am
When you started that second stanza it was like a heavy beat drop, everything became so vivid and palpable.
That “ Writhing in the aether, enmeshed” line was like a delicious torturous caress.
Excellent spill.
That “ Writhing in the aether, enmeshed” line was like a delicious torturous caress.
Excellent spill.
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Re. i won't be seeing you~[in my dreams]
4th Dec 2020 5:34pm
....damn your daydreams are a license to deliver hotttt artistry and flair in this delicious poem. Your fantasy thoughts and romantic imagination written in verse is a boost for me in the real world.......imagining 50 Shades of Imaginary Bluevelvete, LOL. Truly a Beautiful Poem!!!
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Re: Re. i won't be seeing you~[in my dreams]
4th Dec 2020 5:47pm
That's one sexy af compliment... whew 💦..
I looooove it! ;) I have now come to really enjoy your visits , F-F! I'm aglow with your lovely comments and full of appreciation for the list add and your eloquently stated feedback.
💜
Enjoy your weekend
🌹
B
I looooove it! ;) I have now come to really enjoy your visits , F-F! I'm aglow with your lovely comments and full of appreciation for the list add and your eloquently stated feedback.
💜
Enjoy your weekend
🌹
B
Re. i won't be seeing you~[in my dreams]
Dear Blue, i identify most with the avoiding work part😊 This piece is beautifully written, romantic, with a smidge of melancholy. I was touched most by this sensual passage (you know me ever look'n for the sensuality)
"Writhing in the aether, enmeshed
A kiss on my belly sparking
those wings of butterfly flutter~ embarking"
Enmeshed, entwined, interwoven all titillating, sensual words that describe so well the deep connection of intimacy.
"Writhing in the aether, enmeshed
A kiss on my belly sparking
those wings of butterfly flutter~ embarking"
Enmeshed, entwined, interwoven all titillating, sensual words that describe so well the deep connection of intimacy.
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Re: Re. i won't be seeing you~[in my dreams]
We're incognito at will slackers!! Not really, but sometimes, one needs a poetic break! Ohh how I love the sensual, erotic, sexy words. I wrote a few poems with vignettes of my favorite "those words" are what I call them... those that make me shiver with want with unbridled desire. You feel it shiver up your spine when you read them in the perfect context... yeah! I love it. Thank you for your incredible feedback and your thoughtful passage choice. I'm so glad we found each other's work! There's always a silver lining somewhere! In an otherwise apparently horrible day, thank you for being THAT silver.
💜 much love,
xoxo
B
💜 much love,
xoxo
B
Re: Re. i won't be seeing you~[in my dreams]
4th Dec 2020 11:05pm
BTW, I wasn't speaking German, that was supposed be "Dear Blue and mot Der Blue. "Those" words make life more worth living and you use them well. You have been reading and liking my work for a while and I haven't reciprocated for lack of desire just life intervenes. I too am glad that we recognized our work and I am thrilled to be silver to your gold 😘
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Re: Re. i won't be seeing you~[in my dreams]
Past is past...
... and I more than understand life getting in the way! We're here now and Yay! 🎉
Ty for those words and I look forward to reading more or your offerings in the days to come,
Herr, Gahddess_Worship... (I tease! lol 😂)
xoxo 💋
... and I more than understand life getting in the way! We're here now and Yay! 🎉
Ty for those words and I look forward to reading more or your offerings in the days to come,
Herr, Gahddess_Worship... (I tease! lol 😂)
xoxo 💋
Re. i won't be seeing you~[in my dreams]
4th Dec 2020 8:09pm
Just lovely blue⚘... the power of ones dreams... may yours come to a beautiful fruition...
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Re: Re. i won't be seeing you~[in my dreams]
I can hope.
Ty for your wishes my way, Eli
I'm so glad you enjoyed it
Much love,
🌹 💜 🌹
xoxo
B
Ty for your wishes my way, Eli
I'm so glad you enjoyed it
Much love,
🌹 💜 🌹
xoxo
B
Re. i won't be seeing you~[in my dreams]
Dream switchback on hydroelectric night vision
When a faint meow sings of azalea in spring
On a blossom train to paradise
Where April rains pearls of ruby dust
On fallen stars from distant gold bands
That orbit her eyes like lava lamp orbs
That morph in sleep wandering jewels
With his sun the heat of a million diamonds
Worn by Shiva like miniature chakras
Who is a master of hand yoga
Fingers like hickory sticks
For the continuation of her finishing school
As her spool unravels in pangs of ecstasy
Just a lark on your gorgeous poem. Love how you write love and the deepening way it touches me.
Much love,
John
When a faint meow sings of azalea in spring
On a blossom train to paradise
Where April rains pearls of ruby dust
On fallen stars from distant gold bands
That orbit her eyes like lava lamp orbs
That morph in sleep wandering jewels
With his sun the heat of a million diamonds
Worn by Shiva like miniature chakras
Who is a master of hand yoga
Fingers like hickory sticks
For the continuation of her finishing school
As her spool unravels in pangs of ecstasy
Just a lark on your gorgeous poem. Love how you write love and the deepening way it touches me.
Much love,
John
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Re: Re. i won't be seeing you~[in my dreams]
15th Sep 2022 8:13am
You're an oasis of artistic profundity. I drink from your well and devour all that is....poetry.
Much love, my darling....
-💙
Much love, my darling....
-💙
Re: Re. i won't be seeing you~[in my dreams]
15th Sep 2022 12:27pm
You have awakened my artistic muse. I drink from you and your profundity. And through your poetry mine is born.
Much love to you my darling,
John
Much love to you my darling,
John
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