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Where are you?
This kills me again
And you are as beautiful as the first dew
and it still remains on my heart
And on my heart it stays…
heavy as the whole world
I know it will stop soon
I know that it will stop quickly
and you will disappear somewhere
You know I'm sick
We used to laugh like children
And you are the most beautiful to me
like that first kiss
which cinched my fate
All my signals are wrong,
they lead me to ruin
They are leading me to disaster
And around me the remnants of our love
My biography
Fills a few pieces of paper
which are difficult to read
And you are as beautiful
as the first flower in spring
and I am like a sunflower
who is still praying for dawn
begging for dawn
And where are you?
And you are as beautiful as the first dew
and it still remains on my heart
And on my heart it stays…
heavy as the whole world
I know it will stop soon
I know that it will stop quickly
and you will disappear somewhere
You know I'm sick
We used to laugh like children
And you are the most beautiful to me
like that first kiss
which cinched my fate
All my signals are wrong,
they lead me to ruin
They are leading me to disaster
And around me the remnants of our love
My biography
Fills a few pieces of paper
which are difficult to read
And you are as beautiful
as the first flower in spring
and I am like a sunflower
who is still praying for dawn
begging for dawn
And where are you?
Published 20th Jul 2020
Author's Note
Not a current event. just felt like writing about breakup and heartbreak.
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20th Jul 2020 10:26pm
This kills me again
And you are as beautiful as the first dew
and it still remains on my heart
And on my heart it stays…
heavy as the whole world
Beautifully descriptive summation of love's sunset and then the night..
And you are as beautiful as the first dew
and it still remains on my heart
And on my heart it stays…
heavy as the whole world
Beautifully descriptive summation of love's sunset and then the night..
20th Jul 2020 10:44pm
I am glad you found it a meaningful summation. ❤ Thanks for the comment and RL entry. :)
20th Jul 2020 10:46pm
20th Jul 2020 10:51pm
I know I have said this at least once before, but ...
Your words always have a way to be so beautiful and devastating at the same time
It’s like a good ole whiskey drinking country song with a sprinkle of eloquence on top :)
Great job on this Kristina
Your words always have a way to be so beautiful and devastating at the same time
It’s like a good ole whiskey drinking country song with a sprinkle of eloquence on top :)
Great job on this Kristina
21st Jul 2020 00:56am
I seem to recall you saying that before. Well I like the sprinkle of eloquence on top. lol :) You know I do have a number of positive ones that lack the devastating part. Thanks for commenting and the RL entry. ❤
20th Jul 2020 11:00pm
Dear Kristina, this is a wonderfully honest piece. Your words illustrate so well your feelings and emotions that I can feel them as if we shared the same life experiences. The first passage that touched me is,
"All my signals are wrong,
they lead me to ruin"
And secondly,
"I am like a sunflower
who is still praying for dawn
begging for dawn"
Bravissima BD❣❣
"All my signals are wrong,
they lead me to ruin"
And secondly,
"I am like a sunflower
who is still praying for dawn
begging for dawn"
Bravissima BD❣❣
21st Jul 2020 1:00am
Thanks GW, I really appreciate your comment and feedback as always. I am glad you can feel emotions. :) ❤
21st Jul 2020 3:03am
Dear K,
First, I’m happy to read this is not a current event. Yea!
“My biography
Fills a few pieces of paper
which are difficult to read ” for me, seems an underlying touchstone in the piece as the heroine might feel isolated unto herself and this love interest understood that isolation and now is gone. So taking that understanding and she’s left alone again. Vulnerable and closed down. That was the picture in my mind as I read for these young lovers. Alas...
Engaging piece of poetry. A great exercise for expanding and developing writing ideas. I should do that. (I won’t. My laziness prevents that) Wonderfully creative and thoughtful. H🌷
First, I’m happy to read this is not a current event. Yea!
“My biography
Fills a few pieces of paper
which are difficult to read ” for me, seems an underlying touchstone in the piece as the heroine might feel isolated unto herself and this love interest understood that isolation and now is gone. So taking that understanding and she’s left alone again. Vulnerable and closed down. That was the picture in my mind as I read for these young lovers. Alas...
Engaging piece of poetry. A great exercise for expanding and developing writing ideas. I should do that. (I won’t. My laziness prevents that) Wonderfully creative and thoughtful. H🌷
21st Jul 2020 9:06pm
Your interpretation is definitely along the lines of what I was thinking and so I am glad you were able to make sense of it. :) ❤ Thank you so much for the compliment and comment. As always, I love hearing from you. ❤
21st Jul 2020 9:20pm
I'm loving the vulnerability you have the courage to write from Kristina. 💖🙏
21st Jul 2020 9:34pm
Thanks Daniel, your encouragement has definitely helped me and I appreciate that a lot. :) I write from the heart so I guess the vulnerability shows through. ❤
21st Jul 2020 9:49pm
Absolutely it does. Truth rings it's silent chimes, I heard a poem recently that called flowers "tongueless bells." That is what a poem that speaks from the heart sounds like, to me.
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22nd Jul 2020 00:28am
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22nd Jul 2020 9:12pm
Anonymous
22nd Jul 2020 9:17pm
That's terrible that it didn't work out for you two ladies.
22nd Jul 2020 9:22pm
Anonymous
22nd Jul 2020 9:23pm
My thoughts exactly. ;)
