she pushes the wind dial with her fingers

Hey Fields, This is Gorgeous...Oh man do I love it...I haven't more proper words.

I simply magnified my screen a tad and it was easily read, though...if I had on my glasses, I may have read it fine.


Again Friend...
Lovely Write!!!

Thank you so much again.

I am finding doing the visual poems really has kicked my butt a bit recently. a new lease etc.

so appreciated

The image is impressive but overpowers the text being so small... a challenge for me on my 2 1/2” x 3 1/2” screen on my iPhone SE.  Would you consider publishing the image without the poem with the poem shown separately?  That would work for me just fine, though it’s a lot to ask of you.  If others are also having the same problem, perhaps then you might want to reconsider?

ever,
Jade 🐾

sorry and thank you. been faffing about with this forever. always appreciate your comments.

The thing with a centered image is that it pushes the poem against the border with no room to breathe.  Try off-centerng to the viewer's right somewhat, then bring the poem out a bit from the vignette.

The entire piece is gorgeous as it is; however, could be better with a shift.  

Thanks again. your idea was spot on. have changed it and am much happier. still learning this visual-poem business.

You're getting the right idea; however, the issue now is the extra space to the left—it's causing an imbalance heaviness with the right. Can you trim it a bit?  

OR you could left justify the text.  . .

i havent read waht others have said in here above.. but i loved the earlier version of the post wen i saw hours ago as you posted ... it was raw natural..blending well with the pic & equally highlighting the syncing write & pic at the same time... juz me fb, this is a fab write ..of nature, of love..of her,   in  silken woven verses.. in your mesmerizing delivery . write on :)

thank you so much.

until i have a little more confidence with the whole visual and poem field i will play around about. of course not possible to please everyone, so until i have finished seeing and playing with what the possibilities are,  i  may alter some of these quite a bit.

i understand your point of view and i  share it. i do like things raw and instinctively direct too.

again, your words are so encouraging.

Just realised you also write as No Moth. No wonder I am drawn to your words. You are well suited to the visual. Love the resonance in the conclusion and the typewriter font is a small act of genius. Rob

Thanks Rob.

Yes, i know it is not too popular to have more than one account. but it just was wanting, after a break, to have a profile more in a  kind-of nature based way,  away from what i normally write. away from my grizzly self so to speak.

again, super honored it means a hell of a lot that you liked this.

Honestly you had me at the title, but the details and spirit of the write are hauntingly beautiful. The spiritual and visceral are orbiting each other with palpable gravity.