Indelible She

Some marks made perfectly permanent upon a beautiful heart
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Some people just have that kind of impact... :)

That they do indeed👍

Lovely ! She sounds like a keeper... 🌻

Thanks for your sweet comment, shadow. She is most definitely :)

Nice and true little haiku:)

Thanks for stopping by to show your support! I'm glad that you enjoyed this one, jigg :)

It is a rarity in this world to find one such as this. Good write NB.


hugs,
buddhakitty.

She is surely something special, buddha. I'm so happy that you enjoyed it.

I was thinking about the dual implications of this poem too. Without my themes, it could be taken as a poem of heartbreak, eh? I also considered naming it 'Making Her Mark' but I'm in too deep now, lol.

For a Western Senryu ( although some do refer to it as the human haiku )  this flows beautifully, NB.  Most read forced in regards to the syllabic count of 5.7.5 ( whereas Traditional Japanese is by sound ).  I love the kireji in this.  

Thanks for the poetic knowledge, Ahavati. I would have called this senryu myself, but it seems there is not a clear boundary between the two, especially in modern haiku. I truly appreciate your 'expertise' on the matter, and am humbled that you loved the poem so much! I don't always know all the technical terms, but I'm learning... kireji is a new one for me!

Thanks again, and best wishes,
-NewB

Aww, thank you, Wildflowers :)

I really appreciate the kind feedback!

Perfect poem. Me likes. ❤

I don't know about perfect, but I appreciate the flattery. You are a kind soul, Nikki. Thanks so much for stopping by ❤️

This is beautiful, NB!
I love your writing. ❤

Thanks so much, Scribbles! I sincerely value your opinion, so that means a lot to me. I'm so glad that you liked it 😊

Dear NB,

I find I am always taken aback when one can impact another with such grace in so few words! I’m usually saying something with twenty words when ten would suffice. See? I’ve done it again because what I’m really trying to say is this work is very sweet and beautifully written.  And lucky is the subject to have someone care enough to honor them in poetry. Charming write!
H🌷

Heh, you're not that wordy, lol.

Thanks so much for your amazing feedback. You really are too kind. I appreciate you, H :)

Just how it should be

Thank you, Tim, for reading and commenting. Your support is deeply appreciated! :)

Good for her

Good for me too, unless things go south 😁. Thanks for your input, Sweet!

The brevity and rhyme make this a lovely read.

I'm so glad you enjoyed it, Daniel. Thanks so much!

I'm so glad that your think so, Leo. I loved the way you worded that. She's made her mark on me... There's no doubt.

Thank you for your kind words, and best wishes to you as well,

NewB

Very nice haiku! I love the way they rhyme.
Beautiful in meaning and form.

Love,
Jasmine

Aww, thanks Jasmine! You're really sweet... I'm so glad that you enjoyed it 😊

I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment!

Woah Wowww so awesomely crafted and charming. I can see why you are so popular here. You express so brilliantly. Kudos!!

Heh, thanks for the flattery, Zaynab. Your compliments are encouraging. I appreciate you taking some time to read and comment on my poetry... It really means a lot to me!

Thanks sunsettown! I appreciate you stopping by again :)

an ode to love's eternity ...to she the lively object subject of love...in such brevity..lovely NB..  
jus me, was reading the haiku & what i had automatically as i read is  "ink" in place of "mark"...that would lend a live(ly) continuum , a presentness to this eternity & also inclining rhyme with 'in' of 'indelible' ,, & surprised to see the same word in inverted "" as above sunsettown poet's comment..though in a diff reference. collective consciousness of us is a truth . whether we see feel it or not.  
thanks for the share & shine on :)

Thank you for your clever suggestion, uma. I've already become personally attached to the poem, otherwise I would probably change it. I do believe in collective consciousness as well... if you look for the signs they are there. You just have to pay attention! Thanks so much for stopping by, and have a wonderful New Year :)

Awww, thank you for stopping by :)

I know a woman just like that.

I'm so glad that you can relate :)
Thanks for stopping by to read this poem - I really appreciate you!
Best wishes, and happy new year!

Very powerful with such brevity

Why thank you, Valeriya :)
I am pleased that you were impacted by this poem...
Best wishes, and happy new year! I hope it's been a good one!

Such gesturing simplicity can even melt away the clamminess upon one's heart...

I know because my heart is clammy
and this certainly cleared away a
little bit of it.

 a beautiful gift in a small gift...


*shes blessed

Thank you for that heartfelt comment, Noire. You're awesome :)

Simple, yet beautiful and deep.

Thanks so much, Katie!

Such a small but perfectly formed poem straight from the heart... Thank you :)

Lovely. I'm going through a breakup right now, and this hits home.