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Disciple
You made a blessing of my curse in life;
The humble scribe that gladly follows you.
My muslin sack with cotton wadding filled,
And scant few supplies for writing poems.
I don’t mind walking with bare, naked feet,
And seldom sleep as together we go
Traveling under a solar eclipse,
A ghosted new moon, or crest on the wane
Holding tight to the tail of the wheel-horse;
One of two pulling your gypsy wagon,
As it slowly trundles the countryside,
I’m honored to be near your influence.
You make me a weaver of dreams each day,
A windswept bearer and torch to send up
A wreath of smoke to appease & to praise,
A wry tendency to become willful.
I am ‘free will’ even as I serve you.
You are my bread and wine, and why I write
With a passion to sow what you have wrought,
Oh! the worship is mutual, my Muse.
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Written by
Jade-Pandora
(jade tiger)
Published 29th Sep 2019
Author's Note
For the letter “W”.
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Re. Disciple
29th Sep 2019 8:00pm
This spill touched me to tears.....
but crying is a good thing, here
wonderful spill, Beautiful Sister
but crying is a good thing, here
wonderful spill, Beautiful Sister
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Re: Re. Disciple
29th Sep 2019 8:13pm
Oh gosh, my brother, the honors when you bestow, they tie my tongue.
Thank you for the read.🙏🏻
Thank you for the read.🙏🏻
Re. Disciple
29th Sep 2019 10:15pm
The pace of the write is well measured. Stanza 1: The blessing and curse. Stanza 2: Suffering for the art. Stanza 3: The life of the artist. Stanza 4: The spirit or magic of the art. This was my favorite. Stanza 5: The love affair with the art.
Verbiage is well rendered. Enjoy the apt metaphors. Nicely done Jadey I hope you do well in the comp.
Verbiage is well rendered. Enjoy the apt metaphors. Nicely done Jadey I hope you do well in the comp.
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Re: Re. Disciple
29th Sep 2019 10:48pm
Oh my goodness gracious, Daniel, such a coordinated write-up, addressing your views from angles most enlightening. Thank you so much all around.
Re. Disciple
30th Sep 2019 4:05am
What a wovely write for the wetter W! (be very quiet...we're hunting wabbits)
hugs,
buddhakitty.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
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Re: Re. Disciple
30th Sep 2019 4:15am
Aah LOLOL, just perfect dear Kitty... I wov & thank wooo!
tiger hugs,
Jadey🐾
tiger hugs,
Jadey🐾
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Re: Re. Disciple
Thank you, dear Mical, for the privilege of reading your thoughts, impressions & concepts. Your momentum of words sent me in an awesome spin, so insightful - a delight! Such honor you bestowed...
RL gratitude🙏🏻
Jade
RL gratitude🙏🏻
Jade
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Re. Disciple
1st Oct 2019 00:25am
Inspired work, Jade. It's written with imagination and flair, bringing out the romance of poetry. Fine job.
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Re: Re. Disciple
1st Oct 2019 6:52am
Thank you truly, my dear friend, with love, respect & regards to you & your dedicated Ninja. x
Jadey
Jadey
Re. Disciple
1st Oct 2019 10:34pm
I love how you always seem to weave those words in the comps so effortlessly. I wonder, is she sitting in a park bench composing? At her desk looking out the window?
Great spill Ms. Jade.
Great spill Ms. Jade.
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Re: Re. Disciple
Gosh, Wally, your’s is such a dear reaction expressed on my piece. I thank you for your always generous spirit.🙏🏻
Re. Disciple
2nd Oct 2019 11:01pm
Very well-worked! The "W" words are used very naturally and nothing seems forced. I think this should do very well in the contest! Good luck!
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Re: Re. Disciple
Once again, you always have such a generous appreciation so wonderfully expressed. I’m so glad you always connect to the work of mine you’re drawn to, dear Robert, with humble thanks.
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Re: Re. Disciple
4th Oct 2019 3:12am
My gracious thanks to you, HF, as I read & reread your words a few more times, because the first half of the comment read like a story that I was able to imagine in my mind ...images swirled in a fantasy mist. A delight having had you take me there.🧞♀️
Re. Disciple
6th Oct 2019 12:06pm
Jade, I love how this piece is clearly about the respect that's shown by both muse and scribe.
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Re: Re. Disciple
6th Oct 2019 3:03pm
Thank you, dear Kathy, you have definitely made a connection. Your thoughts are much aporeciated.