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What You Can See Goes On Forever
( prose poetry )
It was a wrinkle in time. When
little women raised the kids and
went to church, and the other
sex was of mice and men
gambling away the bank loans
and utility bills. It was a tale
of two cities only it was two
towns miles apart with most
the firearms socked away in
every pawn shop within a fifty
mile radius due to drinking and
carousing at the honky-tonk
bars. Anywhere east of Eden,
where the sidewalk ends, is
where everything else was
blamed on the fault in our stars.
Ya, thats’s right - give it over to
God while its catching fire.
I was called Rebecca ‘cause the
family had great expectations of
me; though being dirt-poor folk
leading a hard-scrabble life
their feelings for me were split
between pride and prejudice.
It seemed like the story of my
life ( which had begun when I
was born in 1984 on a farm in a
barn I called the animal house
as a child ), but most of the
evidence of this claim has all
gone with the wind as it tends to
do out in the country where the
land is flat and there’s nothing
to see, but what you can see
goes on forever.
Like when my great-grandpa
wandered off in his dungarees
one morning after one hundred
years of solitude, celebrating
silence, standing in the middle of
our wheat field ready for the
harvest as if in a brave new
world, but to me he looked like
the old man and the sea with
the wheat like ocean waves all
around him. The help wouldn’t
be over for another week.
Titles with authors credit used in the poem:
"Pride and Prejudice" by Jane Austen
“1984" by George Orwell
“Little Women" by Louisa May Alcott
"Gone with the Wind" by Margaret Mitchell
"The Help" by Kathryn Stockett
"A Wrinkle in Time" by Madeleine L'Engle
"Of Mice and Men" by John Steinbeck
"A Tale of Two Cities" by Charles Dickens
"Where the Sidewalk Ends" by Shel Silverstein
"The Fault in Our Stars" by John Green
"East of Eden" by John Steinbeck
"Rebecca" by Daphne du Maurier
"Great Expectations" by Charles Dickens
"The Old Man and the Sea" by Ernest Hemingway
"Celebrating Silence” by Sri Sri Ravi Shankar
"Catching Fire" by Sue Monk Kidd
"One Hundred Years of Solitude" by Gabriel García Márquez
"The Story of My Life" by Helen Keller
“Brave New World” by Aldous Huxley
“Animal House” by Chris Miller
It was a wrinkle in time. When
little women raised the kids and
went to church, and the other
sex was of mice and men
gambling away the bank loans
and utility bills. It was a tale
of two cities only it was two
towns miles apart with most
the firearms socked away in
every pawn shop within a fifty
mile radius due to drinking and
carousing at the honky-tonk
bars. Anywhere east of Eden,
where the sidewalk ends, is
where everything else was
blamed on the fault in our stars.
Ya, thats’s right - give it over to
God while its catching fire.
I was called Rebecca ‘cause the
family had great expectations of
me; though being dirt-poor folk
leading a hard-scrabble life
their feelings for me were split
between pride and prejudice.
It seemed like the story of my
life ( which had begun when I
was born in 1984 on a farm in a
barn I called the animal house
as a child ), but most of the
evidence of this claim has all
gone with the wind as it tends to
do out in the country where the
land is flat and there’s nothing
to see, but what you can see
goes on forever.
Like when my great-grandpa
wandered off in his dungarees
one morning after one hundred
years of solitude, celebrating
silence, standing in the middle of
our wheat field ready for the
harvest as if in a brave new
world, but to me he looked like
the old man and the sea with
the wheat like ocean waves all
around him. The help wouldn’t
be over for another week.
Titles with authors credit used in the poem:
"Pride and Prejudice" by Jane Austen
“1984" by George Orwell
“Little Women" by Louisa May Alcott
"Gone with the Wind" by Margaret Mitchell
"The Help" by Kathryn Stockett
"A Wrinkle in Time" by Madeleine L'Engle
"Of Mice and Men" by John Steinbeck
"A Tale of Two Cities" by Charles Dickens
"Where the Sidewalk Ends" by Shel Silverstein
"The Fault in Our Stars" by John Green
"East of Eden" by John Steinbeck
"Rebecca" by Daphne du Maurier
"Great Expectations" by Charles Dickens
"The Old Man and the Sea" by Ernest Hemingway
"Celebrating Silence” by Sri Sri Ravi Shankar
"Catching Fire" by Sue Monk Kidd
"One Hundred Years of Solitude" by Gabriel García Márquez
"The Story of My Life" by Helen Keller
“Brave New World” by Aldous Huxley
“Animal House” by Chris Miller
Written by
Jade-Pandora
(jade tiger)
Published 27th Sep 2019
Author's Note
Written for and entered in the “book titles poem” competition, hosted by our ms butters.
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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Re. What You Can See Goes On Forever
Quite the collection and filth bound from book end to book end the prose was sound.
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Re: Re. What You Can See Goes On Forever
27th Sep 2019 11:40pm
Re: Re. What You Can See Goes On Forever
Lol, my auto correct has been killing me! So sorry!
It should have read, "...fitly bound..."
Auto correct is why I fear A. I.
I enjoy your talent - and your patience! Thank you.
It should have read, "...fitly bound..."
Auto correct is why I fear A. I.
I enjoy your talent - and your patience! Thank you.
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Re: Re. What You Can See Goes On Forever
28th Sep 2019 00:12am
Thank you Joe for coming back to translate, that makes all the difference. Now I’ll start feeling a little chipper.😌
Re: Re. What You Can See Goes On Forever
28th Sep 2019 00:21am
For safeties sake perhaps I should stick to, "I really liked it" from here on out...
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Re: Re. What You Can See Goes On Forever
28th Sep 2019 00:31am
Aw just be yourself, I’d prefer you relax and say what you want. I like you being you.
Do you really like it?🤭
*giggles*🤗
Do you really like it?🤭
*giggles*🤗
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Ha! I'm not really sure you , me, or anybody else is really ready for me to be me. Perhaps it's best for all concerned that I just stay Average Joe.
And yes, I really liked it - this time!
And yes, I really liked it - this time!
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27th Sep 2019 11:51pm
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Re: Re. What You Can See Goes On Forever
*apologies for this tardy reply*
Thank you so much, dear Ethan, for your thoughtful words. I’m grateful for your appreciation as a reader.
I’ve been sluggish except for when I wrote this piece (in one session). I know as a fellow poet you’ll understand when I say how cathartic that can be.
with pen respect,
Jade🐾
Thank you so much, dear Ethan, for your thoughtful words. I’m grateful for your appreciation as a reader.
I’ve been sluggish except for when I wrote this piece (in one session). I know as a fellow poet you’ll understand when I say how cathartic that can be.
with pen respect,
Jade🐾
Anonymous
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28th Sep 2019 9:34pm
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Re. What You Can See Goes On Forever
28th Sep 2019 1:15am
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28th Sep 2019 9:23pm
*apologies for this tardy reply*
Thank you, dear Kitty, I’m glad to receive this from you.
tiger hugs,
Jade🐾
Thank you, dear Kitty, I’m glad to receive this from you.
tiger hugs,
Jade🐾
Re. What You Can See Goes On Forever
28th Sep 2019 2:42am
really like how you wrapped message around the titles so they felt a natural part and not obstacles to work around.
i also like how the selected titles reinforce an era, times gone past that may be coloured with time's lens of wistful reminiscence
i also like how the selected titles reinforce an era, times gone past that may be coloured with time's lens of wistful reminiscence
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Re: Re. What You Can See Goes On Forever
*apologies for this tardy reply*
Dear Jan, thank you so much for this - your insightful thoughts connecting with mine in the piece.
With pen respect,
Jade🐾
Dear Jan, thank you so much for this - your insightful thoughts connecting with mine in the piece.
With pen respect,
Jade🐾
Re. What You Can See Goes On Forever
28th Sep 2019 2:53am
Dear JP,
Nicely done! I love the story around the titles- a lot of which have brought back fond memories. Good luck. It is a super clever comp by Jan and excellent entry from you. H🌷
Nicely done! I love the story around the titles- a lot of which have brought back fond memories. Good luck. It is a super clever comp by Jan and excellent entry from you. H🌷
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Re: Re. What You Can See Goes On Forever
28th Sep 2019 9:52pm
*apologies for this tardy reply*
Dear Honoria,
More than anything, for you sharing how this piece let you relive fond memories has me feel so good, and grateful.
Thank you kindly for your wishes of luck.
with pen respect,
Jade🐾
Dear Honoria,
More than anything, for you sharing how this piece let you relive fond memories has me feel so good, and grateful.
Thank you kindly for your wishes of luck.
with pen respect,
Jade🐾
Re. What You Can See Goes On Forever
28th Sep 2019 7:11am
Well done. I had to do a double take on some lines remembering Garcia Marquez, my favorite book 100 years.
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Re: Re. What You Can See Goes On Forever
28th Sep 2019 10:04pm
Hi Wally, and thank you for dropping in for a read. I hope the double-takes weren’t too distracting, otherwise, it sounds like you generally liked the story.
Okay, that was wishful thinking on my part just then.
Jade🐾
Okay, that was wishful thinking on my part just then.
Jade🐾
Re. What You Can See Goes On Forever
28th Sep 2019 8:53pm
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28th Sep 2019 10:08pm
Thank you, Tomcat, You know how much I appreciate what all you just did!😘
tigger🐾
tigger🐾
Re. What You Can See Goes On Forever
28th Sep 2019 10:55pm
Love the way this poem is all woven together.
I love this comp because it enables a browse through other's bookshelves which adds so much to understanding.
"...was born in 1984 ..."
Jeez, my kids were born then ... oh what it is to be still young and beautiful :))
I love this comp because it enables a browse through other's bookshelves which adds so much to understanding.
"...was born in 1984 ..."
Jeez, my kids were born then ... oh what it is to be still young and beautiful :))
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Re: Re. What You Can See Goes On Forever
30th Sep 2019 9:37am
Ah my friend, I may be younger, but when I’m gone, you’ll still be alive - writing, gardening, enjoying the feel of the sun and the breezes.
Meantime, I thank you for enjoying my effort, I always appreciate your visits.
🐾
Meantime, I thank you for enjoying my effort, I always appreciate your visits.
🐾
Anonymous
- Edited 12th Oct 2019 8:45am
30th Sep 2019 12:00pm
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30th Sep 2019 4:21pm
And see, now here you are.☺️ And my thanks for your facts-filled, praise-worthy comment which I found gripping.
The rest of my response is too wordy for here so I’ll copy/paste it in a note and pm it to you.
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The rest of my response is too wordy for here so I’ll copy/paste it in a note and pm it to you.
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Anonymous
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5th Oct 2019 4:06am
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Re. What You Can See Goes On Forever
6th Oct 2019 12:13pm
Dear Jade
As always you are a wonderful story teller, and using book titles throughout the way you have is a skill I have not seen very often in my life.
As always you are a wonderful story teller, and using book titles throughout the way you have is a skill I have not seen very often in my life.
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Re: Re. What You Can See Goes On Forever
6th Oct 2019 4:55pm
That’s very kind of you, Kathy... and that goes for me too; I don’t think I’ve ever paid book title poetry any attention until Jan’s comp started. I became very motivated & inspired right away. Not to mention the enjoyment I felt once I started composing this piece.