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Limbs
He wraps his long tree-like limbs around you
And holds you
Says you are his fruit,
And you apologize
The summer heat licks you with madness
You carve into the flesh of your fruit
To feel something and then the grateful nothing
You attempt to murder the fruit on his tree
He didn't know you were already rotting
The sun is settling red
You watch the blood of fruit settle down past the silhouette of mountain,
same as it runs down the silhouette of bark and limbs
And still he holds you
And you-
You apologize to him for this too
And holds you
Says you are his fruit,
And you apologize
The summer heat licks you with madness
You carve into the flesh of your fruit
To feel something and then the grateful nothing
You attempt to murder the fruit on his tree
He didn't know you were already rotting
The sun is settling red
You watch the blood of fruit settle down past the silhouette of mountain,
same as it runs down the silhouette of bark and limbs
And still he holds you
And you-
You apologize to him for this too
Published 19th Sep 2019
| Edited 28th Sep 2024
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19th Sep 2019 12:38pm
21st Sep 2019 6:41pm
I took several strong impressions away from this write. The metaphors are well rendered, clear and yet subtly expressed, which is terrific ability. The emotional content holds a depth of vulnerability that is endearing.
It is interesting that I happened across this today, as I just finished reading 1Q84 by Haruki Murakami. A huge book, 910 pages, but worth it, even thought the end dragged a little. He writes with both an abstract surreal quality, but also very human depth, and I feel that same quality in your writing.
It is good to make your acquaintance.
Daniel
It is interesting that I happened across this today, as I just finished reading 1Q84 by Haruki Murakami. A huge book, 910 pages, but worth it, even thought the end dragged a little. He writes with both an abstract surreal quality, but also very human depth, and I feel that same quality in your writing.
It is good to make your acquaintance.
Daniel
22nd Sep 2019 3:01am
Well thank you.
I sincerely appreciate your feedback.
I'm not familiar with that novel or the author but you have made me intrigued.
I sincerely appreciate your feedback.
I'm not familiar with that novel or the author but you have made me intrigued.
Anonymous
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This poetry is magnificent... glory be..peace love this.. :) pleez do comment/ review/ write your thoughts on my website & poems 2 thank you :)
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