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if we never meet again
if we never meet again
forever ceasing to be friends
will this be our last goodbye
if so, I can always say I tried
my soul is a pit of burning embers
that much you can never remember
that, baby, your flames are imperative
though my longing for you is primitive
it’s like the universe is giving blessings
with no design of what it’s out shelling
but you really stepped into the spot
hitting the mark as you shoot your shot
somewhere deep in this unrelenting world
hidden by all we who are just amateurs
it’s the place our souls can find peace
and tomorrow is always a guarantee
it’s cause I have let you in, baby
and not because I thought you’d save me
you’ve got this fire burning in your eyes
with a presence that looms toward the sky
one day maybe I’ll have you to myself
mopping the floors as I dust the shelves
singing along to our favorite album
living and loving in sweet tandem
but we haven’t made it there just yet
though my soul won’t soon forget
that you were made for me, babe
and for you I am made the same
so if we never meet again
altogether ceasing to be friends
just know that I’ll always remember
the smile that lit up my embers
forever ceasing to be friends
will this be our last goodbye
if so, I can always say I tried
my soul is a pit of burning embers
that much you can never remember
that, baby, your flames are imperative
though my longing for you is primitive
it’s like the universe is giving blessings
with no design of what it’s out shelling
but you really stepped into the spot
hitting the mark as you shoot your shot
somewhere deep in this unrelenting world
hidden by all we who are just amateurs
it’s the place our souls can find peace
and tomorrow is always a guarantee
it’s cause I have let you in, baby
and not because I thought you’d save me
you’ve got this fire burning in your eyes
with a presence that looms toward the sky
one day maybe I’ll have you to myself
mopping the floors as I dust the shelves
singing along to our favorite album
living and loving in sweet tandem
but we haven’t made it there just yet
though my soul won’t soon forget
that you were made for me, babe
and for you I am made the same
so if we never meet again
altogether ceasing to be friends
just know that I’ll always remember
the smile that lit up my embers
Published 17th Aug 2019
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Smiles are all well & good, god knows we need them more than ever these days but he does sound like a young pretender.
the smile that lit up my embers (maybe?)
Sounds more final & tragic in past tense I think
the smile that lit up my embers (maybe?)
Sounds more final & tragic in past tense I think
17th Aug 2019 8:53pm
Yes! I hope it’s okay I used that, Snaggy :) thanks for the read and feedback!
17th Aug 2019 3:51pm
The unrequited parts have a joyful read
and the other parts a level of sad
i always find it strange that 2 people cease to be friends
when a crush is made public and the love not reciprocated at the same intensity
(speaking from experience, here)
Enjoyed the spill
(welcome back -- You've been away for a spell)
and the other parts a level of sad
i always find it strange that 2 people cease to be friends
when a crush is made public and the love not reciprocated at the same intensity
(speaking from experience, here)
Enjoyed the spill
(welcome back -- You've been away for a spell)
17th Aug 2019 9:03pm
I have been away a spell... I needed to take some time, despite my creative energy begging me otherwise. Happy to be back! I’m so glad you enjoyed this spill. I find it strange as well and do hope we can stay friends; but I won’t be holding my breath. Haha, thanks for the read and comment, sweetest!
17th Aug 2019 5:51pm
Buenisima, Liv! Beautifully written and deeply romantic. A couple of favorite passages:
”that, baby, your flames are imperative
though my longing for you is primitive"
I love the honesty in that one and the clever rhyme.
"one day maybe I’ll have you to myself
mopping the floors as I dust the shelves
singing along to our favorite album
living and loving in sweet tandem"
There is romance and sensuality in mundane, quotidian chores. I have been told by friends, lovers, and therapist that the sexiest act a man can do is the dishes. 🤓💕
”that, baby, your flames are imperative
though my longing for you is primitive"
I love the honesty in that one and the clever rhyme.
"one day maybe I’ll have you to myself
mopping the floors as I dust the shelves
singing along to our favorite album
living and loving in sweet tandem"
There is romance and sensuality in mundane, quotidian chores. I have been told by friends, lovers, and therapist that the sexiest act a man can do is the dishes. 🤓💕
17th Aug 2019 10:01pm
Yes, right?! I'm so glad you enjoyed this, Bob! I love when people quote back to me their favorite parts. Thank you so much for the read and comment :)
17th Aug 2019 6:34pm
17th Aug 2019 10:02pm
Oh, thank you so much PS! I'm glad you liked it. Thank you for stopping in to read and comment!
17th Aug 2019 9:57pm
I cant speak on the sexy man end of the conversations here. " Just an old brute of old ways" though i can say heartbreaking testiment here.
17th Aug 2019 10:02pm
Haha, I hear you Liam. Thank you for stopping in to read and leave me a comment :)
18th Aug 2019 9:31am
19th Aug 2019 6:06pm
Ahh, thank you, Alan! I appreciate all of the support, luv. Thanks for stopping in to read and comment!
