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Something Else⚡️
Ever since officially still a child
I began writing poetry
Tentatively. Start, stop, start, stop.
Start again, till it became something else
And even while I was still that same child
I’d often fall and scrape a knee
When I would walk or roller skate
A scabby scab becoming something else
I now am grown no longer just a child
Not falling as much as I did
As awkward tho’ in other ways
Upon my head I trip or something else
I wanted to be graceful as a child
Pretending up on tippy-toes
Attempting to stay up on point
A bloodstain on a floor is something else
And then to be in love I was with child
The only time I wouldn’t fall
But then when it became the spring
It took that love to call it something else
Reverting back to meet my inner child
In place there was a steady light
A southern star but from the north
I’d be his other dream of something else
Written by
Jade-Pandora
(jade tiger)
Published 18th Jun 2019
Author's Note
* S5, L4 = stillborn
* S6 = tommy
* syllabic line count per stanza: 10/8/8/10
* S6 = tommy
* syllabic line count per stanza: 10/8/8/10
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18th Jun 2019 2:23am
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18th Jun 2019 3:19am
I often yearn to have my childhood back. Not only was I happier, I seemed to be the best version of myself back then. Thanks for sharing a part of yours with us. Your words never fail to deliver heart-felt emotion.
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18th Jun 2019 4:08am
Thank you so much, my dearest Moonchild. Oh! How I have missed you; it seems forever, maybe even before the NaPoWriMo. Please know my prayers & wishes are often sent your way.
Your words of such yearn & sentiment touch me deeply. Please feel mine in the coming days & weeks.
With much affection,
ever
Jade
🌜🐅
Your words of such yearn & sentiment touch me deeply. Please feel mine in the coming days & weeks.
With much affection,
ever
Jade
🌜🐅
Re. Something Else
18th Jun 2019 5:00am
Ahh... Childhood is something else. No worries. Just playing & enjoying life. All these responsibilities seem so tough sometimes. Great spill there, dear Jade.
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18th Jun 2019 5:05am
I thank you most graciously, dear Mahmudul, for connecting with a feeling of this write, and for the RL honor.
Re. Something Else
18th Jun 2019 12:21pm
Many things evolve into something else, don't they, Jade? More oft something else we completely didn't expect. I can feel the growing pains, the wishes, loss, and most important, the Love and hope so prevalent in life.
Well done.
Well done.
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18th Jun 2019 8:17pm
Thank you, my Sage, for the honor of your visit...
for in your insightful words, you have encapsulated all the layers of my poem’s emotions = meanings.
for in your insightful words, you have encapsulated all the layers of my poem’s emotions = meanings.
Re. Something Else
18th Jun 2019 6:37pm
Love the way the notion & experience of childhood comes full circle. I feel this poem cuts at another level. Mesmerised.
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18th Jun 2019 8:22pm
Thank you, Josh, for understanding this with such clarity, which means a great deal.
Re. Something Else
20th Jun 2019 2:32am
First glance I thought it was so lovely and heartwarming till i got to author's note to see the style of writing and count of syllables! It was a flawless read and definitely not forced given the skill you have implented on here Jade. Beautiful and talented for sure.
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20th Jun 2019 6:48am
I kept coming back here to try and respond - though a run-on string of words were trying to spill each time. And I’d return to try again, thinking hey, no need to use so many words, just the important ones. Some comments overload what I’d say to the reader, especially when it’s to a writer like you.
Thank you, Layla. Hours later, I can still feel it, and know, it’s good to be humble & humbled.
Thank you, Layla. Hours later, I can still feel it, and know, it’s good to be humble & humbled.
Re. Something Else
20th Jun 2019 11:07pm
Your inner child is lovely, Jade. A remarkable and reflective write. Ninja just hopped in my lap, took a look, and purred.
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20th Jun 2019 11:17pm
I’m honored, my crowfly friend, for your dear, thoughtful words, and for devoted Ninja’s embrace. I’m glad my piece is uplifting for you both. x
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23rd Jun 2019 6:38pm
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24th Jun 2019 8:52am
Thank you, my tommy, for the honor ever since I first read it to you... I’m moved with how much you’ve enjoyed it, and then at last, a new space opened on your RL.☺️