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youth's rose
I turned around I saw my reflection
star gazing in your eyes I didn't notice the time
the sun had gone down on my beauty
grey streaked my hair
lines creased my face
still, you found me beautiful
you held my youth
a pressed rose in your memories
a flower you picked in the summer
my gift to you my one and only
time tempered my wild nature
I was found even lovelier in your adoring gaze
looking at me in my maturity
you were star gazing too
I saw my reflection mirrored in artic blues
my heart melted and I was warmed
as one with your soul, I was home
Written by
crimsin
(Unveiling)
Published 14th Dec 2018
Author's Note
for Willow's aging competition
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Re. youth's rose
14th Dec 2018 1:25pm
Charming write dear Crimsin. With love you can often see past the physical appearance and certainly as you gain maturity you are able to 'see' the real person's beauty and passion.
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Re: Re. youth's rose
14th Dec 2018 1:29pm
thank you graciously dearest DawnRaider for your vision and insight on this write... yes you're right we see through to the real person...
I deeply appreciate your thoughts...
love Brenda 💕
I deeply appreciate your thoughts...
love Brenda 💕
Re. youth's rose
14th Dec 2018 1:42pm
Re: Re. youth's rose
15th Dec 2018 3:29pm
Re. youth's rose
Anonymous
14th Dec 2018 1:46pm
The perfect example of aging with elegance. Seeing the beauty growing and remaining rather than what's already gone. I love this one, my beautiful Dark Angel. Thank you so much for joining in! I love you...
...ever your Willow
...ever your Willow
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Re: Re. youth's rose
15th Dec 2018 3:30pm
thank you beautiful Willow for all the love you show me on a daily basis...
I love your deep insight...
I love you...
love Brenda 🌹
I love your deep insight...
I love you...
love Brenda 🌹
Re. youth's rose
14th Dec 2018 1:52pm
Re: Re. youth's rose
15th Dec 2018 3:31pm
Re. youth's rose
14th Dec 2018 2:17pm
Re: Re. youth's rose
15th Dec 2018 3:32pm
thank you dearest Casket sigh yes, you're right...
I deeply appreciate your thoughts...
love Brenda ✨
I deeply appreciate your thoughts...
love Brenda ✨
Re. youth's rose
Anonymous
14th Dec 2018 2:41pm
I've seen your beauty, dear one. If that is you at present, you must have broken many hearts in your spring. You are truly an eternal beauty and such is this lovely poem that is a clear hymn to the one you love. Hugs and love my sweet one. J
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Re: Re. youth's rose
15th Dec 2018 3:33pm
thank you graciously dearest Juvenalis for such a loving comment and I too have witnessed your true beauty my friend...
love & hugs...
Brenda 💕
love & hugs...
Brenda 💕
Re: Re. youth's rose
Anonymous
15th Dec 2018 4:31pm
Thank you for your kindness. But I don't see it in myself at all. Hugs J
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Re. youth's rose
14th Dec 2018 4:16pm
This is really beautiful crim. I want to hit the like button a thousand times. And I love roses myself.
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Re: Re. youth's rose
15th Dec 2018 3:33pm
thank you beautiful Eswaller for the love on this write you gifted me many smiles...
love Brenda 🌹
love Brenda 🌹
Re. youth's rose
Anonymous
14th Dec 2018 4:28pm
Crimmy,
We really don't age. People's mind's grow less beautiful, and more disenchanted, and no longer see the true, everlasting beauty. I'll always see you as your young, beautiful, current self, because I've met your heart.
Love,
Matthew.
We really don't age. People's mind's grow less beautiful, and more disenchanted, and no longer see the true, everlasting beauty. I'll always see you as your young, beautiful, current self, because I've met your heart.
Love,
Matthew.
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Re: Re. youth's rose
15th Dec 2018 3:35pm
thank you graciously dearest Matthew beautiful soul for your deep insight on this write...
I love you my friend...
love Brenda 💕
I love you my friend...
love Brenda 💕
Re: Re. youth's rose
Anonymous
15th Dec 2018 4:13pm
Oh, thank you, my little heart!
I love you, too.
You just made my life.
Love,
Matthew.
I love you, too.
You just made my life.
Love,
Matthew.
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Re. youth's rose
14th Dec 2018 9:03pm
Sweet,
Wish i could find that, but, got too old, too ugly, too soon.
ha !
Wish i could find that, but, got too old, too ugly, too soon.
ha !
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Re: Re. youth's rose
15th Dec 2018 3:36pm
thank you dearest Daniel you're never too old or ugly I've seen you and felt your heart through your writes...
you're beautiful...
love Brenda 💕
you're beautiful...
love Brenda 💕
Re. youth's rose
14th Dec 2018 10:00pm
True beauty comes with experience and maturity, two qualities reflected here. Youth's rose does tend to wilt, but the soul comes shining through. Yours is more than evident in these lines.
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Re: Re. youth's rose
15th Dec 2018 3:37pm
thank you graciously dearest Sir Crow for the love and deep insight into what constitutes true beauty...
love Brenda ✨
love Brenda ✨
Re. youth's rose
Anonymous
15th Dec 2018 00:03am
Absolutely love this
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Re: Re. youth's rose
15th Dec 2018 3:37pm
thank you graciously dearest Sinister One I love when you visit me...
love Brenda 🌹
love Brenda 🌹
Re. youth's rose
15th Dec 2018 00:27am
Stunning write lovely Crim, my heart was racing as I read that. Hauntingly beautiful.
- Fairy
- Fairy
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Re: Re. youth's rose
15th Dec 2018 3:38pm
thank you graciously beautiful Fairy you gifted me smiles with your lovely comment...
love Brenda 💕
love Brenda 💕
Re. youth's rose
16th Dec 2018 6:45pm
This is so touching. *hugs*
Check this out Brenda. It's the kind of music I write to.
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Check this out Brenda. It's the kind of music I write to.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZdJYEiEFNTM
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