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Space and Time
Space and Time
I Reminisce of your finger tips
gliding, tracing, my skin your canvas
sacred you were to me,
sacred I was to you
time feeling stolen before us
where did you go?
losing myself,
giving you control
watching your back
when leaving the room
already craving your stare
muscles tighten and begin to ache
seeking the clock for assurance
cause surely, time drags when your away
sinking deeply into my dark despair
suddenly time speeds up and appears
with the help of you in my sight
space is now fading, fleeting
I feel you occuring, emerging
with each step yards turn to feet,
turn to inches,
space turns to greeting,
your lips with mine
I Reminisce of your finger tips
gliding, tracing, my skin your canvas
sacred you were to me,
sacred I was to you
time feeling stolen before us
where did you go?
losing myself,
giving you control
watching your back
when leaving the room
already craving your stare
muscles tighten and begin to ache
seeking the clock for assurance
cause surely, time drags when your away
sinking deeply into my dark despair
suddenly time speeds up and appears
with the help of you in my sight
space is now fading, fleeting
I feel you occuring, emerging
with each step yards turn to feet,
turn to inches,
space turns to greeting,
your lips with mine
Written by
el_eye_vee_eye_en
(fLoWiTpOeWiT)
Published 16th Nov 2018
| Edited 9th Feb 2020
Author's Note
Thinking back to my first and only love. How I miss it, but don't miss the toxic dependent relationship that it turned into.
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Re. Space and Time
16th Nov 2018 11:33am
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16th Nov 2018 11:35am
I have been wanting input on this poem for some time now, thank you for giving me that...
Re: Re. Space and Time
16th Nov 2018 11:39am
Wow I just seen your poetry like 10 minutes ago I had to comment if you ever need that just message me and I’ll, have a read if I’ve missed it 😊
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Anonymous
16th Nov 2018 11:40am
Love can so often be an oxygen thief. It is delicious & yet can be crippling. Good poem by the way.
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16th Nov 2018 11:40am
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Anonymous
16th Nov 2018 11:46am
I remember that feeling, you described in detail and I am a fan of detail :) very nice ink and Welcome to DUP!
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Re. Space and Time
16th Nov 2018 12:45pm
A great piece with lovely poetic flow
"space is now fading, fleeting
I feel you occurring, appearing, emerging
with each step" really great line👏👏
"space is now fading, fleeting
I feel you occurring, appearing, emerging
with each step" really great line👏👏
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Re. Space and Time
16th Nov 2018 12:48pm
This captures the feel really well - nice mix of words, keen observation and emotional spark. Welcome to DUP. Josh.
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Re. Space and Time
16th Nov 2018 12:50pm
welcome to DU...
this is a stunningly beautiful piece
that your heart could still carry such a tenderness
despite the toxicity of it all is beautiful...
love Brenda ❤
this is a stunningly beautiful piece
that your heart could still carry such a tenderness
despite the toxicity of it all is beautiful...
love Brenda ❤
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Re: Re. Space and Time
20th Nov 2018 6:00am
Hello Crimsin! Thank you so much for your kind words, I really appreciate your comment...
Re. Space and Time
The way you have encapsulated the feelings here as your lover comes & goes, identifies with a lot of us.
A worthy addition of anyone's reading list.
Looking at the author's note, are you saying that relationships often end up becoming controlling/restrictive, affording neither party proper space? This has been my experience at times.
I very much enjoyed this read.
A worthy addition of anyone's reading list.
Looking at the author's note, are you saying that relationships often end up becoming controlling/restrictive, affording neither party proper space? This has been my experience at times.
I very much enjoyed this read.
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20th Nov 2018 5:58am
Hello Billy_Snagg! Thank you for your comment. Yes, that is exactly what I was trying to say. In this previous relationship that I was expressing, it started off as something beautiful but quickly turned volatile and extremely toxic. In this poem I was trying to express both extremes.
Re. Space and Time
16th Nov 2018 4:20pm
An emotional pen for sure, I know the feelings expressed here, I love the flow.
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16th Nov 2018 6:26pm
Re. Space and Time
16th Nov 2018 10:13pm
Welcome to DUP. I still remember my first love all those years ago.
I doubt if I will ever capture that feeling again.
You describe your emotions very well.
Dark Sun.
I doubt if I will ever capture that feeling again.
You describe your emotions very well.
Dark Sun.
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Anonymous
17th Nov 2018 7:42am
Livi,
That's beautiful!
Glad you're here!
Everyone's really nice, you'll like it.
Keep writing, you do it beautifully!
Matthew.
That's beautiful!
Glad you're here!
Everyone's really nice, you'll like it.
Keep writing, you do it beautifully!
Matthew.
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Re. Space and Time
18th Nov 2018 11:25am
Beautiful write, really enjoyed the flow of it. First love is always the hardest and can change and distort ones view of all relationships and the world at large. Makes for great poetry tho'.
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13th Feb 2019 7:47am
Felt .. the rub in life is in most bad things can be found good and thats what hurts ... Bless and love ...
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