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To dance.
Not sure of the antedote.
Garish and calm all in one, we breathe silently.
This little plant just isn't the place for you,
you need a spark while I need water and sunlight,
you are the flint to an obese kid's zippo. The rain isn't your friend
and yet we bend all the rules.
You let yourself drown while my small plant becomes a firework.
The peace and quiet feels adequate when I'm burning out and
becoming nothing to a smoking sky.
This little plant isn't the place for you
and I'm quite happy rising, growing, glowing, breathing here.
Garish and calm all in one, we breathe silently.
This little plant just isn't the place for you,
you need a spark while I need water and sunlight,
you are the flint to an obese kid's zippo. The rain isn't your friend
and yet we bend all the rules.
You let yourself drown while my small plant becomes a firework.
The peace and quiet feels adequate when I'm burning out and
becoming nothing to a smoking sky.
This little plant isn't the place for you
and I'm quite happy rising, growing, glowing, breathing here.
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wow.
Anonymous
4th Nov 2011 11:04am
umm just wow.
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4th Nov 2011 5:49pm
:)
4th Nov 2011 11:49am
re: :)
4th Nov 2011 5:49pm
Free
4th Nov 2011 2:21pm
and self-confident, self-loving and secure. This is an excellent message and your images, as always, are well suited. Great work, LA.
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re: Free
4th Nov 2011 5:50pm
Glad I still got it through the cryptic, nice to see you :) Was worried I was losing my touch :O Thanks, J
pass dat.....
4th Nov 2011 2:39pm
now i dont want this 2 sound scary
but i really am n Love wit mary
so please dont keep her from me
she wil dance n my lungs 4 eternity
so da next time u ntroduce her 2 da fire
make sure u rememba me....i mite even b da buyer....lol
but i really am n Love wit mary
so please dont keep her from me
she wil dance n my lungs 4 eternity
so da next time u ntroduce her 2 da fire
make sure u rememba me....i mite even b da buyer....lol
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4th Nov 2011 5:50pm
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Anonymous
4th Nov 2011 3:45pm
I'm not sure I understand the title's connection to the poem. Does the dance symbolise how lovers should connect with and respond to each other? That aside, this poem is a wonderfully lyrical way of expressing a simple idea. It seems as though the woman, the plant, is happy in her straightforward evolution, her growth, while the man feels threatened and oppressed by that. Thanks for the read, LA.
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4th Nov 2011 5:52pm
I tried to pick a name as if it were a life lesson, as relationships always seen and 'to dance' seems the right description for a relationship that doesn't quite work. Thanks, Jack
LA
4th Nov 2011 5:12pm
I feel the freedom and growth in your powerful words..stunning expression..peace Crim :)
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4th Nov 2011 5:52pm