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violet dawn
the day wept purple tears
in the violet dawn
little blooms of regret dotted the land
within the garden of sadness
a place I once play
I know the landscape well
traveling there now in my mind
you are there in my tree of doubt
in this sacred denizen
the holder of my secrets
I climb its great branches
and sit awhile with you
a haunting spirit
for you're no longer with me
this is a private place
I created when I was young
a place to hide from the world
it was my only escape
so many specters are held here
memories I keep when I can't let go
of them all, you are the most real
I can smell and taste you still
the winds of fate blow through its leaves
reminding it's time to move forward
with one final glance back at you
I climb to the ground
I pick a flower of grief
each petal scribe with my story
one of love and passion
it is no more
this is the season for goodbye
in my garden I am mistress
keeper over the gate to my heart
so why are you here to plague me
with thoughts of why?
no answers will come
the day cry purple tears
in the violet dawn
and I wept bitterly
for a love no more
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11th Sep 2018 10:06am
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11th Sep 2018 10:18am
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11th Sep 2018 10:11am
Crim, this is absolutely heartbreaking. So vivid that I felt like an intrusion in this space.
Just absolutely wonderful write!
Just absolutely wonderful write!
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11th Sep 2018 10:19am
thank you graciously beautiful Bonzi for feeling this write so deeply 💕
love Crim
love Crim
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11th Sep 2018 11:52am
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11th Sep 2018 12:02pm
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11th Sep 2018 12:15pm
As in "blue" I feel the pathos in your writing. A deep sadness somehow made tolerable because it needs to come out ....
I applaud this side of you as you try to navigate the quagmire that brought you to this place.
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I applaud this side of you as you try to navigate the quagmire that brought you to this place.
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11th Sep 2018 12:21pm
thank you graciously dearest Poet there is sadness here that can only be relieved with writing... I deeply appreciate your love and understanding ❤
love Brenda
love Brenda
Re. violet dawn
11th Sep 2018 2:48pm
I really feel a sense of comfort in your sadness going to a place where you can be you.
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11th Sep 2018 3:42pm
thank you dearest Tim yes a special place indeed we all need such a space 💕
love Brenda
love Brenda
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Anonymous
11th Sep 2018 3:46pm
Crimmy!
You are fr**king amazing! I can't believe how you write, my friend! I mean, I'm not poet, or critic, but I think your writing is just phenomenal! That first stanza is brilliant, and my favorite. I printed it an put it on my wall in my office(but don't worry, if anyone asks, I'll tell them my beautiful friend Crimmy wrote it.
You're awesome, my friend!
Keep writing!
Matthew.
You are fr**king amazing! I can't believe how you write, my friend! I mean, I'm not poet, or critic, but I think your writing is just phenomenal! That first stanza is brilliant, and my favorite. I printed it an put it on my wall in my office(but don't worry, if anyone asks, I'll tell them my beautiful friend Crimmy wrote it.
You're awesome, my friend!
Keep writing!
Matthew.
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11th Sep 2018 3:50pm
aw dearest Matthew you honor me so... you really touched my heart but my friend you are indeed a beautiful poet 💕
I'm so moved you loved this poem so much 🌹
love Brenda
I'm so moved you loved this poem so much 🌹
love Brenda
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Anonymous
11th Sep 2018 3:57pm
Thank you for the kind words!
How do you do it, Crimmy? What a beautiful mind! You know, it shows in the beautiful, friendly person you always are, and that beauty just spills over into your poetry. That's the secret, I think! I've got to be nice like you...wait! I'm pretty nice, and it's not working for me! Damn! I guess you have to be intelligent, too...darn it.
Hey Crim, seriously though, are you published anywhere? Who are your favorite poest(what the hell's a poest?), poets?
I'm interested.
Thanks!
Love,
Matthew.
How do you do it, Crimmy? What a beautiful mind! You know, it shows in the beautiful, friendly person you always are, and that beauty just spills over into your poetry. That's the secret, I think! I've got to be nice like you...wait! I'm pretty nice, and it's not working for me! Damn! I guess you have to be intelligent, too...darn it.
Hey Crim, seriously though, are you published anywhere? Who are your favorite poest(what the hell's a poest?), poets?
I'm interested.
Thanks!
Love,
Matthew.
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11th Sep 2018 4:25pm
I've thought about submitting to publishing houses but haven't gotten the courage yet it's a lot of pressure... my favorite poets Bukowski, Plath, Sexton, Jim Morrison... you are very nice Matthew and plenty smart enough just give yourself time 😊
love Brenda
love Brenda
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Anonymous
11th Sep 2018 4:05pm
Hey Crimmy,
You don't mind if I put it up on my office wall, do you? I should have asked first.
Thanks,
Matthew.
You don't mind if I put it up on my office wall, do you? I should have asked first.
Thanks,
Matthew.
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11th Sep 2018 4:23pm
no of course Matthew I'm deeply honored for you to have it on your office wall 🌹
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11th Sep 2018 4:15pm
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11th Sep 2018 4:33pm
thank you dearest Lawrence for the love and understanding of this write 💕
love Brenda
love Brenda
Re. violet dawn
11th Sep 2018 6:28pm
Not all gardens are sanctuaries. Your imagination conjures one that has the growth of doubt. The spirit, probably of a past love, continues to haunt, but inspiring wondrous lines. Gorgeously dark, Lady Crim!
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11th Sep 2018 6:31pm
thank you graciously Sir Crow this is where I go in my thoughts when I'm sad... when I'm in doubt...I love your vision on this write 💕
love Crim
love Crim
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14th Sep 2018 9:32pm
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14th Sep 2018 10:37pm
OvationForVioletDawn'sBloomIntoPortrayalOfThy'sSpiral.
20th Sep 2018 5:11am
Symmetrical and daring! May you love another again. Including yourself fully. Out.
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23rd Sep 2018 3:18pm
thank you dearest Jeremy there is always love and hope I believe... when I love I love forever...
love Brenda ❤
love Brenda ❤
Re. violet dawn
You do a fantastic job of "conjuring" these literary miracles like.... so many specters are held here memories I keep when I can't let go of them all, you are the most real I can smell and taste you still. Extremely alluring.
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15th Oct 2018 00:16am