love will drag us to hell

beautiful Layla
this is a painful work of art..

so skillfully written
I can feel your love turned to anger..

love Crim

You know how it goes Dear Crimsin, we can keep something bottled for so long.  Eventually, it bursts sending everything to hell.  Thank you so much for supporting this write.

you truly are an amazing poetess
this is an awe inspiring letting of truth..

love Crim

I absolutely adore this poem! Just love it... Can't get enough of it and with every read I find more to love in it.

Frankly, the title and repetition of it, is masterful and the syntax is crafted with such care that the art just oozes from it.

The imagery is just great. Each line throws a new image for the reader to digest.

The entire piece just rides the page with such care.

Thank you for this!

Blue Skies at you

Al

It's so interesting how some poems just write themselves and this certainly turned out to be like that.  The title kept playing in my head over and over like a jingle, next thing i know i kept seeing a slapstick of some dark comedy playing in my head of a house in complete shambles by two people who are madly passionately out of love with each other...anyhoo, yeah most of it is semi-biographical i confess.

Thank you immensly mister Rev-Al for your wonderful compliment.  Much appreciation.

Incredible pictures created within these words.  Powerful stuff!  

Thank you Tenderloin.  I guess a little bit of organic emotions and a lot of twisted sense of humor made for a great recipe.

Layla, this I'd a beautifully written portrait of love gone stale.  I enjoyed the images this passage conjures "With all those ghosts hanging around the ceilling, fascinated by the monotony." You've reminded me that "The Art of War" is on my reading list.  Bravisima!

I was talking with someone about this piece last night and during the conversation i realized how the fight we invest in is not so much of what we can get out of it, but more so how much we hold on to the last of the remnants of what we have with each other.  As they say, negative attention is still attention.
Anyhow, I'm thinking aloud here lol
but what i really want to do is to thank you Mister Gahddess worship for enjoying this poem of mine. I greatly appreciate your comment and taking your time.

Wow, really enjoyed this. The second set of lines really hit me.

Awesome 😁

Hello.  I wanted to comment on some of your recent work but you seem to have turned off the commenting portion.  I think you're quite prolific and your voice so passionate and outstanding.  
Thank you for liking this.  I appreciate you taking the time to read :)

That’s very sweet of you to say 😁
I guess I kind of suck when it comes to mingling. I just put my thoughts out there hoping people enjoy. Though if you really ever want to comment on my poems feel free to send me a pm.

I’ll be looking over more of your poetry. If they’re anything like this one then I’m sure they’ll be worth the read 🤗

Moving. I ‘see’ the pain

Thank you.  Glad you did :)

I am quite profoundly moved.

"And even in our sleep pain that cannot forget falls drop by drop upon the heart, and in our own despair, against our will, comes wisdom to us by the awful grace of God." Aeschylus

Thank you Daniel, i guess i couldn't help but infuse some sarcasm in this piece.  As they say, we need to find some humor otherwise the tears will just choke us to death.

Is there any way to be when there's passion, lust...and anger.
Thank you Todski, so glad you liked it :)

i love how you have turned n lined up all the elements n emotions towards a strongly atmospheric n an unstoppably vented verses in a seamless flow ...that shakes n syncs a reader! I loved the refraining title in the stanzas ..keeping on stressing the hellish fatality of 'such' love that which you seem to clearly define its maddeningly superficial n evasive course with such classic boredom tints (that's felt n captured like never before in your mastered flow)  as never a 'sunning eternity'  of an absolute love...( I loved the 'bastard sun' in usage particulary..such a force n way derin)    
 
 simply stunning read ..way to go dear poet..keep writing keep shining ..much love xx:)

I guess it wasn't too difficult to translate the emotions into a poem when i lived thru it.  Your keen observations were so spot on that Im quite flattered by your comment especially coming from a poet of your caliber.  I'm in awe of your writing and the language.  YOu are an astounding writer, thank you for your time.

Enjoyed this immensely. Was going to say the pain is worded perfectly but I don’t see pain so much as waiting. And I think capturing that is harder than just pain. Amazing job!!

ah Thank you so much.  
I'm flattered by your compliment to saying something without really saying the actual words.  
I'm glad you liked it.

Been dragged to worse places suppose one shouldn't slip their grip just yet hmmm...I love how you provoke my thoughts with perfect word choice and placement Layla, yet another mighty fine write. Much Love and Mad Respect,
me

Honestly, this was written with one take so looking at it again,  i'm finding gems myself at the correlation of certain words, wording that its quite organic enhancing with depth without feeling forced.
As for the emotional turmoil depicted, well i guess it's relatable to so many of us, we all have experienced breakups on some level in our lives.
Thank you my dear friend for your beautiful and much supportive comment.  

So…did you win or lose the battle? I , unfortunately, never realized my enemy and lost quite a few.

hmm, I don't know.
I don't believe anyone comes out a 'winner' in heartbreak.

I guess I play until I realize that the game is not fun anymore…sometimes truth is “stranger than fiction”

I can certainly subscribe to that, truth is most definitely stranger than fiction.  
If love doesn't make you crazy, then it's not done right lol

The sea did not part in the love-
bed-divide. Wonderful imagery of the struggle. Very well done.

Good eye Mister Shakespear, a lot of twists in imagery in this poem and you caught a good one.  Thank you :)

I feel like you just exposed everyone to my not too comfy
shelter (hell) n yea, been drug here awhile ago... excellent ink letting...

Ah so you are much too familiar in that hotel called The Hell lol.
I guess we all have passed thru it at some point in our lives.  I'm pretty sure the hot (holy) jacuzzi draws the crowd in lol
Thanks for stopping by Mister Poe :)

I am speechless you vixen you!
I adore this craft your wielding Malday!
All day!!
RL
Luv Wifee!!!❤️

Zazzles, you found my most favorite poem lol
i had so much fun writing this and it was effortless.
Thank you for enjoying my twisted dark humor on broken hearts, we got to laugh about it i guess at some point after crying so much.