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I await you
I feel your loneliness as if it were my own
you hunger
& my stomach growls
with pains so sharp
i'm doubled over recoiling from it
we are two halves of the same whole
you are the sunshine I am the storm
westerly winds blew you to me
I just wait for you to appear at the door
when fate knocks will I refuse to answer?
I don't know
my door is locked & i'm afraid to open
what if it's actually death come to claim me
death of a life I knew
to be reborn into a different one
new sights & faces
frighten the me that is buried in you
you kept me shielded
from the brunt of the world
while keeping me
from walking into my future
I know this will end as it should
my prayer is to the Goddess
I be graceful in the knowing it's right
the stars have aligned
fated love will not be denied
it will find a way
through darkness greed
it will rise to greet a lover's sun
a love of forever
& yes you only get one
Written by
crimsin
(Unveiling)
Published 28th Feb 2018
Author's Note
many thanks beautiful one my love Taryn for uploading my reading for me :)
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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Re. I await you
28th Feb 2018 11:06am
This is fabulous Brenda. Very well penned. I reminds me of a quote from Anais Nin - "And the day came when the risk it took to remain inside the bud was more painful than the risk to blossom." Much love.
Mel
Mel
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Re: Re. I await you
1st Mar 2018 12:34pm
thank you graciously beautiful Mel thank you for the quote it fits so perfectly to the feeling I am conveying here..
love Brenda
love Brenda
Re. I await you
28th Feb 2018 11:13am
Re: Re. I await you
1st Mar 2018 12:34pm
Re. I await you
28th Feb 2018 1:46pm
this is that strong drink I can't get enough of;
so I store it in my messy closet,
in hope that it rids the stench of heart ache,
that lives underneath my dead skin worn throughout each week ;
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Re: Re. I await you
1st Mar 2018 12:35pm
Re. I await you
28th Feb 2018 1:50pm
Had to make room in my RL for this one, gladly so...
I feel the restraint, the fear, the holding-back when new horizons of love are there to greet us. A great struggle to be overcome, but fate will push us on through to whatever goal lies to be held.
Dearest Brenda, breath deep and follow the way to love’s embrace <3
I feel the restraint, the fear, the holding-back when new horizons of love are there to greet us. A great struggle to be overcome, but fate will push us on through to whatever goal lies to be held.
Dearest Brenda, breath deep and follow the way to love’s embrace <3
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Re: Re. I await you
1st Mar 2018 12:37pm
aw thank you beautiful Nightbird as one so bravely stepping into new horizons for love & life you inspire me to be fearless..
love Brenda
love Brenda
Re. I await you
28th Feb 2018 2:49pm
Re: Re. I await you
1st Mar 2018 12:38pm
Re. I await you
28th Feb 2018 5:26pm
"we are two halves of the same whole
you are the sunshine I am the storm
westerly winds blew you to me
I just wait for you to appear at the door "
This (particularly the last 2 lines) are excellent even in stand-alone. Though the whole piece is masterful, excellent work <3
you are the sunshine I am the storm
westerly winds blew you to me
I just wait for you to appear at the door "
This (particularly the last 2 lines) are excellent even in stand-alone. Though the whole piece is masterful, excellent work <3
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Re: Re. I await you
1st Mar 2018 12:39pm
thank you graciously beautiful Atomik your thoughts mean so much gifted one..
love Brenda
love Brenda
Re. I await you
28th Feb 2018 7:34pm
I feel your disdain for loneliness and need for love Lady Crim. "Fated love will not be denied." You deserve such a destiny. Fine work, well worth the awaiting.
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Re: Re. I await you
1st Mar 2018 12:40pm
thank you dearest Sir Crow as do we all I believe i'm so happy to journey along side you as fate leads..
love Crim
love Crim
Re. I await you
28th Feb 2018 7:36pm
Re: Re. I await you
1st Mar 2018 12:41pm
aw thank you this is a fledgling attempt at learning the art of audio :)
love Crim
love Crim
Re. I await you
28th Feb 2018 7:51pm
YES! You've done a great job with this poem! I love the way it flowed as I read this! Great job! I really don't have to critique, as you hit all the main points and kept the for going. I love your use of wording and how The words in the poem connect.
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/301532-perfect
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/301532-perfect
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Re: Re. I await you
1st Mar 2018 12:42pm
thank you most graciously Mister for such an awesome comment doing audio for the first time made me both nervous and excited..
love Crim
love Crim
Re. I await you
28th Feb 2018 7:53pm
Love the audio...hopefully there will be many more...beats punctuation in conveying intonation and rhythm...I use Audacity, free open source, for audio...highly recommended...XLNT
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Re: Re. I await you
1st Mar 2018 12:44pm
thank you graciously dearest Lawrence yes I will be trying my new audio wings with more reading i'm excited.. I appreciate your suggestions :)
love Brenda
love Brenda
Re. I await you
Anonymous
1st Mar 2018 1:31am
Brenda.. truly brilliant.. as only you can do.. love you my sister.. sorry i'm not around that much.. but always nice to read your work..
Dave
Dave

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Re: Re. I await you
1st Mar 2018 12:45pm
aw thank you Dave don't worry about being around all the time I know life and little ones call I will be here happy to see you when you are here :)
I love you..
Brenda
I love you..
Brenda
Re. I await you
Anonymous
1st Mar 2018 2:19pm
This one has such a deep mystique about it..
Gotta say although your work is always intriguing ....
When u actually read it ...
It really projects the power within such words..
Well done crim
Love Autumn
Gotta say although your work is always intriguing ....
When u actually read it ...
It really projects the power within such words..
Well done crim
Love Autumn

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Re: Re. I await you
1st Mar 2018 2:21pm
thank you graciously beautiful Autumn you gifted me many smiles this rainy morning :)
love Brenda
love Brenda
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1st Mar 2018 3:46pm
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Re: Re. I await you
1st Mar 2018 3:59pm
you're so beautiful to me Daniella thank you gorgeous soul and poetess..
love you lady..
love Brenda
love you lady..
love Brenda
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Re: Re. I await you
1st Mar 2018 4:23pm
me too beautiful we will walk it along side each other slow and easy :)
love Brenda
love Brenda
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1st Mar 2018 4:26pm
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Re. I await you
2nd Mar 2018 3:43am
Excellent piece, dear Crim. Lovely to hear your voice at last. Looking forward to more readings.
Hades
Hades
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Re: Re. I await you
2nd Mar 2018 10:44pm
thank you my Darkest Lord I'm so happy you enjoyed this we've been knowing each other for years now for you to hear me finally is awesome..
love Crim
love Crim
Re. I await you
Anonymous
2nd Mar 2018 6:17pm
It's wonderful to finally hear your voice, my beautiful Dark Angel. A gorgeous sweep across the page, lovely one. Never be afraid of closed doors. Who knows what joys may wait on the other side? I do so love you :-)
...ever your Willow
...ever your Willow

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Re: Re. I await you
2nd Mar 2018 10:45pm
thank you graciously beautiful Willow i'm so happy for you to hear me :)
I will do my best to go through
the doors of the future fearlessly..
I love you..
love Brenda
I will do my best to go through
the doors of the future fearlessly..
I love you..
love Brenda
Re. I await you
Anonymous
3rd Mar 2018 3:04am
this is so beautifully written babygirl..
im sure she'll adore it. ;)
💘
im sure she'll adore it. ;)
💘

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Re: Re. I await you
3rd Mar 2018 3:06am
Re. I await you
5th Mar 2018 4:29pm
This was beautiful and felt like a soul mate/twin flame type of bond.... I feel you because we are one.... With this type of love I do agree you only get one.... Many blessing.....
~BSavvy
~BSavvy
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Re: Re. I await you
16th Mar 2018 2:35am
Re. I await you
10th Mar 2018 10:34pm
a beautiful poem read beautifully - loved it a lot :-))))))
Love and many warm hugs :-)))))))
Love and many warm hugs :-)))))))
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Re: Re. I await you
16th Mar 2018 2:36am
Re. I await you
14th Mar 2018 1:32pm
Awesome to hear your poetry spoken after reading your stellar poems over the years! Bloody great stuff, Brenda.
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Re: Re. I await you
16th Mar 2018 2:37am
Re. I await you
16th Mar 2018 1:03am
your words floating on Taryn's lips...watch a sexy trip...
I'm steppin what you droppin
love
jeff
I'm steppin what you droppin
love
jeff
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Re: Re. I await you
16th Mar 2018 2:08am
thank you dearest Jeff that's actually my voice your hearing says giggling :)
love Brenda
love Brenda
Re: Re. I await you
16th Mar 2018 4:11am
oh my goddess...I saw your authors note and glanced the words "Taryn" and "read for me"...that is what happens when I get very high from weed and poetry...my mind speeds past the words..
love your voice too...first time I ever heard the manifested Crims...bravo dear one...
love
Jeff
love your voice too...first time I ever heard the manifested Crims...bravo dear one...
love
Jeff
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Re: Re. I await you
16th Mar 2018 4:22am