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kiss the weeping dawn
who sheds tears on the sunset
of your heart
as the last I love you is uttered
and you remember it above all others
because it was final
you knew in your soul
those beautiful words would never again
be whispered in your ear
not by him
the only him that mattered
he took a piece of you
when he left
captured your passion
and bottled it like a perfume
so he could wear it
when he needed to remember
what it was like to be desired
above any other man
so he could feel
for just a moment
like a real man
loved by a real woman
deeply, passionately
with hunger, no hesitations
I feel your pain
having tasted love so great
memories of her haunt you
her taste, her smell and touch
the way she felt beneath your body
the way you fit just right
a once in a lifetime kind of love
tasting it only in memory
hurts more than dying
death is final
being separated from your soulmate
are little deaths
you continually succumb to
better to have never tasted it at all
than live with the loss
of her, the only woman
you were more than enough for
*for all lovers separated from their soulmates
Copyright © 2018 Crimsin. All Rights Reserved
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crimsin
(Unveiling)
Published 25th Jan 2018
| Edited 25th Mar 2019
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Anonymous
25th Jan 2018 7:34pm
Brenda.
This is hands down the best thing you have ever written. I literally wouldn’t change a thing. This poem is tribute to your beauty as a soul.
Thank you for sharing.
This is hands down the best thing you have ever written. I literally wouldn’t change a thing. This poem is tribute to your beauty as a soul.
Thank you for sharing.
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26th Jan 2018 4:12pm
thank you Missy for a most beautiful comment that moved my heart greatly & made me smile wide :)
my passions were deeply stirred sharing the loss of a soulmate in another,,
i'm deeply honored by your comment..
love Brenda
my passions were deeply stirred sharing the loss of a soulmate in another,,
i'm deeply honored by your comment..
love Brenda
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Crim, this is beautifully written. Raw and filled with so much passion. Amazing write!!
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26th Jan 2018 4:13pm
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Anonymous
25th Jan 2018 8:29pm
words as hauntingly sad. as the separation you write of is ghostly sad. Rob x
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26th Jan 2018 4:15pm
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Anonymous
25th Jan 2018 8:31pm
My beautiful Dark Angel, this is a wholly beautiful piece. Haunting and every word true. I do so love you
...ever your Willow
...ever your Willow
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26th Jan 2018 4:18pm
thank you beautiful Willow it is true I lost my soulmate for a time & it was little deaths..
I love you..
Brenda
I love you..
Brenda
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25th Jan 2018 8:48pm
Fantastic write. One that cuts deep into the heart of loss. Nicely done as usual.
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26th Jan 2018 4:23pm
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Anonymous
26th Jan 2018 1:29am
My beautiful Bren... im gonna thank you for writing
this as love and humility has made me swallow my
own heartbeat...
silence, stillness and ways of coping-a piece of mind
is everything
my eyes are swollen as overfilled shores.
i cant ..i just cant even say anymore
💘
this as love and humility has made me swallow my
own heartbeat...
silence, stillness and ways of coping-a piece of mind
is everything
my eyes are swollen as overfilled shores.
i cant ..i just cant even say anymore
💘
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26th Jan 2018 4:39pm
my beautiful Splits my passions & heart were deeply stirred by the deep pain felt by lovers separated from their soulmates.. thank you dear one I believed you would feel this deeply understanding your own personal pain..
love you beautiful..
love Brenda
love you beautiful..
love Brenda
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Anonymous
26th Jan 2018 2:49am
My love....my Beautiful Brenda...what can I say that hasn’t been...this write is brilliant...passion and tenderness with each line which showcases the absolutely beautiful soul you are...I am keeping this one very close, not just on my list but will be printed out as well to be framed and hung on one of the walls of my new home...it’s going to be beautiful there, surrounded by many others...
I love you madly, deeply, passionately
yours always & forever
xoxoxox Taryn
I love you madly, deeply, passionately
yours always & forever
xoxoxox Taryn
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26th Jan 2018 4:50pm
thank you beautiful I am deeply stirred by your great passion in love & life you give it your all..
i'm so honored & touched to know this will be gracing the walls of new home..
I love you passionately..
love Brenda
i'm so honored & touched to know this will be gracing the walls of new home..
I love you passionately..
love Brenda
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Anonymous
26th Jan 2018 2:13pm
Wow this is an amazing write ...I appreciate this piece...been there
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26th Jan 2018 4:51pm
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26th Jan 2018 4:44pm
beautiful Dani wiping those tears & kissing your nose thank you for feeling this so deeply dear one..
love you beautiful..
love Brenda
love you beautiful..
love Brenda
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27th Jan 2018 7:34pm
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26th Jan 2018 9:23pm
A heartbreaking write but beautifully worded. The sense of romantic loss is devastating. Personally, I would rather have had the love of "her," a fine woman, than to have not had the experience at all. Life would be a void without such things. fragile as they may be.
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27th Jan 2018 7:34pm
thank you graciously dearest Sir Crow I see you point I lost my soulmate for a time & the thought of losing him permanently would be like a death for me..
love you my friend..
love Crim
love you my friend..
love Crim
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28th Jan 2018 4:20am
'death is final
being separated from your soulmate
are little deaths
you continually succumb to'
....
a loss worse than death indeed...
you are a marvel Crim
being separated from your soulmate
are little deaths
you continually succumb to'
....
a loss worse than death indeed...
you are a marvel Crim
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29th Jan 2018 4:06am
thank you dearest Naajir for feeling this so deeply & gifting me such a beautiful comment..
love Crim
love Crim
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29th Jan 2018 4:07am
thank you beautiful Kat for the continued love yes my heart was deeply moved by those who've suffered such loss..
love Brenda
love Brenda
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28th Jan 2018 9:44pm
I have been with my partner for 24 years, she is my best friend...because friendship, as Nietzsche said, is the most important part of a marriage (relationship), everything else is so temporary...as this is my third marriage I can totally agree with Fred lol. An absolutely beautiful poem Brenda.
Cheers and love...Harry
Cheers and love...Harry
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29th Jan 2018 4:09am
thank you graciously dearest Harry this poem only reflects the great beauty that inspired it.. congratulations on twenty four years :)
love Brenda
love Brenda
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the beauty of your soul loving phrases is beyond me...my dear crimson...this is a chest warming page of longing what has past...the touch still remains....I fall in love with your pen... again
eyes closed
Jeff
eyes closed
Jeff
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29th Jan 2018 4:10am
thank you graciously dearest Jeff i'm so happy this write warmed your heart with its passion..
love Brenda
love Brenda
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Anonymous
29th Jan 2018 00:37am
Brenda.. absolutely brilliant.. every time i think you've raised the bar beyond reach, you send it to another level.. you are simply the best.. and my favorite writer.. so glad to have you in my life.. i love you, dearest sister..
Dave
Dave
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29th Jan 2018 4:11am
thank you graciously Dave my brother i'm grateful for your presence in my life :)
love you..
Brenda
love you..
Brenda
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29th Jan 2018 9:19am
this blew me away - your best to date - really felt that - got to find a solution soon :-))))
Huge Massive Hugs :-))))
Huge Massive Hugs :-))))
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30th Jan 2018 8:18pm
thank you graciously dearest David that's a great compliment..
love & hugs..
Brenda
love & hugs..
Brenda
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1st Mar 2018 5:10pm
I always find it so fascinating to read someones work,
someones heart pouring out for so long that you invent a voice,
invent an idea of them.
words taking on a fictional personality of their own.
walking,pacing floors,speak,whispering in ears for months,years for some.
wonderful write.
wonderful reading.
your triumph has long been overdue,
take a bow for these people have come to applaud you.
among these are the familiar and the faceless
frenzy fills the theatre
you are the play,cast,and curtain.
this box office sold out long before the tickets even went on sale.
well penned Crim.
someones heart pouring out for so long that you invent a voice,
invent an idea of them.
words taking on a fictional personality of their own.
walking,pacing floors,speak,whispering in ears for months,years for some.
wonderful write.
wonderful reading.
your triumph has long been overdue,
take a bow for these people have come to applaud you.
among these are the familiar and the faceless
frenzy fills the theatre
you are the play,cast,and curtain.
this box office sold out long before the tickets even went on sale.
well penned Crim.
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Anonymous
- Edited 1st Mar 2018 7:42pm
1st Mar 2018 7:40pm
See now you have to read on one of my shows! Awesome piece, lovely read. Truly a phenomenal poem
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1st Mar 2018 9:25pm
samael made such a lovely comment, so true! Your voice is beautiful Brenda, so inspiring to hear you read this powerful verse from the depths of your heart!
Forgive me for missing this epic write when you posted, I was away from DU for some time...
Much love poetess!
Forgive me for missing this epic write when you posted, I was away from DU for some time...
Much love poetess!
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Anonymous
4th Oct 2019 6:30pm
Excellent!
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