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Thorazine Shuffle
here inside the madness
the sun is blaring
in the psych ward it's always noon
on the same day
a florescent light beats down on me
& steals from my essence
the day you turned away
is on constant repeat
trapped inside isolation
my soul captured
& left abandoned
i wail at the wall
because you refused to face me
you played doctor with my sanity
said my love delusional
i've been committed
to life alone for loving you
i masturbate to broken dreams
as padded walls close in on me
muffling my screams
you left my soul in torment
injected me with Thorazine
so i would be silent
& not rattle the other patients
in this crazy fucked up existense
you made me feel insane
for my brand of passion
i love wholly
with no reservations
you tell me hurry & get better
after you broke me inside
keep your prescription of poorly told lies
i'm moving on with my life
*written for a friend
& posted with her permission
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20th Jan 2018 6:42pm
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20th Jan 2018 6:42pm
beautiful Daniella, I graciously thank you for such a lovely comment and seeing the struggles within this ink. I was inspired by a friend and I will pass your thoughts and love along to her, I’m sure they will be deeply appreciated.
love Brenda
love Brenda
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20th Jan 2018 10:08pm
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20th Jan 2018 6:56pm
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20th Jan 2018 7:44pm
Damn Brenda! Apologize for cursing. I mean, fuck! Only expletives can properly express what this poem says to me. Powerful indeed. Jesus!
Much love....David
Much love....David
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20th Jan 2018 8:30pm
thank you graciously dearest David for the awesome response on this write.. you gifted me smiles :)
love Brenda
love Brenda
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Anonymous
20th Jan 2018 7:46pm
Great write Crim. Addiction to another who mentally abuses, is a deadly an addiction as speed & vodka. I know these things. Had to move 250 miles to break the chains.

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20th Jan 2018 8:32pm
thank you dearest Rob yeah love & addictions both killers..
I deeply appreciate your thoughts on this write.. happy you are free..
love Brenda
I deeply appreciate your thoughts on this write.. happy you are free..
love Brenda
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Anonymous
20th Jan 2018 9:16pm
Resonates deeply with many. Love the closing lines - powerfully fierce :)

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20th Jan 2018 9:46pm
thank you beautiful Sophie
I deeply cherish your thoughts
& visits to my pages..
love Crim
I deeply cherish your thoughts
& visits to my pages..
love Crim
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20th Jan 2018 9:31pm
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20th Jan 2018 9:47pm
Thank you dearest Tim for feeling this ink...passions have a way of messing with the best of us..
love Brenda
love Brenda
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20th Jan 2018 10:16pm
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20th Jan 2018 10:28pm
thank you beautiful Jade for coming back for another read I cherish your visits..
love Crim
love Crim
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Anonymous
20th Jan 2018 11:45pm
My love such a powerful write conveying all the feelings of each type of addiction and abusive behavior one can suffer by their own hand or through the hands of others...this reasonated with me long after the last line, as I’m sure it will for the friend you wrote it for...I will be keeping this one close :)
I love you passionately
yours always & forever
xoxox Love Taryn
I love you passionately
yours always & forever
xoxox Love Taryn

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22nd Jan 2018 12:58pm
thank you my love I was deeply inspired by the pain I witnessed & shared with this beautiful friend breaking my heart.. her love branded as too passionate..
I love yo beautiful..
love Brenda
I love yo beautiful..
love Brenda
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i masturbate to broken dreams
as padded walls close in on me
muffling my screams
you left my soul in torment
injected me with Thorazine
so i would be silent
& not rattle the other patients
So very powerful ... a vision that I have witnessed firsthand , in med school ...
The Thorazine shuffle is a painful thing to watch ... you can almost hear the soul screaming from the lifeless eyes of a doll staring back at you.
As usual, I find myself bowing to the queen of metaphors 🌹
With deepest admiration
~Wicked
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22nd Jan 2018 1:01pm
thank you graciously dearest Wicked One the metaphor came to me because my friends love was deemed to passionate this man would rather see her shuffle through life.. then recognize her depths.. also inspired by my own experiences in the psych ward..
love Crim
love Crim
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22nd Jan 2018 1:52am
Metaphorical words casting beautiful spells..
Maybe this is gleaming even more because it was written for a friend..
a beautiful intent
<3
H
Maybe this is gleaming even more because it was written for a friend..
a beautiful intent
<3
H
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Re: Re. Thorazine Shuffle
22nd Jan 2018 1:03pm
thank you graciously beautiful Kat I love when you smile on my pages you are such deeply feeling soul.. this poem was inspired by watching a beautiful friend devastated in love..
love you lady..
Crim
love you lady..
Crim
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24th Jan 2018 12:51pm
faaaaaaark
reading this at the office ltm because zero impulse control.
such devastating metaphors, beautiful one...
... the entire piece blankets my ribs in claustrophobia,
it reads tangibly, as tho it's an entity unto itself
just spectacular writing
xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxo
reading this at the office ltm because zero impulse control.
such devastating metaphors, beautiful one...
... the entire piece blankets my ribs in claustrophobia,
it reads tangibly, as tho it's an entity unto itself
just spectacular writing
xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxo
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24th Jan 2018 10:14pm
thank you graciously beautiful one this metaphor came to me from my days in the psych ward & then comparing it to heartbreak..
love you lady..
love Brenda
love you lady..
love Brenda
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30th Jan 2018 5:36am
powerful and griping foray into the scene of this despair...a mental prison...and the breakout...
love
Jeff
love
Jeff
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30th Jan 2018 9:29pm