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whore
the junkie's rig
was half full of hate
she shot the dope
laid out
on a cum stained mattress
her head began to spin
faces elongated
then turned mean
tormenting her
within a captive state
the Johns of her past
call her dirty little whore
with a cunt spread so wide
the doormat of the world
as men
in revolving door fashion
slip inside
her heart refuses them
but the dope is master
it speaks for her
self esteem
with a side of soul for sale
as the smell of stale smoke
& sweat assaults her
another cock shoved
within her inner sanctum
defiled no salvation in the soap
so vile are these men
she wretches at the thought
of her wrecked life
she cries tears of madness
knowing she's dead inside
she shoots her final shot
then gets on that long black train
& takes one last ride
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Re. whore
18th Dec 2017 00:58am
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18th Dec 2017 1:07am
thank you beautiful Jade
only sad you can relate to this write..
love & hugs..
Crim
only sad you can relate to this write..
love & hugs..
Crim
Re. whore
18th Dec 2017 1:18am
Damn Crimsin. These too vibrant images stick. I can't imagine what these girls feel once ravished by that life. I have worked with children that were sexually abused and it destroys them. They've been robbed of so much so young. I always wondered just how far that scar goes. We only ever see the part that lays on top of the surface. Such emotions Crim!
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Re: Re. whore
18th Dec 2017 1:31am
thank you beautiful Sadie
I once was a junkie
with feelings such as this
though it's been years
& I didn't take my final ride
those thoughts stick with you..
love Crim
I once was a junkie
with feelings such as this
though it's been years
& I didn't take my final ride
those thoughts stick with you..
love Crim
Re. whore
18th Dec 2017 1:41am
Find peace. You've overcome. That person may have died but look what was reborn in her place. You've won!
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Re: Re. whore
18th Dec 2017 1:43am
thank you beautiful Sadie
yeah that was long time ago
& i'm a different person
sometimes I just like to remember
where i've been..
love Crim
yeah that was long time ago
& i'm a different person
sometimes I just like to remember
where i've been..
love Crim
Re. whore
18th Dec 2017 1:44am
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18th Dec 2017 1:52am
thank you beautiful poetess
i'm happy that the darkness was conveyed..
love Crim
i'm happy that the darkness was conveyed..
love Crim
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Anonymous
18th Dec 2017 2:15am
Hopefully his story helps someone shy away from a needle or anything life faltering. IM currently dealing with a 26yr ol child who s 8 months sober. You have penned the unfortunate reality. Hugs and loves for you and the strength it takes to stay sober.
Beth
Beth
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Re: Re. whore
18th Dec 2017 2:20am
thank you beautiful Beth
yes it's a dark world out there
I didn't want it to seem attractive
so I painted it at its bleakest..
sending my love
on the 26 year old eight months clean
it's a rough road sobriety..
know I cherish you
& you shining on my pages..
love Brenda
yes it's a dark world out there
I didn't want it to seem attractive
so I painted it at its bleakest..
sending my love
on the 26 year old eight months clean
it's a rough road sobriety..
know I cherish you
& you shining on my pages..
love Brenda
Re. whore
18th Dec 2017 2:20am
I could drown in this depth it's so profound. A magnificent write regarding our wronged selves as we seek salvation and a way out. Very nicely stated, Crim.
Much love to you
David
Much love to you
David
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Re: Re. whore
18th Dec 2017 2:27am
thank you graciously dearest David
I love that I was able
to bring you for a moment
into this world
& the darkness was felt..
love Crim
I love that I was able
to bring you for a moment
into this world
& the darkness was felt..
love Crim
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Anonymous
18th Dec 2017 2:50am
Brenda.. these writes hurt my heart.. but you are sharing the truth.. bravest woman, never change.. i love you.. my sister..
Dave
Dave
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Re: Re. whore
18th Dec 2017 2:52am
thank you Dave
some of this is just observation
I did while living that life..
so don't feel too bad..
love you my brother..
Brenda
some of this is just observation
I did while living that life..
so don't feel too bad..
love you my brother..
Brenda
Re. whore
"self esteem
with a side of soul for sale
as the smell of stale smoke
& sweat assaults her
another cock shoved
within her inner sanctum
defiled no salvation in the soap
so vile are these men
she wretches at the thought
of her wrecked life
she cries tears of madness
knowing she's dead inside
as she shoots her final shot
then gets on that long black train
& takes one last ride"
Oh my goodness dear Crim!
Such a wicked write and amazing portrayal of the thoughts and feelings as a "whore" they would call it...
so stunning and clear...
I bow to your mastery of words dear beautiful poetess
<3
Love
H
with a side of soul for sale
as the smell of stale smoke
& sweat assaults her
another cock shoved
within her inner sanctum
defiled no salvation in the soap
so vile are these men
she wretches at the thought
of her wrecked life
she cries tears of madness
knowing she's dead inside
as she shoots her final shot
then gets on that long black train
& takes one last ride"
Oh my goodness dear Crim!
Such a wicked write and amazing portrayal of the thoughts and feelings as a "whore" they would call it...
so stunning and clear...
I bow to your mastery of words dear beautiful poetess
<3
Love
H
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Re: Re. whore
18th Dec 2017 3:39am
thank you beautiful Hanuel
i'm blushing..
i'm both humbled
& honored by your comment..
i'm beaming here :)
love Crim
i'm blushing..
i'm both humbled
& honored by your comment..
i'm beaming here :)
love Crim
Re. whore
18th Dec 2017 5:40am
Dear Crim, such a sad picture you have painted here. It's heartwrenching, but I can't seem to look away
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18th Dec 2017 6:23am
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18th Dec 2017 6:23am
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18th Dec 2017 6:25am
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Anonymous
18th Dec 2017 6:29am
A hard read! Very intense content, but well written as always Crim! Sending you love xo
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Re: Re. whore
18th Dec 2017 6:33am
thank you beautiful Star
for reading this very dark
portrayal of the life..
as my time as a junkie
& a sometime prostitute
I observed many who
felt this way..
thank you for the love..
hugs & love..
Crim
for reading this very dark
portrayal of the life..
as my time as a junkie
& a sometime prostitute
I observed many who
felt this way..
thank you for the love..
hugs & love..
Crim
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Anonymous
18th Dec 2017 8:06am
“self esteem
with a side of soul for sale”
Definitely hits you right in the heart reading this.
You’ve portrayed the thoughts and feelings in a way that no other could beautiful one <3
with a side of soul for sale”
Definitely hits you right in the heart reading this.
You’ve portrayed the thoughts and feelings in a way that no other could beautiful one <3
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Re: Re. whore
18th Dec 2017 8:09am
thank you beautiful Sophie
for understanding the darkness
that comes with this life
& for feeling those lines..
love Crim
for understanding the darkness
that comes with this life
& for feeling those lines..
love Crim
Re. whore
18th Dec 2017 8:13am
Re: Re. whore
18th Dec 2017 8:15am
thank you dearest Harry
yes this darkness is a sad truth
for so many out there..
I deeply appreciate your visits
to my pages..
love Crim
yes this darkness is a sad truth
for so many out there..
I deeply appreciate your visits
to my pages..
love Crim
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Anonymous
18th Dec 2017 10:36am
The visual images of your words are felt deeply Crim.
Tromendous write
Tromendous write
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Re: Re. whore
18th Dec 2017 12:43pm
Re. whore
18th Dec 2017 11:44am
It’s sad that things like this are true but unfortunately it is life and this piece is extremely engaging my thoughts of a song that I know “nice boys don’t play rock n roll”
But it is still great ink peace to you Crim 😊
But it is still great ink peace to you Crim 😊
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Re: Re. whore
18th Dec 2017 12:45pm
thank you dearest Epic One
for sharing your song with me
& for your thoughts on this write..
you are deeply appreciated..
love Crim
for sharing your song with me
& for your thoughts on this write..
you are deeply appreciated..
love Crim
Re. whore
18th Dec 2017 12:29pm
This is about as real as real gets. it's dark,it's vivid,it's shows how gritty life can be and the hurdles we can overcome. thank you so much for sharing this awesome write wit us Crim and tearing off a piece of your soul for all to see.
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Re: Re. whore
18th Dec 2017 12:48pm
thank you dearest Samael
this is darkness no filter..
I deeply cherish your thoughts
& visits to my pages..
yes the even in the dark
there is hope to overcome..
love Crim
this is darkness no filter..
I deeply cherish your thoughts
& visits to my pages..
yes the even in the dark
there is hope to overcome..
love Crim
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Anonymous
18th Dec 2017 2:15pm
It breaks my heart to remember this was your experience, your existence, for a time. There are many, I'm sure, who can find truth in these words and connect deeply with them. I'm very fortunate to never have experienced the destructive forces of substance abuse. What we do to escape from the pain, to try to numb it...it varies from soul to soul. I am much relieved that you have escaped those darkened alleys and dangerous places. I do so love you, so very much, my beautiful Dark Angel
...ever your Willow
...ever your Willow
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Re: Re. whore
18th Dec 2017 5:21pm
thank you beautiful Willow
this write came out of nowhere
it came to me so I gave it voice..
I don't believe in dwelling in the past
nor do I think it should be forgotten..
I deeply cherish your love
& thoughts on this write..
I love you..
Brenda
this write came out of nowhere
it came to me so I gave it voice..
I don't believe in dwelling in the past
nor do I think it should be forgotten..
I deeply cherish your love
& thoughts on this write..
I love you..
Brenda
Re. whore
Anonymous
18th Dec 2017 5:00pm
To open yourself up like this is a truly wonderful & marvellous thing. I salute you!
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18th Dec 2017 5:22pm
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Anonymous
18th Dec 2017 5:01pm
To open yourself up like this is a truly marvellous thing. I salute you.
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18th Dec 2017 5:23pm
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18th Dec 2017 5:37pm
"cum stained mattress" makes the environment stick out & cheap and dirty. Very good images, a masterpiece
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Re: Re. whore
18th Dec 2017 5:40pm
thank you graciously dearest poetess
happy the atmosphere
of the place was captured..
love Crim
happy the atmosphere
of the place was captured..
love Crim
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Anonymous
21st Dec 2017 2:23am
My love, the pain and darkness in this ink jumps from the page and steals breath...your courage and your strength shine so brightly here...so very much to be proud of and your words are inspirational to anyone currently struggling...your heart is so beautiful...hugging you so tightly you didn't take that last final ride...
I love you passionately
xoxoxox Love Taryn
I love you passionately
xoxoxox Love Taryn
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Re: Re. whore
21st Dec 2017 8:55pm
thank you my love
I tried to portray the darkness
how I viewed it..
so people could for a moment
step into this dark world..
no I didn't take that last ride
though sadly some do..
I love you passionately..
love Brenda
I tried to portray the darkness
how I viewed it..
so people could for a moment
step into this dark world..
no I didn't take that last ride
though sadly some do..
I love you passionately..
love Brenda