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me exposed
if i let you in
give you a peek behind my facade
i worry that you will lose interest
these days i'm only sexy in my dreams
time has not been kind to me
or rather i haven't been kind to me
years of drug & alcohol use
shows on my face
my soul is better for the experience
pain has a way of creating
the sweetest of wines
a little heartache
some loss to add spice
you want to know me?
nothing special really
a girl from Cali
i live in a small country town
all bikers & cowboys
we have bonfires
drink plenty of beer
& yeah i still draw the young ones
knowing my days of beauty
are behind me
when one of them grabs my ass
"i ask what is it you like about me?"
they answer
"i love that you're a crazy bitch"
the other day a young one
asked to read what i was writing
i obliged him
he said it made him hot
looked at me a certain way
that i no longer expect from a man
made me nervous truth be told
i escorted him outside
it was thrilling & scary at the same time
i guess people are drawn to my spirit
because they still love to flirt with me
& i'm known to do the same
Copyright © 2017 Crimsin. All Rights Reserved
Written by
crimsin
(Unveiling)
Published 12th Aug 2017
| Edited 13th Aug 2017
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Re. me exposed
12th Aug 2017 3:13pm
I could write a country song about you, I'm a cowboy you know ....
Thx for the look inside , gives me a certain feeling
Xx
Thx for the look inside , gives me a certain feeling
Xx
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12th Aug 2017 3:17pm
thank you dearest Poet you're the realest cowboy that i've had the pleasure of knowing.. you always are for real giving us all a taste of your soul.. love you my friend.. Brenda
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Anonymous
12th Aug 2017 3:14pm
i like the simplicity of this, yet its layered more than the eye reads. i'm originally from cali so i know the Nor Cal vibe i picked up on and the 'facade' factor really drew me in as i've been working on a piece for near a year based around that word. of current my well is dry and i havent written or painted in weeks. this stirs me, maybe it will summon something. i thank you n appreciate this piece.
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Re: Re. me exposed
12th Aug 2017 3:20pm
thank you Sinister One keen eye yes I am from North Cali.. I paint too but haven't done so in years.. I miss it.. I hope your waters are stirred today & you will be inspired.. love Crim
Re. me exposed
12th Aug 2017 3:26pm
Wow, this made me read many times. I love the story and the way you write. Really really touch my heart. RoseJasmine
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12th Aug 2017 3:37pm
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12th Aug 2017 3:34pm
Of course you are hot, Brenda, and another
thing ...YOU are super hot in my estimation!
thing ...YOU are super hot in my estimation!
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12th Aug 2017 3:38pm
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12th Aug 2017 6:44pm
I've known that you were STILL hott from the very first meeting here...a sexy personality has an aura that's very hard to ignore woman... :)
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Re: Re. me exposed
13th Aug 2017 1:36am
thank you dearest Poe for seeing me in such a light made me smile :) love you.. Crim
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12th Aug 2017 7:10pm
lady, you are beautiful in all the ways that matter
& uh sexy AF too ;)
love you heaps & bunches
*´¨)
¸.•´¸.•*´¨) ¸.•*¨)
(¸.•´ (¸.•` ¤ katja ❦
& uh sexy AF too ;)
love you heaps & bunches
*´¨)
¸.•´¸.•*´¨) ¸.•*¨)
(¸.•´ (¸.•` ¤ katja ❦
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13th Aug 2017 1:37am
aw beautiful one coming from such a sexy lady as yourself means a lot.. love you lady :) Brenda
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Anonymous
12th Aug 2017 7:19pm
I can't speak for anyone else, but I know that the more I learn about you...the more I love you. You have magic in your soul, my beautiful Dark Angel. I love this reflective open piece.
So much love for you...
So much love for you...
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13th Aug 2017 00:28am
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13th Aug 2017 1:38am
thank you lovely one I love you too your spirit is gorgeous as is the lady it resides in.. adore & appreciate your comment :) love Crim
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13th Aug 2017 1:39am
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Anonymous
12th Aug 2017 7:57pm
Brenda.. i'm not surprised.. you're beautiful, inside and out.. creative, and charismatic.. you'll always be a catch.. love you my sister..
Dave
Dave
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Re: Re. me exposed
13th Aug 2017 1:40am
thank you my brother Dave & you are the same my dear friend.. love you.. Brenda
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12th Aug 2017 8:09pm
fascinating insight into Brenda. Truth be told it made me feel sad as you reflect on getting older and hot or not. I think that you are in more ways than one. Beauty flows from your pen - that comes from you and you alone.:-)
lots of Big ole hugs :-)
lots of Big ole hugs :-)
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13th Aug 2017 1:41am
thank you David sorry it made you sad it's life for some to have beauty for a time then watch it fade but the soul remains & maybe becomes even more lovely for it.. love & hugs Brenda
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A rough life but a beautiful one. The years of hard living might have left traces but also signs of experience that no biker boy, or old geezer, can resist. These vivid lines really bring a rush Lady Crim. Can't wait to see you at the bonfire....
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13th Aug 2017 1:43am
thank you dearest Sir Crow yeah it was rough going but I think it's the ingredients that flavored my soul.. see you at the bonfire my friend :) love Crim
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13th Aug 2017 1:58am
There's so much more to you than most would take the time to discover. I know this without ever having formally meeting you. Your writings tell your tales and show your beautiful soul. You deserve nothing less than someone who appreciates every part of you.
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13th Aug 2017 3:09am
thank you dearest Zach your comment is so beautiful it really moved me.. touched my soul & gifted me with many smiles :) love Brenda
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Anonymous
13th Aug 2017 2:50am
My Beautiful Brenda...I am one of those honored to know "you" and I know how blessed I am...I see so much of you that you don't...and your honesty here is stunning and gorgeous in its vulnerability within these lines. The beauty of you is you accept all which you are, even the parts you may not be fond of (which I find the most attractive btw)...arms are wrapped so tightly around you and kisses are brought to your mouth passionately...
I love you madly, deeply
With all my love, forever & always - Taryn xoxo
I love you madly, deeply
With all my love, forever & always - Taryn xoxo
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13th Aug 2017 3:11am
thank you my love & I am blessed to have you in my life.. I cherish our time together & you make me see the beauty in me even within my darkest shadows.. for all these reasons I love you passionately.. love Brenda
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13th Aug 2017 4:26pm
Oh those years! The lack of regret shows quickly on the damned!
However..
For those of US that know one another and the relative aspects we ALL share theres a way to create true beauty! You Brenda, know how to do this!
Again, i thank you for showing a piece of you. Bravery darlin'!
Christopher
However..
For those of US that know one another and the relative aspects we ALL share theres a way to create true beauty! You Brenda, know how to do this!
Again, i thank you for showing a piece of you. Bravery darlin'!
Christopher
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Re: Re. me exposed
13th Aug 2017 4:50pm
thank you dearest Christopher for showing me love on this write.. a dear poet challenged me to show another side of me & so I did.. I'm grateful to be so well received.. love Brenda
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14th Aug 2017 7:06am
I'm honor be a friend of yours, such a beautiful person, mind body and soul. Such a talented artist that I feel I neglect at times of getting here late. But know I always look forward to your presence. Excellent piece as always!
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20th Aug 2017 2:04pm
thank you my Darkest Lord knowing you is an honor to my soul.. forgive my late response i've been feeling out of it.. I love you my dear friend.. love Crim
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Anonymous
14th Aug 2017 7:31am
floored ...
I think I should stop
writing poetry now ... not after this piece.
all my blood
sweat
&
tears, Bren ...
~from someone who genuinely
loves you ... Devlin
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Re: Re. me exposed
20th Aug 2017 2:05pm
aw thank you graciously my Queen I love you so much.. I am humbled by your comment.. forgive my late response I haven't been me lately.. love Brenda
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Anonymous
23rd Aug 2017 4:49pm
Ah, don`t worry ... I`ve been a bitch;)
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23rd Aug 2017 4:55pm
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28th Oct 2017 11:44pm
Oh this is exquisite ... full of unfurled vulnerability. I can feel it. Simply beautiful my sweet poetess.
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1st Nov 2017 11:26pm
thank you beautiful DragonFly for showing me so much love on this more vulnerable write..
love Crim
love Crim