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THE TAKER
One day-
A beautiful day...
She noticed her shadow was missing.
She came to me scared...and we did what we could with what we had...but eventually it took her reflection as well...
We'd stand at the mirror for hours,hoping to catch a glimpse of anything coming back...
It never did.
When she became transparent,and started flickering...I'd lie next to her,and hold her...
At least the parts of her that my hands wouldn't just pass through...
We prayed...
and cried.
Until she faded away...
And I was left embracing the fabric of space and time~
A beautiful day...
She noticed her shadow was missing.
She came to me scared...and we did what we could with what we had...but eventually it took her reflection as well...
We'd stand at the mirror for hours,hoping to catch a glimpse of anything coming back...
It never did.
When she became transparent,and started flickering...I'd lie next to her,and hold her...
At least the parts of her that my hands wouldn't just pass through...
We prayed...
and cried.
Until she faded away...
And I was left embracing the fabric of space and time~
Published 5th Aug 2017
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6th Aug 2017 4:36am
This is so sad...
She slowly drifted away
and he will always wonder
if there was something he
could have
done
She slowly drifted away
and he will always wonder
if there was something he
could have
done
7th Aug 2017 4:44pm
My Friend..
There are many levels of interpretation to this one...symbolically, metaphorically.....and yet, i can read it as a prologue--perhaps to a longer science fiction short story, or novel. It's your imagery that takes my thoughts down that particular pathway:her body becoming 'transparent', and 'flickering'..being shadowless..and especially your final line. Anyhow, you truly sparked my imagination with this one!
The emotional quality of this piece is palpable!
( indeed--it is a pleasure to find you posting again! I have missed your presence!)
There are many levels of interpretation to this one...symbolically, metaphorically.....and yet, i can read it as a prologue--perhaps to a longer science fiction short story, or novel. It's your imagery that takes my thoughts down that particular pathway:her body becoming 'transparent', and 'flickering'..being shadowless..and especially your final line. Anyhow, you truly sparked my imagination with this one!
The emotional quality of this piece is palpable!
( indeed--it is a pleasure to find you posting again! I have missed your presence!)
12th May 2018 3:18am
Your poems are powerful stuff. This one gave me goose bumps and sweet sadness.
23rd May 2018 8:52pm
