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Points Unknown
Time's winged chariot running late
Pulling up outside my door
The angel crooks her finger, says I know the score
But she's got time for a Cuervo neat
Maybe shoot some pool and the breeze
Her smile loosens to a grin
Her wings unfold, and body gleams
That voice approaching opera trills:
"I cannot be swinging low again
No unscheduled stops for wasted men
But gaze upon this form divine
I will submit to you at the end of the line"
I instruct this vision to make some space
When her chariot swings lower still
I fear to take the ride alone
When it stops at points unknown.
Pulling up outside my door
The angel crooks her finger, says I know the score
But she's got time for a Cuervo neat
Maybe shoot some pool and the breeze
Her smile loosens to a grin
Her wings unfold, and body gleams
That voice approaching opera trills:
"I cannot be swinging low again
No unscheduled stops for wasted men
But gaze upon this form divine
I will submit to you at the end of the line"
I instruct this vision to make some space
When her chariot swings lower still
I fear to take the ride alone
When it stops at points unknown.
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Crow....to be sure--you are truly one of the creative master-crafters of sce'alta fileata dorcha ** , and this piece is another exceptional example of your skill !! I am always intrigued by your ink---pulled deep into the depths of your pieces... and more especially these particular ones.
I am still smiling at your portrayal of the Angel of Death! But... this makes me wonder--was this vision a result of the (poet)/narrator tossing back tequilla straight-shots b e f o r e she made her appearance?? ( lol !) ( Such a wicked libation--just say'in! )
(but....Mo Chara...it will be a very long time--to be sure--before the Angel of Death comes to take you to those "points unkown." xo )
** [ Irish for dark poetic tales.]
I am still smiling at your portrayal of the Angel of Death! But... this makes me wonder--was this vision a result of the (poet)/narrator tossing back tequilla straight-shots b e f o r e she made her appearance?? ( lol !) ( Such a wicked libation--just say'in! )
(but....Mo Chara...it will be a very long time--to be sure--before the Angel of Death comes to take you to those "points unkown." xo )
** [ Irish for dark poetic tales.]
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21st Jun 2017 9:33pm
Thanks Enchantress. I appreciate the confidence about the Angel of Death. Personally, I'd rather have my old Mustang back that receive a ride in that chariot. And regarding tequila: this could be Cuervo talking, or the real thing. I'll leave that up to you.
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a lover once told me that death is a milf, you reminded me of that with poem & i shall thank you for this wistful smile
you are a master of the macabre
xo
you are a master of the macabre
xo
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21st Jun 2017 9:36pm
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Anonymous
18th Jun 2017 00:56am
We know I struggle with interpretation at times but I will say a wasted man you certainly are not and I hope wings continue keeping her high above you. Love you. With much love - Taryn xoxo
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21st Jun 2017 9:38pm
Your interprets are fine, Taryn. I've never noticed you missing my point, anyway. Thank you dear Lady!
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18th Jun 2017 2:42am
Sir Crow your vision of the Angel of Death as a beautiful angel are much more pleasant than my dark visions I think it's safe to say your destination will be in the celestial heavens.. beautiful thought provoking ink..
love Crim
love Crim
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21st Jun 2017 9:40pm
Thank you so much for the sweet words Crim. Not sure I'm a candidate for Heaven, but I'm working on it. Such a long way to go!
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18th Jun 2017 5:56am
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18th Jun 2017 1:15pm
Sometimes pretty things lead you to something not quite beautiful eh. But its company none the less, sooner or later. Good read, Crowfly.
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21st Jun 2017 9:43pm
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Anonymous
19th Jun 2017 2:42am
Wowzers Crow.......what a great ink.....very intriguing.......I'm luvin this.....purple luv & hugs xo :)
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21st Jun 2017 9:45pm
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1st Jul 2017 8:26pm
"No unscheduled stops for wasted men" -- my favorite line. Thank you for sharing your talent.
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