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Dear Vodka
I sipped from your mellow mouth
sought inspiration from your lips
you drank from me instead
left me a lethargic mess
it had been a month
since I walked out on you
I trembled when we met again
so much so
that I spilled
your essence all over the place
it wasn't like it used to be
no orgasmic joy
get shit faced
& then lay it all down
on the page
you made me sweat
as you fucked me
& I didn't even get off
I put your cock revolver
to my mouth
pulled the trigger
& click nothing happened
left with thoughts of pain
I ache from your hand print
across my face
feeling disgraced
just another tramp
you used
then left a human waste
dear vodka
you're a limp dick
with bite & no pleasure
we're done
I was looking to get fucked
& you fucked me over
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Re. Dear Vodka
Anonymous
3rd May 2017 4:24pm
very well expressed, dear Brenda.
I had my stint with this demon too, it has taken down so many.
your pen exposes a place familiar to many and I know it will touch many souls.
thank you for the read.
love xx
I had my stint with this demon too, it has taken down so many.
your pen exposes a place familiar to many and I know it will touch many souls.
thank you for the read.
love xx
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4th May 2017 1:56pm
thank you lovely Miki it's encouraging that you've been there and came out the other side.. I deeply appreciate your thoughts.. love Brenda
Re. Dear Vodka
3rd May 2017 4:25pm
Wow Crim. What an honest write. The most translucent words, the words that leave you naked, I believe are the most beautiful. Thank you for sharing.
Xx
Xx
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4th May 2017 1:57pm
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4th May 2017 1:57pm
Re. Dear Vodka
Anonymous
3rd May 2017 5:11pm
*Ouch!* ...
and cheers
all the way around
for a no-holds-barred
kind of a poem!
I don`t drink
so therefore
I am boring ...
~love you, my Queen
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4th May 2017 1:58pm
never boring my Queen you are truly a beautiful lady and poetess.. thank you for a wonderful comment.. love you.. xo Brenda
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3rd May 2017 5:36pm
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4th May 2017 1:59pm
Re. Dear Vodka
3rd May 2017 6:50pm
That's tellin' the jerk. Be sure and not give the
empty gun another chance at you.There are
others that will give you what you need and
not make you feel like a tramp. Kickass poem!
empty gun another chance at you.There are
others that will give you what you need and
not make you feel like a tramp. Kickass poem!
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Re: Re. Dear Vodka
4th May 2017 2:00pm
thank you dearest Jerry I will do my best to remember how I was hung out to dry.. love Brenda
Re. Dear Vodka
Anonymous
3rd May 2017 7:09pm
Lovely dark angel, only you can make me smile with such a tough piece. You have a way of expression like no other and I enjoy it every time. Telling it to shut up and sit down indeed! ;) Way to go!
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Re: Re. Dear Vodka
4th May 2017 2:01pm
thank you lovely one for embracing me and this write.. I will do just that :) love Crim
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3rd May 2017 10:10pm
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4th May 2017 2:01pm
thank you dearest Whale good to know I'm not the only one that's traveled this road.. love Brenda
Re. Dear Vodka
3rd May 2017 10:55pm
That fucking prick vodka, used to give me crazy headaches, so long ago... I'm a beer drinker now lol excellent spillage my dear!
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4th May 2017 2:02pm
Re. Dear Vodka
3rd May 2017 11:02pm
Vodka was my demon for a long time
Ask my wife people about the Peach Vodka specifically
Not a pretty sight
I'd just like a good night's sleep and my Zen would be A ok
Outstanding tell all ink
X
Ask my wife people about the Peach Vodka specifically
Not a pretty sight
I'd just like a good night's sleep and my Zen would be A ok
Outstanding tell all ink
X
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Re: Re. Dear Vodka
4th May 2017 2:03pm
thank you dearest Poet you always get me I cherish your thoughts.. Zen I too seek this.. love Brenda
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3rd May 2017 11:19pm
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4th May 2017 2:03pm
Re. Dear Vodka
Anonymous
4th May 2017 11:43am
I love vodka and anything else at this point in life;
soooo, you can pass me your glass too and ill toast
the air, pretty lady
"dear vodka
you're a limp dick
with bite & no pleasure
we're done
I was looking to get fucked
& you fucked me over "
soooo, you can pass me your glass too and ill toast
the air, pretty lady
"dear vodka
you're a limp dick
with bite & no pleasure
we're done
I was looking to get fucked
& you fucked me over "
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Re: Re. Dear Vodka
4th May 2017 2:05pm
I hear you lovely lady I had a long time affair with vodka it's just not treating me right anymore.. Cheers beautiful :) love Crim
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4th May 2017 12:23pm
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4th May 2017 2:05pm
Re. Dear Vodka
4th May 2017 5:51pm
I had to quit vodka under duress about three weeks ago, and reading this helps me realize that I'm better off without it. Thank you Lady Crim!
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4th May 2017 6:00pm
thank you Sir Crow I understand I used to drink it morning till the wee hours of the night.. now it just doesn't do it for me anymore.. it makes me feel bad sucks because I really enjoyed it.. love Crim
Re. Dear Vodka
5th May 2017 6:12pm
Alcohol is a vile rapist that does nothing but take: I remember a long time ago sitting in a bar, half baked sipping my 14th rum. A voice in my head said, "what the fuck are you doing?" I had spent £75.00, I was sitting alone and I had nothing to show for it - that was my second turning point and when I realised I could not be trusted to drink safely. It has taken me decades to learn control and now I can have one or two and no more. I wish that for you
It's a struggle but ultimately worth it - excellent ink - 1,000000 ehugs on their way :-)
It's a struggle but ultimately worth it - excellent ink - 1,000000 ehugs on their way :-)
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9th May 2017 11:23am
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6th May 2017 7:14am
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9th May 2017 11:23am
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Anonymous
12th May 2017 11:22am
reading this is a bit like staring at my hypothetical future.. can't imagine the day vodka and i don't do each other right anymore.
anyhoos, my alcoholism aside, the poem is splendid, beautiful one. your imagery always leaves me in awe, even when it's not pretty or flowery, i think especially when it is not... when you are this real and raw i am an absolute voyeur
xo
anyhoos, my alcoholism aside, the poem is splendid, beautiful one. your imagery always leaves me in awe, even when it's not pretty or flowery, i think especially when it is not... when you are this real and raw i am an absolute voyeur
xo
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Re: Re. Dear Vodka
thank you beautiful one yeah it really hurt me that vodka let me down I think I put it's cock revolver to my mouth wrong ltm.. I deeply cherish your thoughts, visits and am humbled.. love you lady.. xo Brenda
Re. Dear Vodka
Anonymous
15th May 2017 2:09am
I hope that my Blackhaus doesn't treat me the same way one day my love...although in afterthought of just saying that, maybe that thought itself is telling me something, lol. Fierce and raw truths here My Beautiful One...you never disappoint when getting in our face.
I love you deeply!
Love - Taryn xoxo
I love you deeply!
Love - Taryn xoxo
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15th May 2017 6:19am
thank you my love for understanding this write so many times my vices have turned ugly on me giving me an adverse feeling.. though I'm not a quitter I just move on to the next one ;) I love you.. xo Brenda
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Anonymous
17th May 2017 4:49am
Brenda.. i truly get this.. you described it as it is.. when you search for a cherry high.. that first time, it never comes back again.. loved this..
Dave
Dave
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Re: Re. Dear Vodka
18th May 2017 00:28am
thank you Dave I knew you would get this yeah it will never be the same this door has closed.. I love you.. xo Brenda