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Drifting
smiles etched in memories
as slumbering thoughts
untethered from depths
of sleep, floating to distant echoes
as slow fingers caressed
rails over shunned imaginings
thrown out by reasonings
sanity fought bravely to survive
there at the edge of the abyss
reaching down to what was
the echo of long ago laughter
whispered hopes spoken words
a name tasted with needy lips
dew drops falling from misty windows
Liquid prayers for a return
to what was...would never be
ascending from dark purgatorial
a pure thought wished
for drought to end at last
for hyacinth lakes to fill
again.
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Re. Drifting
15th Oct 2016 10:30pm
This is lovely but melancholy work for the most part, and there's a hopeful note at the close. Beautifully written. Here's hoping the drought will end.
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16th Oct 2016 5:31am
Thank you Crowfly:) drought might end but not for this lost love. It was just a dream.
Re. Drifting
15th Oct 2016 11:10pm
The imagery strokes all of the senses with a longing for what it seems will never be. But if memories must linger only in the past, make new ones...
JJ
JJ
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Re: Re. Drifting
16th Oct 2016 5:30am
Its over and done with Poetryman.:) just a dream I had about a past love...it was so real...I felt the warmth...almost. Then I woke up...I wish I didn't. I wonder if one can live in a dream forever...:)
Re. Drifting
16th Oct 2016 3:06pm
You can always dream but can't live in it forever my beloved friend...treasure the best moments and live your life the way you want it, not the way others may want you to.
As always, a very good read to ponder on!
As always, a very good read to ponder on!
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Re: Re. Drifting
17th Oct 2016 4:12am
Hi EngrVV...I missed you...:( thank you for reading. It has been a tough year but recovering well.
Re. Drifting
16th Oct 2016 6:30pm
Beautifully written. So many of us have been there before,your words couldn't have described it any better.
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Re. Drifting
31st Oct 2016 7:43am
I think you tell an engaging tale here, establishing a dreamlike quality in the first stanza, that sense of a limbo or dark night of the soul and it follows through on this message adroitly. Enjoyed the beginning, middle and close. Solid work.
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Re: Re. Drifting
31st Oct 2016 3:31pm
Thank you Daniel...it was a waking dream, a memory ...and you got that right. Honoured to have you read me as always.