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If I Didn't Know Better
I would let myself fall, no
dive into love with you
fuck coming up for air
we'd breathe one another
back to life
because we're already drowning
in the day to day mire
of the shit we've been mucking
for so long
that what used to fertilize
our home grounds
now chokes it out
Yes, my dear
I could love you
and that strong back
that just keeps shoveling
except
I'd have to plow your graveyard to do it
and you
you're still feeding the ghosts
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Re. If I Didn't Know Better
16th Aug 2016 3:45pm
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16th Aug 2016 5:50pm
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17th Aug 2016 00:38am
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Re: Re. If I Didn't Know Better
17th Aug 2016 00:44am
Hey there Naajir, thank you for that, it was a visceral write happy to know it comes across that way as a read.
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Re. If I Didn't Know Better
18th Aug 2016 5:38pm
Definitely deep....from both sides....I feel the sentiment you're expressing, but I also know how hungry those ghosts are and how hard it is to wean them....damn.
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Re: Re. If I Didn't Know Better
18th Aug 2016 8:46pm
Weaning only works for babes
Ghosts need to be banished
or they'll suck you dry
Anywhore, thanks for dropping by with your thoughts.
Ghosts need to be banished
or they'll suck you dry
Anywhore, thanks for dropping by with your thoughts.
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18th Aug 2016 11:30pm
Re. If I Didn't Know Better
23rd Aug 2016 3:42am
You write well with clarity and honesty about relationships and I agree with Naajir above that the ending is absolutely terrific. Well done !
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Re: Re. If I Didn't Know Better
30th Aug 2016 6:08pm
Hi ya Tony, sorry I missed this earlier, what a kick ass comment 💋 Thank you doll.
Re. If I Didn't Know Better
21st Dec 2016 9:45am
Outstanding! Love the opening
'Diving into love' sounds so fearless n freein! :) n yea the endin
was like awakin' from a bad dream....
'Diving into love' sounds so fearless n freein! :) n yea the endin
was like awakin' from a bad dream....
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22nd Dec 2016 3:52am
It's best to admit beforehand what a nightmare some dreams would be. Now, if only it were easy...
Re. If I Didn't Know Better
21st Jun 2017 2:18am
This poem's about your love for somebody who can't let go of something himself. That is how I interpret this. It is both sad & powerful.
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