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The West Window
Wooden chimes outside my
window sound memories of
peddlers on the mountain
side, their mules laden with
trappings of nature. Metal
utensils knocking against a
feed strap buckle, silhouettes
blocking the light. Rain sliding
like shale under their hooves
and feet over the slanted surface
of leaves toward the lush green
canyon below; a turbine of wind
blows across a shoreline of lace,
its gust extinguishes a constellation
of tea lighted stars and planets.
This pen, with its extension of
fingers becoming a hermit crab
of words scuttling over the page,
burrowing under cool sheets to
avoid rain and running ink.
Not unlike this swirling debris
that will be integrated into new
surroundings, we are all universal
fragments of dust magnetized
into poetry, music, and the arts.
But, we aren't so splintered apart
that we cannot be re-created
as beautiful mosaics reflecting
each other's cracked light
as though formed as one piece
never separated to begin with.
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24th May 2016 5:51pm
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24th May 2016 5:59pm
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24th May 2016 6:02pm
can hear the ramble of the mule train,
it's a vivid, dramatic image,
hinting at the history in our craquelure portraits...
it's a vivid, dramatic image,
hinting at the history in our craquelure portraits...
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24th May 2016 6:06pm
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24th May 2016 6:05pm
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25th May 2016 1:55pm
That is a very gracious comment, Sunview. I'm honored
for your time and RL add. No, I'm not published.
for your time and RL add. No, I'm not published.
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Anonymous
24th May 2016 6:10pm
a very philosophical and intellectual piece. I enjoyed the way you tell the story.
you're a really good writer, Ahavati.
took me to the mountainside and reminded my soul of something. :)
thanks
you're a really good writer, Ahavati.
took me to the mountainside and reminded my soul of something. :)
thanks
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25th May 2016 1:41pm
Thank you, Miki. Triggering a soul-memory is one
of the highest compliments I could receive.
of the highest compliments I could receive.
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I really like this poem. I like the rhythm and flow of this poem. You are very talented.
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24th May 2016 6:31pm
One word comes to mind...exquisite. That's all, I have no other adequate words. Love this!
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25th May 2016 1:43pm
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24th May 2016 10:12pm
Wonderful ink as always. " we are all universal
fragments of dust magnetized
into poetry, music, and the arts." Being the part that I resonate with most strongly.
fragments of dust magnetized
into poetry, music, and the arts." Being the part that I resonate with most strongly.
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25th May 2016 1:46pm
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25th May 2016 4:32am
Another thoughtful piece from you! As it is with most of your stuff I think about it long after reading it. This makes me feel at peace with the world. Not much does. Thank you your writing is beautiful.
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25th May 2016 1:50pm
What an amazingly beautiful comment, Edead. That something I could write
would make another feel at peace in such an unsettled world is humbling.
Thank you always for your time and attention.
would make another feel at peace in such an unsettled world is humbling.
Thank you always for your time and attention.
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25th May 2016 8:34am
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I agree with all that has been said in this deep poem.and the manner of the writing which is easy to read, an essential of all writing;. poetry and substance well matched.
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Anonymous
25th May 2016 7:04pm
The last verse pulls it all together so beautifully.
We are all the same, reflecting same needs, desires and goals, if only we could remember it to put differences aside, the world would be a better place.
We are all the same, reflecting same needs, desires and goals, if only we could remember it to put differences aside, the world would be a better place.
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26th May 2016 2:46pm
Yes; what a beautiful mosaic we'd make.
It's the differences that accentuate the
pattern of colors. How boring it would
be, to be all the same.
Thank you for your lovely comment.
Nice to see you back.
It's the differences that accentuate the
pattern of colors. How boring it would
be, to be all the same.
Thank you for your lovely comment.
Nice to see you back.
Re. The West Window
25th May 2016 8:48pm
Seeing thru your west window
is an honouring view darling
Ahavati.
Absolutely love the zenith then
the fall melancholy feeling but
it brings peace over all..
Adorn'd always
-Howlings
is an honouring view darling
Ahavati.
Absolutely love the zenith then
the fall melancholy feeling but
it brings peace over all..
Adorn'd always
-Howlings
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26th May 2016 2:43pm
It is extremely peaceful and balanced. I guard
who I allow to enter my home that it stay such.
I am happy you garnered such from this.
Balance is a steady caterpillar wave of cresting
zenith and melancholy trough. I believe it's
how we learn to trust the depths and not
hold onto the rise. But, just ride. Ride.
Thank you for your wise discernment.
Always a pleasure.
who I allow to enter my home that it stay such.
I am happy you garnered such from this.
Balance is a steady caterpillar wave of cresting
zenith and melancholy trough. I believe it's
how we learn to trust the depths and not
hold onto the rise. But, just ride. Ride.
Thank you for your wise discernment.
Always a pleasure.
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26th May 2016 2:11am
But, we aren't so splintered apart
that we cannot be re-created
as beautiful mosaics reflecting
each other's cracked light
as though formed as one piece
never separated to begin with.
KINTSUGI Is the Japanese art of repairing broken pottery with gold and silver lacquers, believing that the breaks being highlighted make the piece more beautiful... I wrote a sonnet about it once
geoff
that we cannot be re-created
as beautiful mosaics reflecting
each other's cracked light
as though formed as one piece
never separated to begin with.
KINTSUGI Is the Japanese art of repairing broken pottery with gold and silver lacquers, believing that the breaks being highlighted make the piece more beautiful... I wrote a sonnet about it once
geoff
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26th May 2016 3:11pm
I'm aware of Kintsugi and have actually written about it.
I was thinking more of a mosaic, a ceramic tile or mural
where each individual piece shines of its own merit and
completes the image as a whole vs.fine metal accentuating
the repair of a broken whole.
Thank you for your comment.
I was thinking more of a mosaic, a ceramic tile or mural
where each individual piece shines of its own merit and
completes the image as a whole vs.fine metal accentuating
the repair of a broken whole.
Thank you for your comment.
Re. The West Window
26th May 2016 3:53pm
another beauty from a beauty..............
i should be glad only you & 2-3 others ever read my stuff...
couldn't keep up wit a fanbase like yours
i should be glad only you & 2-3 others ever read my stuff...
couldn't keep up wit a fanbase like yours
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