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Crumbs in the Cookie Jar
Is there a morsel not previously bitten?
I'm spooning out the cookie jar to rechew the crumbs
That crumbled from the edges of my slippery lips
While I was stuffing too many in my running mouth
Spewing rhymes I could not swallow whole
And now there's nothing I can sink my teeth into
Nothing I haven't comprehensively penned
While no one is listening, why bother imagining more metaphors?
Writing poems for the blind whose eyes see perfectly fine
But somewhere along the line they lose their inner focus
Scrambling my words in a mixing bowl without a recipe
So now the empty bowl overflows with sugary half-baked dough
As the lonely baker prepares cookie cutter similes
I realize I've plagiarized my whole life in redundant imagery
Regurgitating the same old verse I vomited a dozen clichés ago
Reheating leftover ballads never read beyond my bedroom door
Perhaps the time has come to retire my bleeding quill
For the chasm within this heavy heart wells no healing ink
Left for the broken bard's dying muse to divergently spill
I'm spooning out the cookie jar to rechew the crumbs
That crumbled from the edges of my slippery lips
While I was stuffing too many in my running mouth
Spewing rhymes I could not swallow whole
And now there's nothing I can sink my teeth into
Nothing I haven't comprehensively penned
While no one is listening, why bother imagining more metaphors?
Writing poems for the blind whose eyes see perfectly fine
But somewhere along the line they lose their inner focus
Scrambling my words in a mixing bowl without a recipe
So now the empty bowl overflows with sugary half-baked dough
As the lonely baker prepares cookie cutter similes
I realize I've plagiarized my whole life in redundant imagery
Regurgitating the same old verse I vomited a dozen clichés ago
Reheating leftover ballads never read beyond my bedroom door
Perhaps the time has come to retire my bleeding quill
For the chasm within this heavy heart wells no healing ink
Left for the broken bard's dying muse to divergently spill
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Re. Crumbs in the Cookie Jar
26th Apr 2016 8:54pm
JJ feeling your pain though you must keep writing it's what we do and I hope you realize even though we haven't always agreed you are indeed loved..
love Brenda
love Brenda
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Re: Re. Crumbs in the Cookie Jar
26th Apr 2016 9:10pm
My goodness... I barely blinked and I had 3 comments before I could respond to the first... thank you for the love and encouraging words Brenda! I was in a rut and feeling trapped. Suddenly my tow trucks are pulling me out of the gutter...
JJ
JJ
Re. Crumbs in the Cookie Jar
26th Apr 2016 8:58pm
" realize I've plagiarized my whole life in redundant imagery
Regurgitating the same old verse I vomited a dozen donuts ago
Reheating leftover poems never read beyond my bedroom door "
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This ^^^^^^^^^^^ was gut wrenching, raw truth of your emotions, and mine.
"Perhaps the time has come to retire my bleeding quill
For the emptiness within my heart contains no healing ink
Left for the broken poet's dying muse to spill"
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.....don't do it!^^^^^^ beautifully designed lines by the way, but..... don't you dare let your pen get dusty. xo
Regurgitating the same old verse I vomited a dozen donuts ago
Reheating leftover poems never read beyond my bedroom door "
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
This ^^^^^^^^^^^ was gut wrenching, raw truth of your emotions, and mine.
"Perhaps the time has come to retire my bleeding quill
For the emptiness within my heart contains no healing ink
Left for the broken poet's dying muse to spill"
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
.....don't do it!^^^^^^ beautifully designed lines by the way, but..... don't you dare let your pen get dusty. xo
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Re: Re. Crumbs in the Cookie Jar
I'm not sure if there is an opposite metaphor for vultures circling over a dying carcass, but if there is, it must be guardian angels watching over me in my time of need. You lift my spirits from an avalanche of despair!
Thank you Tara, my dear friend!
JJ
Thank you Tara, my dear friend!
JJ
Re: Re. Crumbs in the Cookie Jar
9th May 2016 00:52am
FYI: did some editing to several lines that I felt needed upgrading, some you quoted.
JJ
JJ
Re: Re. Crumbs in the Cookie Jar
23rd May 2016 1:42am
Just now seeing the comment response notification.
“I vomited a dozen clichés ago & Reheating leftover ballads”<---I wish I had thought of that. :)
“For the chasm within this heavy heart wells no healing ink
Left for the broken bard's dying muse to divergently spill” <---- really love the editing of this ink. xo
“I vomited a dozen clichés ago & Reheating leftover ballads”<---I wish I had thought of that. :)
“For the chasm within this heavy heart wells no healing ink
Left for the broken bard's dying muse to divergently spill” <---- really love the editing of this ink. xo
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Re. Crumbs in the Cookie Jar
Anonymous
26th Apr 2016 9:01pm
Say it aint so joe! You are a poet of the highest order Poetryman, dont give up on yourself!
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Re: Re. Crumbs in the Cookie Jar
26th Apr 2016 9:24pm
Speaking of guardian angels Angel, thank you for making the Trinity of friends complete with grappling hooks... it makes me feel loved when those I care for fill my lungs with oxygen when I was suffocating in a creative vacuum.
JJ
JJ
Re. Crumbs in the Cookie Jar
26th Apr 2016 9:18pm
No, no, no...you mustn't put down that quill, it is part of who you are...there are times we all feel this way...
Just because you may not get responses to your poetry...it in no way means you are not well read... I truly hope you remain with us...
cookie crumbles and all !!
Just because you may not get responses to your poetry...it in no way means you are not well read... I truly hope you remain with us...
cookie crumbles and all !!
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Re: Re. Crumbs in the Cookie Jar
26th Apr 2016 9:33pm
Ok ok ok Jemac! Lol, I can't keep up with the comments already. If I knew all I had to do was say I was going to retire to get the fastest responses ever, I'd write it into all of my poems, lolol... not really, but holy crap that was like an injection of adrenaline to get my heart beating after going into cardiac arrest... thanks for joining the choir!
JJ
JJ
Re. Crumbs in the Cookie Jar
26th Apr 2016 11:25pm
If this is really you I am sorry you feel that way and you're wrong - I find your writing inspirational and it has had me writing new works inspired by your words numerous times - sometimes I feel like this, when i get few comments, or never seem to win a competition, but then somebody sends an inspirational message and all of a sudden I am all better again - keep the faith, you are a teriffic writer and I would miss you if you retired
awaiting your next masterpiece :-)
awaiting your next masterpiece :-)
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Re: Re. Crumbs in the Cookie Jar
27th Apr 2016 00:20am
Ya mean this wasn't a masterpiece? Wwhhhaaaaaaa wwhhaaa!!! Lol!
I feel like I got caught with my hand in the cookie jar... I guess you told me.
I feel better now, thank you David!
JJ
I feel like I got caught with my hand in the cookie jar... I guess you told me.
I feel better now, thank you David!
JJ
Re: Re. Crumbs in the Cookie Jar
28th Apr 2016 8:54pm
Re. Crumbs in the Cookie Jar
26th Apr 2016 11:37pm
There are many beautiful words still within, waiting for you to voice them. I, for one, look forward to reading each one. ☺ Willow
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Re: Re. Crumbs in the Cookie Jar
27th Apr 2016 00:27am
Re. Crumbs in the Cookie Jar
Hey you, I'll fix everything. I'll be marchin' double-time, to you door and have a truck of Famour Amos backed up to your window, and you'll soon have a truckload of bags of choccie chip knee high in your home, and I'll read you sweet poetry while we toast with glasses of cold milk!
Jadey🍪
Jadey🍪
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Re: Re. Crumbs in the Cookie Jar
27th Apr 2016 2:40am
Ahh yes, a woman who knows that the way to a man's stomach is through his heart... lol
Re. Crumbs in the Cookie Jar
Anonymous
28th Apr 2016 00:13am
JJ. . .I hope this isn't the end 'cause I'm going to be pissed!. . .~xo, Devlin.
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Re: Re. Crumbs in the Cookie Jar
28th Apr 2016 1:03am
Oh Lyn, I think "it's just a passing faze, one of my bad days...." I get in my moods now and then. I'm sure my muse will rab me by the scruff of my neck and shake a poem out of me before I know what's happening... thanks for commenting!
JJ
JJ
Re. Crumbs in the Cookie Jar
28th Apr 2016 00:56am
JJ, I could feel this deeply. Keep up the awesome writing. You are a great Poet. <3
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28th Apr 2016 1:05am
Re. Crumbs in the Cookie Jar
1st May 2016 9:14pm
Sir, keep writing! If I only could, I'd send tons of freshly-baked cookies, cream puffs and hugs to you! (Don't worry, I'd be an official certified baker later, they'd be decent, haha) I'd even send Pooh over. :) Your words give me solace and I'm sure other people could feel that solace too. You're too awesome to stop writing...
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Re: Re. Crumbs in the Cookie Jar
1st May 2016 10:12pm
YES Mam! Thank you for the extra sweetness in my cookies n hugs!
That was a very sugary comment. I think I'm going into diabetic shock... lol
jj
That was a very sugary comment. I think I'm going into diabetic shock... lol
jj