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Blood Lust..
She stabbed him 40 times in the heart..She felt no remorse or regret..Instead she felt utterly pure satisfaction & happiness..She stood and looked in the mirror, smiling as she loved the sight of being drenched in his bitter sweet blood..She licked his blood from her lips & smiled blissfully..Satisfied with her beautiful work..She doused his body with gasoline & set him on fire..She smiled at the gorgeous flaming sight then vanished..A once sweet angel turned completely wicked & cruel..
*curtsies*
*curtsies*
Published 19th Dec 2015
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19th Dec 2015 11:13pm
You have a good story line here SS but I found too many 'she' off putting...
My apologies but I was urged to reword it and it goes as follows...feel free to use it if you so desire...
'She stabbed him forty times in the heart; felt no remorse or regret just pure satisfaction and happiness. Looking in the mirror, her body drenched in his bittersweet blood she smiled as she licked it from her lips, totally satisfied with her work. Dousing his body in gasoline, flicking the match, she marveled at the flames. A once sweet angel had turned wicked and cruel.'
My apologies but I was urged to reword it and it goes as follows...feel free to use it if you so desire...
'She stabbed him forty times in the heart; felt no remorse or regret just pure satisfaction and happiness. Looking in the mirror, her body drenched in his bittersweet blood she smiled as she licked it from her lips, totally satisfied with her work. Dousing his body in gasoline, flicking the match, she marveled at the flames. A once sweet angel had turned wicked and cruel.'
20th Dec 2015 00:00am
20th Dec 2015 1:01am
As seekingkate stated SimplyScarlet,
the story was wonderful.
You've let out a torrent of, it sounds as
though, much-needed release.
You will find an enormous well of talent
here that is more than willing to assist
you with anything.
Much Enjoyed... Pan
the story was wonderful.
You've let out a torrent of, it sounds as
though, much-needed release.
You will find an enormous well of talent
here that is more than willing to assist
you with anything.
Much Enjoyed... Pan
20th Dec 2015 1:05am
Kinda remind me of the one I just last wrote about good girl going bad. (: welcome to DU and nice write
22nd Dec 2015 1:04am
